Princess Luna, longing for some real company, decides to befriend a young, introverted stallion who she feels is very much like she is herself. Things seem to go well... but could anything go wrong from a Princess befriending a commoner?
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Why do I feel like something bad is going to happen soon.
I got through watching Adam Ruins Everything and I just could NOT unhear that being said by Adam. XP
Very nice! It is funny how a bad thing can lead to something good, doesn't it?
Just look at what I did in my Metal gear story.
Also, think you make a drawing of Lorn Longing?
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Murphy's Law, I suppose?
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Huh, that's actually pretty interesting!
*Sees your username and profile pic* I see you're one of culture as well.
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Yeah, that's life for ya!
Indeed. I believe it means one cannot achieve true happiness without knowing true sorrow.
If I recall correctly, there is a vector of him in Chapter 14.
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Indeed.
Ah, right. You just described him as if he ws never mentioned before
To the author - blueblood's reaction was perfect and props to celestia for shutting him down!
omg...you've brought twilight, the mane six, spike and starlight glimmer into your story
wow the ponies against aversion came back only to be arrested
totally didn't see Avery's real father to show up that something was an unexcepted twist
have we reached the end?
Missing space.
Other what?
Is that supposed to be ‘repercussions’?
Missing space.
Also, I only found this out myself not so long ago, but it is apparently ‘Chrysalis's’, since the S after the apostrophe being removed only counts for plural possessive forms.
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Twilight and the others all appeared in earlier chapters. Did you, by chance, skip ahead?
And no, the story isn't over yet. I have one more chapter planned.
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Yeah, there was a pretty severe formatting error when I copied the text into the website to upload.
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No! i'm pretty decent/observant reader it could be from reading too many stories (written by other people on here!) my memory is hazy or just didn't noticed them at all. you said ''one more chapter'' oh what a relief
I gave this story a lot of flack, but this is awesome. These guys have such big balls that they'll storm into the home of the pony goddesses themselves to beard their own deities over a perceived injustice and damn the consequences. This is legitimately an epic moment, a showdown between the weak but defiant against the strong but complacent.
I only have to ask why in Tartarus it's given to the villains.
Also this:
Dude has a squad of armed guards and his eternal god-ruler drop in on him. Does he beg and wheedle? Does he bow and scrape? Does he whine and plead? No, he tells them to buck off. Why are the bad guys the only characters with any guts in this fic?
The alleged protagonist should be the one making these confrontations. These should be his moments to show how much he's grown as a character. But it's still his rich girlfriend and her minions who fight all his battles for him while he hides behind her figurative skirt. How can he be the "Alicorn of Perservance" when there are greater acts of perseverance happening right in front of him performed by one-note villains, no less?
One more thing:
I assumed he rented the house he lived in - itself an extravagance compared to an apartment - and that he had to do the maintenance on account of having a terrible landlord. But no, he was a homeowner with no debt. That makes him considerably wealthier than the average reader of this story.
Owning property meant he had capital. He could've rented out part or all of the house. He could've sold it, moved into a cheaper apartment and used the money to better himself. Alternatively, he could've gotten a second mortgage. Hell, he could've used that garden of his to grow something worth selling.
The point is, he was never trapped in a dead end job. He had options and opportunities, but chose not to pursue them. He was never actually pitiable, only pathetic.
Again, I have to ask, "Why?"
Actually, one more thing. This bit, all the way back from the beginning:
Well, Aversion? Now you're the one in the castle with a carefree life. Do you still care about justice?