jesus, took forever to get the time to type this. I keep noticing that Logic will occasionaly breake the fourth wall. How can she do that? There must be some logical explination.
1094578 It's simple really, because she embodies just logic and intelligence her brain focuses on these traits making her smarter than almost everyone else and giving her semi-omnipotent deduction. She was able to figure that she is in a fictional story.
1095822 What's left? I guess any of her psyche that didn't escape is still in there (But she'd be unstable and certainly crazy if Logic hadn't frozen her). As for your second question: I plan for Logic to explain it in the next chapter.
1104064 Thanks, and your right. Creativity does like progress. Just don't call her sadistic because, you know, she's totally not.
I would've asked if there's a graph somewhere that matches each part of the psyche with its respective color, but then I remembered from that mention of Twilight's sex drive that you're keeping much of your cards close to the vest. Too bad, since one thing I enjoyed while watching both Fullmetal Alchemist series was counting down the villains as they were defeated one-by-one. And speaking of ... that particular part of Twilight's personality, I'd like to entertain the possibility that Creativity might have some inventive ways to pass the time with her new toy. She's got him completely at her mercy, so why not?
I was on the fence about reading this fanfic at the beginning, so now I'm pretty darn glad for giving it a shot. It's so interesting and entertaining. But I do have two complaints: one is the way you're representing Trixie. Sure, this personality is 100% canon, but there's plenty of room of speculation and insight. Twilight's friends were the ones bad-mouthing her show, so it was actually fairly admirable of her to take them down a notch. Humiliating the yellow mare in this chapter, who wasn't even saying anything, was just a random act of cruelty. Besides, events in Ponyville would have mellowed her out a bit. But more importantly, the big question is she will contend with a Twilight who's far more furious and uninhibited than the one she knows? She won't be prepared, that's for sure. It would also be nice if Spike were to have more to do in future chapters. Saving Trixie, perhaps? That's probably not at all what you have planned, but I would personally love to see them shipped from time to time.
My second complaint: still no sex drive fragment! Eh, since this probably won't turn into a clopfic, I'll just write my own image of events. Don't tell me if it's similar to what you're planning ... and don't judge me either.
A pink flash surprised the chicken feathers out of Spike, making him drop a ton of books on his foot. Twilight stood behind him wearing a half-lidded expression while trailing her tongue across her lips. "Hey there, Spikey-Wikey."
"Hey Twi, you got a little Pink Eye there ... ohmygosh, you're a fragment!" He ran for the arsenal of capture devices, but Twilight snared him with her magic and teleported them out of the treehouse. They reappeared high up in the sky, Twilight resting hooves-up on a cloud with Spike on top of her. Panicking, Spike scrambled off her stomach, but much to his shock and horror, slipped through the cloud and plunged toward the ground far below. Twilight let his adrenaline reach a satisfactory level before remotely teleporting him several feet above her, letting him slap down on her torso again and wrapping him in a cocoon of legs.
"Cloud-walking spell for me, but none for you," she said cheerily, then added in a breathy voice, "Guess you'd better grab onto me niiiiiice and tight with those short, cute little limbs of yours."
Spike freaked out and scrambled away from that expression on her face, which ironically put him right where Twilight wanted him. She squeezed her thighs to hold him in place and started gyrating her hips. Spike broke free and pushed himself back up to her chest, but she leaned up and kissed him full in the mouth, making him back up again. More hip movement bounced him in place and she smirked at him. "Bow or stern, either way somethin's happening to you."
"Can't you just let me go?" pleaded the partly terrified, partly confused, partly excited dragon who despite the cartoon suggested was definitely old enough for this sort of encounter.
Twilight answered by smooshing his face between her hooves. "I'm excited, I'm wet, and I'm isolated on a high-up cloud where nopony will find me with the adorably scaly little dragon who has no way of stopping me from doing whatever the hay I want to him. Now ... tell Twilight about some of your Rarity fantasies."
1108530 You never know what Creativity will do so... experimentation with her new servant is never out of the question . Speaking of Trixie, I know that I made her seem rather cruel in Creativity's First Day but my belief is that she's not mean it's just part of her act. She gets extra publicity by humiliating ponies and it's not the cruelty she likes it's the attention. Ponyville probably mellowed her out but like any good actor she puts on the mask again and plays her part. And yes, I have every intention of Anger finally meeting Trixie and repaying her for the way she acted... in the traditional style of course . As for who will save her? Maybe she'll surprise all of us and give Anger a challenge to remember. Who knows?
I would never judge on your preferences (I can tell you enjoy TwiSpike very much) but I can say that I laughed at your little scene there. I can totally see a lust fragment acting in that way towards Spike. But is there even a lust fragment? The suspense is killing ME!
She gets extra publicity by humiliating ponies and it's not the cruelty she likes it's the attention. Ponyville probably mellowed her out but like any good actor she puts on the mask again and plays her part.
I was thinking it might be something like that. There is definitely more depth to Trixie than some seem to realize, and since this fanfic is all about different facets of a personality, it shouldn't be a surprise that everyone's favorite showpony has been given just as much consideration. And what you suggested about Trixie fighting back on her own actually gives me chills. There are so many cheap fanfics and artwork of Trixie confronting Twilight as a straight-up villain, but having her make a stand against a genuinely bad version of Twilight while holding her own pretty well would make her not just a badass, but a hero. In my headcanon, Trixie has always dreamed of being a hero, hence her Ursa Major tall tale.
Ah, and I also wanted to mention Duncan's keen observations on Steadfast and Ebony Spring; those guards are no slackers.
1113020 I always believed there was more depth to her than a straight up evil mare who wants to make everyone feel bad. I never thought that she'd return to Ponyville in a fit of evil intent to harm Twilight and take revenge upon the whole town, there's always a lot more under the surface. I also think that she's probably a lot more competent at magic than what we've seen so unless completely caught off guard she could hold her own in a fight. As for wanting to be a hero, I think when it comes down to it we all want that in one form or another.
Also, (though it's just a slight detail), Duncan isn't actually a royal guard, he is one of Equestria's soldiers. The story's canon is that the Equestrian Army and Royal Guards are two separate things, like the US Armed Forces and a city policeman. The guards protect the Princesses, Canterlot, and police the land while the Army stands at the borders ready to defend the country in case of attack. Duncan, being Head General, is required to stay in Canterlot sometimes for updates and the like, though he hates it. In fact Duncan is openly in conflict with Shining Armor all the time. Shining wants to protect Canterlot and the Princesses while Duncan is more concerned with protecting the country as a whole (The Changeling invasion was a gold mine for Duncan to make fun of Shining, he still pokes fun at him for it). Regardless your statement still stands: Canterlot's Royal Guards are no slackers.
There is a part towards the end where you say Creativity instead of Logic. Besides that; good chapter and poor recruit.
1089888 Hehe... so I did . It's fixed now, sorry for any confusion.
jesus, took forever to get the time to type this.
I keep noticing that Logic will occasionaly breake the fourth wall. How can she do that? There must be some logical explination.
1094578 It's simple really, because she embodies just logic and intelligence her brain focuses on these traits making her smarter than almost everyone else and giving her semi-omnipotent deduction. She was able to figure that she is in a fictional story.
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... That is a very logical answer, for a very logical pony.
What's left in the original Twilight Sparkle? and can they start putting some of the captured ones back?
This is such a good idea, I love it. Progress vs Ethics, literally.
1095822 What's left? I guess any of her psyche that didn't escape is still in there (But she'd be unstable and certainly crazy if Logic hadn't frozen her). As for your second question: I plan for Logic to explain it in the next chapter.
1104064 Thanks, and your right. Creativity does like progress. Just don't call her sadistic because, you know, she's totally not.
I would've asked if there's a graph somewhere that matches each part of the psyche with its respective color, but then I remembered from that mention of Twilight's sex drive that you're keeping much of your cards close to the vest. Too bad, since one thing I enjoyed while watching both Fullmetal Alchemist series was counting down the villains as they were defeated one-by-one. And speaking of ... that particular part of Twilight's personality, I'd like to entertain the possibility that Creativity might have some inventive ways to pass the time with her new toy. She's got him completely at her mercy, so why not?
I was on the fence about reading this fanfic at the beginning, so now I'm pretty darn glad for giving it a shot. It's so interesting and entertaining. But I do have two complaints: one is the way you're representing Trixie. Sure, this personality is 100% canon, but there's plenty of room of speculation and insight. Twilight's friends were the ones bad-mouthing her show, so it was actually fairly admirable of her to take them down a notch. Humiliating the yellow mare in this chapter, who wasn't even saying anything, was just a random act of cruelty. Besides, events in Ponyville would have mellowed her out a bit. But more importantly, the big question is she will contend with a Twilight who's far more furious and uninhibited than the one she knows? She won't be prepared, that's for sure. It would also be nice if Spike were to have more to do in future chapters. Saving Trixie, perhaps? That's probably not at all what you have planned, but I would personally love to see them shipped from time to time.
My second complaint: still no sex drive fragment! Eh, since this probably won't turn into a clopfic, I'll just write my own image of events. Don't tell me if it's similar to what you're planning ... and don't judge me either.
Can ya tell I enjoy TwiSpike?
1108530 You never know what Creativity will do so... experimentation with her new servant is never out of the question . Speaking of Trixie, I know that I made her seem rather cruel in Creativity's First Day but my belief is that she's not mean it's just part of her act. She gets extra publicity by humiliating ponies and it's not the cruelty she likes it's the attention. Ponyville probably mellowed her out but like any good actor she puts on the mask again and plays her part. And yes, I have every intention of Anger finally meeting Trixie and repaying her for the way she acted... in the traditional style of course . As for who will save her? Maybe she'll surprise all of us and give Anger a challenge to remember. Who knows?
I would never judge on your preferences (I can tell you enjoy TwiSpike very much) but I can say that I laughed at your little scene there. I can totally see a lust fragment acting in that way towards Spike. But is there even a lust fragment? The suspense is killing ME!
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I was thinking it might be something like that. There is definitely more depth to Trixie than some seem to realize, and since this fanfic is all about different facets of a personality, it shouldn't be a surprise that everyone's favorite showpony has been given just as much consideration. And what you suggested about Trixie fighting back on her own actually gives me chills. There are so many cheap fanfics and artwork of Trixie confronting Twilight as a straight-up villain, but having her make a stand against a genuinely bad version of Twilight while holding her own pretty well would make her not just a badass, but a hero. In my headcanon, Trixie has always dreamed of being a hero, hence her Ursa Major tall tale.
Ah, and I also wanted to mention Duncan's keen observations on Steadfast and Ebony Spring; those guards are no slackers.
1113020 I always believed there was more depth to her than a straight up evil mare who wants to make everyone feel bad. I never thought that she'd return to Ponyville in a fit of evil intent to harm Twilight and take revenge upon the whole town, there's always a lot more under the surface. I also think that she's probably a lot more competent at magic than what we've seen so unless completely caught off guard she could hold her own in a fight. As for wanting to be a hero, I think when it comes down to it we all want that in one form or another.
Also, (though it's just a slight detail), Duncan isn't actually a royal guard, he is one of Equestria's soldiers. The story's canon is that the Equestrian Army and Royal Guards are two separate things, like the US Armed Forces and a city policeman. The guards protect the Princesses, Canterlot, and police the land while the Army stands at the borders ready to defend the country in case of attack. Duncan, being Head General, is required to stay in Canterlot sometimes for updates and the like, though he hates it. In fact Duncan is openly in conflict with Shining Armor all the time. Shining wants to protect Canterlot and the Princesses while Duncan is more concerned with protecting the country as a whole (The Changeling invasion was a gold mine for Duncan to make fun of Shining, he still pokes fun at him for it). Regardless your statement still stands: Canterlot's Royal Guards are no slackers.