From your warning, I expected sex. What I got, was the equivalent to an orgy. And you know what? I was laughing the entire way (because reading porn is somehow funny to me).
Well, I expected something like this to happen. Either you were going to write the Lust-on-dragon scene I'd been hoping for, or you would allude to it while taking the story in whatever direction you had already decided upon. You can imagine how excited I was when Lust teleported to the library, but when Spike escaped, my reaction was: "...DAMMIT, SPIKE!" Either way, it's your story and I can't complain. Oh, well, at least we got to see her chase him. That was fun.
So, two whole chapters have gone by without any fragments being captured. And we still have fifteen on the loose (well, thirteen if you count the ones who're behaving themselves ... Curiosity's little adventure notwithstanding). Those ponies had better start thinning them out.
1360888 If you can't laugh at explicit sexual content then what can you laugh at?
1362291 For what's it's worth, I am sorry. I had to think about this chapter, about who would get the 'Lust treatment'. Obviously I couldn't please everyone, so I opted for the basic default to avoid AxB shipping fights that sometimes ensue in clopfic comments (Also, who doesn't love Twilight on Twilight?). Anyway, you're right about them needing to pick up the pace with those fragments. Unfortunately, (Spoiler Alert!), the next chapter isn't going to result in the capture of any fragments either. Lastly, there are only fourteen fragments left (counting Logic and Curiosity). The first fragment to escape Twilight, Memory, is dead.
From your warning, I expected sex. What I got, was the equivalent to an orgy. And you know what? I was laughing the entire way (because reading porn is somehow funny to me).
Well, I expected something like this to happen. Either you were going to write the Lust-on-dragon scene I'd been hoping for, or you would allude to it while taking the story in whatever direction you had already decided upon. You can imagine how excited I was when Lust teleported to the library, but when Spike escaped, my reaction was: "...DAMMIT, SPIKE!" Either way, it's your story and I can't complain. Oh, well, at least we got to see her chase him. That was fun.
So, two whole chapters have gone by without any fragments being captured. And we still have fifteen on the loose (well, thirteen if you count the ones who're behaving themselves ... Curiosity's little adventure notwithstanding). Those ponies had better start thinning them out.
1360493 And what a marvelous end it was.
1360888 If you can't laugh at explicit sexual content then what can you laugh at?
1362291 For what's it's worth, I am sorry. I had to think about this chapter, about who would get the 'Lust treatment'. Obviously I couldn't please everyone, so I opted for the basic default to avoid AxB shipping fights that sometimes ensue in clopfic comments (Also, who doesn't love Twilight on Twilight?). Anyway, you're right about them needing to pick up the pace with those fragments. Unfortunately, (Spoiler Alert!), the next chapter isn't going to result in the capture of any fragments either. Lastly, there are only fourteen fragments left (counting Logic and Curiosity). The first fragment to escape Twilight, Memory, is dead.
Touching Tongues - Steve Vai
1378623 Only the nastiest for my dear readers
1811333 No. Well, not an intentional reference anyway.
Curiosity tongue was lolled out of her mouth as her lust had overtaken her
* Curiosity's
* was -> had means you are changing tense in the middle of the sentence. this is bizarre and causes my brain to fall in a hole.
And plenty of other grammatical errors, in most chapters. While it's well -written-, this story needs editing.