The entire series of FiM as a harem comedy, centering around a Rule 63 Twilight Sparkle
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BTW, did you know I had my own TvTropes page?
Cool for you. I'm proud.
Improving with each chapter. It's nice to see.
That was fast.
lemon Johnson...
Is that a ponified Cave Johnson?
In which case, I agree with AJ
Great work so far, by the way
Dash, why did you say that? YIU NEVER SAY THAT!!!
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And deservedly so.
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It's how I found this fic.
1070066 Isn't that old news?
Lemon. Johnson. I fucking love you!
Lemon Johnson...
What could go wrong indeed, comsidering that Derpy is involved.
Gratz on the T.V.tropes, dood.
This is going swimmingly so far, but a little rushed since you are combining two episodes together, dood.
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This has it's own tvtropes page? This can only mean good things.
A chapter where somepony didn't try to bugger Dusk's brains out?
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That's cool.
1070169 Damnit, you beat me to the punch (or lemonade if you will)
1070066 Might I suggest instead of sleep-walk, "sleep-trot"? Also, it reads "'I can't buck all these trees'" multiple times. I'm assuming it's "can"?
Yes, Dash what could go wrong? I have a feeling we are going to find out.
I hate to say it, but I'm not really liking how rushed this chapter seems, but you could make it work i guess. I know you're doing it so that you won't have 2-3 chapters for every bloody episode.
I'm liking this story now. This was pretty funny. I liked how you're picking at all of the character plotholes. Like why DOES R.D. hang out with any of the Mane 6? She has NOTHING in common with any of them really. Oh well. I guess no one else like Rainbow, so she hangs out with the runt of the litter.
Anybody else notice the double negatives??
"i can't brain today , i have the dumb"
Lemon Johnson?
Lemon
With 'Johnson' as last name.
I SMELL APERTURE SCIENCE.
I saw that Portal 2 Reference
Random number 3 is my favourite character now.
A bit unexpected... i guess I kinda thought you were gonna keep goin with the gala thing and have the other stuff take place... but good chapter nonetheless.
"I think we must expect great things from you, Mr. Potter" (meme-asaurus)
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Also, it seems like you could deviate from the television show's plot a little more and create more of your own things... just to make it a little more interesting/unexpected?
1070578 Well, doing Applebuck Season and Griffon the Brush-off at the same time was unexpected.
I wonder how things with Gilda will turn out in this story. Will she also fall for Dusk? I also wonder if Trixie will fall for Dusk too when she shows up.
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should be reptiles
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0_0 Where did THAT come from?
There it is again!
Aww, why not?
That's why.
...
Well, here we are again... It's always such a pleasure.
Needs more Luna...'nough said
I have a question for you...
Is Pinkamena a full-blown yandere or just a psycho-bitch ballbuster? (Remeber, she's a reacurring character, and the yandere role is famous for the deep psychology of its characters, so I just want to hear your input on where you want me to go with her.)
1070901 Watch it. Love it. Live it. Eat apples.
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Apple.MOV reference? AND mixing two episodes in one?
....
Well, what are you doing just reading my stupid review (because, really, I have nothing entirely new to say about this new chapter)? Get to writing, I want to see how this goes.
gotta admit, this right here is what it's all about. Combo-ing stories, breaking the fourth wall, and getting a laugh from us readers. What I can't wait for is RD learning of PInkie's dark side, that alone will get everyone a few laughs, especially when she tries to tell Dusk. Keep goin and stay golden^^
The characterization is getting better. Rarity and Pinkie are still a little off, but better. Is good to see a a story improving with each chapter.
less 4th wall breaking and your perfect
Your Loving and Loyal fan Lord Stormy Sky
Equestria Science, now proudly doing science... ON THE MOOOOON! Figured I'd say that because there is no way in hell that Celestia would let a nut case like how Cave Johnson was near the end of his lifespan near any of her subjects. Doubly so if Glados was ever developed. Though this would cut the cost of the conversion gel creation process immensely so there is an upside.
Onto the story review. Really enjoyed how you made the inner monologues for the characters make perfect sense. Even with certain key characters being altered. Though I'm honestly intrigued with the premise of the Boast Busted Episode's retelling with Dusk. As Most theorize that Trixie fell for Twilight from the point where she saved her from the Ursa. If this is in fact the case, you may want to find a way to allude to clop without clop. Because Trixie would not be told no. Probably going so far as to drug him.
goddamnit rainbow dash doesn't know murphy's law
NEVER say "what could possibly go wrong!?"
can't wait for the next chapter
1070770 every female character should fall for Dusk dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
1070250 I actually miss that XD I thought it was hilarious!
1070948 I mean, I dunno, but I don't want to see anypony get seriously hurt/murdered XD I thought Pinkamena hated Dusk, and wanted to make him pay because he hurt Pinkie's feelings?
Buck yeah, Tvtropes
Nobody tried to jump dusk shine's bones?
This chapter was quite mjeh imho.
Sorry but you've set the bar skyhigh with the crazy antics and delicious awkward sexual tension in previous chapters.
I'm guessing the lack of forementioned goodies is part of some intentional way of agitating the audience?
The title of this chapter just set me off when I saw it. Promising me more sexual tension in form of plot oogling and/or mindboggling plottwists.
There was neither! I got nothing! It was all lies!
Next chapter please! I need more awesomeness!
I was listening to this while reading... I think metal covers of banjos tunes are good.
Ya know there are other things that Dash and Pinkie can bond on like breaking thing that cant be touched Dash being the sound barrier and Pinkie being the fourth wall.
saw the sourc3e
WE NEED TO HANG OUT!”[hg]
adjust it 60 cementers northeast
1. Source
2. Extra perhaps?
3. Uhh... I don't know the measurement system in Equestria...
And so my correctione have begun yet again...