I'll admit that with the lack of Lust-on-dragon content, I was a little less enthusiastic to read the next chapter (only a little!), but the first paragraph being a description of Trixie's great and powerful backside got me hooked all over again. And since I'm always interested in seeing a more optimistic interpretation of events after Ponyville, everything that followed was refreshing to read. I especially love how the fight played out. Her sudden reappearance and willingness to engage in combat were almost cheer-worthy. Gave me the same kind of thrill I got from watching my favorite shows or movies that had unique characters and chance match-ups in them, like X-Men, DBZ, and Godzilla (those all being very general comparisons).
You write action pretty well, but you should probably break up those walls of text. I'm used to it by now, but it might be a good idea anyway.
1408705 Thanks, I definitely enjoy writing battle scenes. Nothing quite compares to writing how pony A presses their hoof on pony B's neck and snaps it with an ungodly crunch. It's just plain fun.
1416084 I can't apologize enough for the the lack of lusty dragon love, it brings all of us great sadness . As for Trixie, I definitely enjoyed writing her in this chapter. She always seemed to me the jerk who, despite everything, will still stand for what's right at the very end, especially if she has an emotional attachment to it.
I've actually decided to take the route of most writers on this site and put gaps between paragraphs. It can be quite the eyesore to just see text after text with no discernible gaps. They should all be modified soon.
Oh no, Trixie hurt herself in her confusion! Trixie fainted!
I liked how you had Logic refuse to sacrifice Mute, even though it would have been the logical thing to do.
So Morality stopped Anger from finishing off Trixie. Morality's good half was obviously in control for this.
Hope this isn't the last we'll be seeing of Trixie.
I wonder if Mute is going to be wondering if she might be better off with Logic, who let herself receive grievous injuries to protect one of her enemies, over Anger, who would have killed Mute if Logic hadn't allowed herself to take the hit?
LMFAO at how accurately Duncan was able to analyze the situation while he was too drunk to see straight!
WELP
*silently waits for more*
I'd just like to say, you're fucking awesome at battle scenes
Hammer Smashed Face - Cannibal Corpse
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I'll admit that with the lack of Lust-on-dragon content, I was a little less enthusiastic to read the next chapter (only a little!), but the first paragraph being a description of Trixie's great and powerful backside got me hooked all over again. And since I'm always interested in seeing a more optimistic interpretation of events after Ponyville, everything that followed was refreshing to read. I especially love how the fight played out. Her sudden reappearance and willingness to engage in combat were almost cheer-worthy. Gave me the same kind of thrill I got from watching my favorite shows or movies that had unique characters and chance match-ups in them, like X-Men, DBZ, and Godzilla (those all being very general comparisons).
You write action pretty well, but you should probably break up those walls of text. I'm used to it by now, but it might be a good idea anyway.
Trixie used Thundershock! It's super-effective!
1408705 Thanks, I definitely enjoy writing battle scenes. Nothing quite compares to writing how pony A presses their hoof on pony B's neck and snaps it with an ungodly crunch. It's just plain fun.
1411063 Glad you enjoyed it
1416084 I can't apologize enough for the the lack of lusty dragon love, it brings all of us great sadness . As for Trixie, I definitely enjoyed writing her in this chapter. She always seemed to me the jerk who, despite everything, will still stand for what's right at the very end, especially if she has an emotional attachment to it.
I've actually decided to take the route of most writers on this site and put gaps between paragraphs. It can be quite the eyesore to just see text after text with no discernible gaps. They should all be modified soon.
Oh no, Trixie hurt herself in her confusion! Trixie fainted!
I liked how you had Logic refuse to sacrifice Mute, even though it would have been the logical thing to do.
So Morality stopped Anger from finishing off Trixie. Morality's good half was obviously in control for this.
Hope this isn't the last we'll be seeing of Trixie.
I wonder if Mute is going to be wondering if she might be better off with Logic, who let herself receive grievous injuries to protect one of her enemies, over Anger, who would have killed Mute if Logic hadn't allowed herself to take the hit?
LMFAO at how accurately Duncan was able to analyze the situation while he was too drunk to see straight!