After struggling to find work, Celestia has managed to score you a job! Only problem is that it's a prison guard gig, and the inmates are a bunch of sexy, dangerous girls that you're not allowed to fuck. Don't screw this up.
Wow. Thunderlane is a prick with seemingly no redeeming qualities. I hope this changes, but, eh. That said, I love how much effort you're putting into this, this could have been a dime a dozen slightly above average clopfic, but no, this has a STORY, and character work. This is a UNIVERSE.
Well... That's one way to keep the girls from wanting to bang you, be such an asshole that even the horniest girl doesn't want to be in the same room as you.
Ah Thunderlane! THE RETURN! I hate this fuck, for plenty part of the fandom make him a serial rapist, and honestly I would buy it at this point. And this guy while I am not sure he reaches that level of evil, certainly is the sort of person that I could never tolerate for long. By the following week I would have already been plotting with the inmates for him to have an.... "accident".
9054261 If I were in the MC's shoes right now? I'd go get his soda, then swing by the medical wing and ask if they had a syringe of a tasteless laxative. When asked why, I'd mention Thunderlane asked me to get him a soda from the vending machine. I think that would fix things.
9056455 I know, and I honestly would like to think like that. But he basically is constantly used as by fanfic writters when they need a creep. But again, that is not bad at all.
Jeez. I didn't think he was that bad! At least we finally get to see him! I loved the story about how Fluttershy and Gilda ended up there, especially the pantsing part!
as a 10yr and counting veteran of corrections, im abso-fuckin-loutely enjoying this story... keep up the good work and keep them chapters comin! if ya need any insight on prison operations for your story, feel free to hit me up- id love to help
If Sunset knows about what Thunderlane is doing, as Gilda implies, she's a pathetic, nepotistic, hypocritical fuckwit. As bad as Thunderlane himself, sharing the blame for his many misdeeds for knowingly enabled them, her speech about the prisoners being "her girls" a load of pathetic claptrap, with every other male employee doubtless having been encouraged to disregard the fraternization rules by his behavior.
It is, however, far more likely that she does not know. With canon Sunset's character being essentially built upon her reformation, which followed a string of behavior which could be described as morally dubious at best, creating a potential source of empathy.
If Thunderlane so much as thinks about either groping or raping my waifu (Fluttershy)... *balls hand up into fist* "Hey TicTac....DETRIOT SMASH!!!" *punches him in the face so hard, he makes a crater in the concrete wall* (Kudos to those who get that last line)
I love how you have an actually believable reason why Fluttershy is in there. Like, I totally believe she would do something like that. Both the breaking into an animal testing lab to save Angel (and every other animal in there) and confessing to the crime so her partner in crime (in this case Gilda) wouldn't be convicted alone. It makes me excited for what else you have planned for the rest of the mane six.
I also love how 'I' had a genuine conversation with Gilda and Shy. I came in expecting every girl to be constantly flirty, but you took the time to have a nice conversation.
This story definitely has potential.
Also, I hope Thunderlane gets some comeuppance by the end. A punch, a prank, even just a string of insults before he leaves (that's what's happening in five days, right?), I hope 'I' give him some justice.
I must admit, the reasoning behind fluttershy being in jail is pretty reasonable, what I wanna know is how the hell fluttershy even managed to talk Gilda into helping?
9053754 Arnold Judas Rimmer may be an arsehole, but he's not an bad guy, per se. It is actually possible to like him, in a 'his arseholery is so ridiculous it's funny and kind of endearing' way.
9097779 Yeah, Rimmer at his worst is better than this Thunderlane at his best. And Arnold at his worst is him going slowly mad via space virus whilst being as pedantic as possible with the rules
Wow. Thunderlane is a prick with seemingly no redeeming qualities. I hope this changes, but, eh. That said, I love how much effort you're putting into this, this could have been a dime a dozen slightly above average clopfic, but no, this has a STORY, and character work. This is a UNIVERSE.
...Thunderlane is the step-son of the warden? Why aren't any of the other employees able to cry favoritism to who ever the warden reports to?
Also, if you're going throw Fluttershy in jail, it should be for rescuing Angel from a cosmetics company!
Thunderlane makes Arnold J Rimmer look decent. Can't wait for karma to hit his dick. Repeatedly. With the force of a truck.
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Or whatever blunt object Gilda finds in the gym...
I'm about ready to punch a hole right threw tunderlanes head.
Well... That's one way to keep the girls from wanting to bang you, be such an asshole that even the horniest girl doesn't want to be in the same room as you.
Ah Thunderlane! THE RETURN! I hate this fuck, for plenty part of the fandom make him a serial rapist, and honestly I would buy it at this point. And this guy while I am not sure he reaches that level of evil, certainly is the sort of person that I could never tolerate for long. By the following week I would have already been plotting with the inmates for him to have an.... "accident".
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Indeed.
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But that is why she is in jail.
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That was the point. I was saying that if Fluttershy was going to be in jail for any reason, it most likely was going to involve animals.
This is a fun story, looking firward to more in the future
Thunderlane....20 bucks says by the end of this story the MC is gonna beat him till Thunderlane is in the hospital...or gets him fired
Damn, Thunderlane is janky asf. Nice story too. :)
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30lb dumbell at full force would work wonders
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The thing is, canon Thunderlane is a pretty chill, decent guy who cares for his little brother.
Can we vote to get Thunderlane punched?
Unique
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If I were in the MC's shoes right now? I'd go get his soda, then swing by the medical wing and ask if they had a syringe of a tasteless laxative. When asked why, I'd mention Thunderlane asked me to get him a soda from the vending machine.
I think that would fix things.
9056455
I know, and I honestly would like to think like that. But he basically is constantly used as by fanfic writters when they need a creep. But again, that is not bad at all.
Jeez. I didn't think he was that bad! At least we finally get to see him! I loved the story about how Fluttershy and Gilda ended up there, especially the pantsing
part!
I smell a hint of good character development... with a hint of the comments section undoubtedly turning pointlessly political fast.
as a 10yr and counting veteran of corrections, im abso-fuckin-loutely enjoying this story... keep up the good work and keep them chapters comin! if ya need any insight on prison operations for your story, feel free to hit me up- id love to help
If Sunset knows about what Thunderlane is doing, as Gilda implies, she's a pathetic, nepotistic, hypocritical fuckwit. As bad as Thunderlane himself, sharing the blame for his many misdeeds for knowingly enabled them, her speech about the prisoners being "her girls" a load of pathetic claptrap, with every other male employee doubtless having been encouraged to disregard the fraternization rules by his behavior.
It is, however, far more likely that she does not know. With canon Sunset's character being essentially built upon her reformation, which followed a string of behavior which could be described as morally dubious at best, creating a potential source of empathy.
If Thunderlane so much as thinks about either groping or raping my waifu (Fluttershy)...
*balls hand up into fist*
"Hey TicTac....DETRIOT SMASH!!!"
*punches him in the face so hard, he makes a crater in the concrete wall*
(Kudos to those who get that last line)
I love how you have an actually believable reason why Fluttershy is in there. Like, I totally believe she would do something like that. Both the breaking into an animal testing lab to save Angel (and every other animal in there) and confessing to the crime so her partner in crime (in this case Gilda) wouldn't be convicted alone. It makes me excited for what else you have planned for the rest of the mane six.
I also love how 'I' had a genuine conversation with Gilda and Shy. I came in expecting every girl to be constantly flirty, but you took the time to have a nice conversation.
This story definitely has potential.
Also, I hope Thunderlane gets some comeuppance by the end. A punch, a prank, even just a string of insults before he leaves (that's what's happening in five days, right?), I hope 'I' give him some justice.
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This is neither the time nor place, but I applaud your enthusiasm.
I must admit, the reasoning behind fluttershy being in jail is pretty reasonable, what I wanna know is how the hell fluttershy even managed to talk Gilda into helping?
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Arnold Judas Rimmer may be an arsehole, but he's not an bad guy, per se. It is actually possible to like him, in a 'his arseholery is so ridiculous it's funny and kind of endearing' way.
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Yeah, Rimmer at his worst is better than this Thunderlane at his best. And Arnold at his worst is him going slowly mad via space virus whilst being as pedantic as possible with the rules
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Can you say no to a passionate Flutterbutter?
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Hmmm... Fair point
Can I be one of the ones to say f@ck thunderlane
Please give me more of this story!
I expexted a pure clopfic or pornfic but this is a realy good story
Eeeeegh, of course he's one of those fucks, blegh. Thunder gon get what's coming to him soon enough, I'm sure.
Good show.
I don’t think sunset said he couldn’t talk to them.