Don't you Cry, we are all here for you and so is Luna. I guess his Crush was just Surprised, she isn't mean.

Just to Point it out

Regardless, Star Buck did not look please.

Pleased

"What kind of heartless mare would turn down such a kind stallion like that!?" she asked out loud.

I wasn'T sure what to say at first, but I guess since she probably knows how he has to feel, she should have solved the situation better.

Luna, overwhelmed with horror at the stallion's self-destructive thoughts, could not restrain herself any longer.

Maybe I was reading to fast, but is she reading his mind? Normally this would be something I dislike, since he doesn't knows about it and stuff, but it feels okay here.

Couldn't she teleport him?

Well it was nice enough, but I admit I was reading a bit fast again this time.

She let him down hard....also, how in Equestria's name is Star Buck able to treat him like that? Does she do that with everypony who works there

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Thanks for pointing that out for me!

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Your welcome.

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I like to think that maybe Aversion was just talking to himself about planning his own suicide. Also, it will be explained in the story as to why Luna can't teleport him from a long distance.

I'm glad you like it, and thanks for following, as always!

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Sadly, there are some bosses who like to play favorites. I imagine Star Buck is one of them, especially since baristas sometimes face these types of individuals.

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I planned to answer a different comment, but I wanted to make sure I understood which translation for "needy" was used here.

I understood the "he needs help all the time" meaning was the right one, but I noticed there is the more sexual translation for this too.
I wasn't so sure about this word anymore and wanted to make sure I translated it right, rarely I still have those words that still are a bit of a problem.

While I understood her a tiny bit, I thought that she probably knows how little self-assurance he has and how bad he is treated. Because of that I think she was rather mean and probably even more mean if she meant the sexual translation, which for now I don't believe.

I don't want to argue with the other guy to much, but I was curious why he thought Aversion was needy. So far he is only wishing for something good to happen and if everyone is mean to him and keeps him little or how you say it (keeping him in a situation where he can't change or get better), then I don't think he is to blame.

Well okay he wasn't nice or whatever you want to call it as well like Luna said it, but he had it bad and I still think she maybe should know it already.

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Thanks! I appreciate your enthusiasm!

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Keep in mind, this isn't the first time it's happened to Aversion. He has never been accepted by a mare in his life. Plus, his life in the trenches has only made him even more depressed. How else was he supposed to react?

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Of course Suncrest was free to make her own choice. Aversion even acknowledged this. But are you claiming Aversion has no right to feel upset about his place in life?

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Yeah well i don't think that he is going to kill himself for not having a girlfriend, if you watched everything, then I think it should be clear that the problem for him is deeper and something pyschological and that is not always easy to handle.

edit: as far as I have seen it, the story/ Luna only says she could have acted differently and with more care I guess. No one is suggesting she couldn't have said no. I personally felt as if she blamed him for things he hasn't really done or what he doesn't meant to be, she could have been more carefull about it I suppose.

And Luna, she's not angry about how he was rejected, she's angry he was rejected at all. Because, again, doesn't Suncrest get a say in this? Why is her opinion worth less than Aversion's?

No, I think she was angry about how he was rejected, at least I remember that she said something that made it more obvious that she had such a thought.
I think it was something like "how could she".....okay, at least she could have been nicer about it"

Moreover, why does Luna think he's kind? She only saw his nightmares, and then she saw him essentially saying "screw you" to a girl because she wouldn't be his girlfriend. What of this screams kindness to anyone?

Well I don't think he is at least going to be a complete asshole when he was bullied like that.

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Also, keep in mind, Suncrest rejecting him was not the lone reason he considered suicide. He is poor, barely able to pay for the cost of living in Ponyville, he is harassed and bullied by his boss and coworkers, and has been experiencing this since childhood, and... something happened to his mother, which will be explained.

His life is really at a very low point, and to him, there is no sign of it getting better soon. He just wants somepony who really cares about him to help him feel better.

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However, after reading deep into his heart and memories... she realized that he was hurt. Like, really hurt. This was not the first time this has happened to him. Plus, it was not the only pain he had been subjected to throughout his life...

Okay it's different, but that was the moment, where I felt as if she understood something.
After reading it again however, this is not telling me anything else than the opinion I had on this, she could have been nicer about it.

she also blames Suncrest for not knowing everything going on in Aversions's mind, something only Luna knows because she can somehow read all his thoughts and memories in this story.

Not exactly, she maybe blames her for acting the way she did without taking into account how he maybe feels or how this would effect him, afterall I still believe as his coworker and it looked like she was talking with him often enough, she could know a bit about him.

That's a shortcut from meaningful character development, though. "Bad childhood" isn't a character trait.

sometimes I would agree with you, but there is not always the time to go trough the whole childhood and then start here. Yes I had enough stories that had so bad, bad, bad pasts, but here it felt alright.

Granted that you made me notice that I got one fact wrong, I still don't think that everyone is trying to make her look like the bad guy and I'm still not seeing how this should make him needy, it's a understandable reaction.

So how does Luna know he's kind? The only thing she's seen him do was panic in his dream, be sad, and that interaction with Suncrest.

Look again at the sentence you took out of my comment. Yep she saw his dream and I think she was following at least his last day or maybe a few more, she probably can guess that he is no asshole even if he could be a little bit mean, but no true asshole.

That's a shortcut from meaningful character development, though. "Bad childhood" isn't a character trait.

I still feel like you are missunderstanding the point there. No it isn't a character trait, but in chase you didn't had it that bad in your childhood, people can't always turn out normal when they had a past like that and we got at least shown a few examples on how they treat him.

No matter how much sense it makes to believe otherwise, if he get's told this and that the whole time and has no one else who is supporting him, he will feel bad and not everyone can not let it go as far as wanting to take their own life.

There's a difference between feeling sorry for someone, rationalising their behaviour, and outright denial.

1. I don't think they both can work there without her noticing something is wrong with him, or she never really understood that people don't exactly like getting treated like that.
2.

"...No offense, but... you've just seemed so..." Suncrest briefly trailed off. "...needy."

That sentence and I believe I translated it right or get the meaning right, was kind of uncalled for, she could have reacted differently. That alone is something where I could understand why he could and maybe should react a bit angry.

3.

"...Just forget I asked." He said. "I won't waste even a millisecond more of your life... because your time is clearly very important to you... and I am apparently just not worth it."

From what he could have said that wasn't exactly mean was it?, this is more his frustration I believe and I don't think they told him something like this for the first time.

I just don't see how you can think of him as needy there. Even if you don't want to see her behavior as mean, I can't find the moment where he comes of as needy. He is just deeply hurt and of course he tries to get friends and stuff.
He tried the last time to maybe get some friendship/love to work and got "this here".

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And all that's fair, but I am worried your story is going to fall into the trap I outlined above.

I guess it will work for enough different people. It sounds to me as if your saying that was the stories downfall.

and pretending Aversion isn't what he is simply because his life sucked.

again what? I get the feeling you didn't had it bad yourself or don't know people that feel that bad.

Zephyr Breeze

They are far from being the same character, but i get the feeling you went down the "mary sue" route when reading his past.

You must learn to love yourself first, Ave.

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I actually don't buy the whole "gotta love yourself before someone else loves you." I know many people (myself included) who have been appreciated and accepted by others before doing the same for ourselves. Also, many people seem to have different definitions of "love" as well. Idk, personally, I find that blanket statement to not hold much water.