So now we get the battle of Logic, Lust, Creativity and eventually Morality vs Anger.
Then, just as Anger is about to kill Logic, she gets told to stop by Mute, who we then find out is really Private Indigo Breeze of the Royal Canterlot Guard.
Indigo calms Anger down, only for Creativity to pull the inevitable Face Heel Turn and reveal that everything that happened only occurred because she engineered things to happen that way before using a spell and Celestia (who is still drugged and helpless) to turn herself into an alicorn.
Then Anger does a Heel Face Turn and joins Logic Lust, Morality, the remaining bearers of the Elements of Harmony, and Shining Armor to help fight against Creativity.
1777434 In the last previous chapter when Luna and Celestia are having tea there's a short sentence that explains that Luna was about to go on diplomacy mission. Right now she's somewhere out of Equestria, listening to politics and blissfully unaware of the shit that's going down right now.
1778692 Unfortunately half the castle doesn't even know what's happening. Though I'm sure that Shining Armor sent a distress call out as soon as the Elements explained the situation, who knows if she'll receive it in time.
It was a really neat idea, having different parts of Twilight's personality working together like they would in the mind of a single pony. Creativity and Logic dealing with the unpleasant results of Anger, like the right and left sides of the brain keeping base instincts in check.
I also just now noticed that your paragraph layout is in shipshape. But there are still some flaws here and there. One occurs at a rather dramatic moment:
I don’t the fragments!
Forgot to add “need” in there.
“Anger… you, you save me.”
“saved”
Creativity’s got no ideas to let any of live
“us”
There are more within the chapter, but those one all take place at the end while everyone's switching allegiances and gearing up for one big motherfckr of a showdown, and are therefore the ones that really distract from the drama.
So now we get the battle of Logic, Lust, Creativity and eventually Morality vs Anger.
Then, just as Anger is about to kill Logic, she gets told to stop by Mute, who we then find out is really Private Indigo Breeze of the Royal Canterlot Guard.
Indigo calms Anger down, only for Creativity to pull the inevitable Face Heel Turn and reveal that everything that happened only occurred because she engineered things to happen that way before using a spell and Celestia (who is still drugged and helpless) to turn herself into an alicorn.
Then Anger does a Heel Face Turn and joins Logic Lust, Morality, the remaining bearers of the Elements of Harmony, and Shining Armor to help fight against Creativity.
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I want another chapter...........pwease.
Where the hell is Luna!
1774124 That was indeed an adequate summary of the chapter... hell I wish I could condense things down like that.
1774184 All in good time
1777434 In the last previous chapter when Luna and Celestia are having tea there's a short sentence that explains that Luna was about to go on diplomacy mission. Right now she's somewhere out of Equestria, listening to politics and blissfully unaware of the shit that's going down right now.
1778675 No one sent her notice?
1778692 Unfortunately half the castle doesn't even know what's happening. Though I'm sure that Shining Armor sent a distress call out as soon as the Elements explained the situation, who knows if she'll receive it in time.
1778675 That Creativity. She just had to go and pull a Heel Face Revolving Door
Here's hoping Indigo prevents Anger from pulling that same crap move.
Also, what effect will Creativity using Celestia to become an alicorn have on the Solar Princess?
It was a really neat idea, having different parts of Twilight's personality working together like they would in the mind of a single pony. Creativity and Logic dealing with the unpleasant results of Anger, like the right and left sides of the brain keeping base instincts in check.
I also just now noticed that your paragraph layout is in shipshape. But there are still some flaws here and there. One occurs at a rather dramatic moment:
Forgot to add “need” in there.
“saved”
“us”
There are more within the chapter, but those one all take place at the end while everyone's switching allegiances and gearing up for one big motherfckr of a showdown, and are therefore the ones that really distract from the drama.
1785526 Thanks for pointing out those mistakes, they should be fixed now.
I noticed a few places in which you used the wrong word.
"conscience"
"breathes"
"bear"
1800575 Thank you for pointing those out ! Stupid homophones, making writing all difficult!