1017719 Haha. Thanks! Yeah, when I finished that chapter, I realized I hadn't described the Spartans in detail. I just didn't have the room for it. I was playing Reach at the same time and I thought, Why don't I just put the armor selections in the authors notes?! And so I did. Now, if this story is popular enough, I'm expecting to see my characters run around in Reach. That would be...lowbird.com/data/images/2011/01/so-much-win.jpg
Comment posted by Trot C. Foxy deleted Aug 30th, 2013
Well, from what I've seen of these first few chapters, it's turning out pretty good. Though, I don't know how, in the rewrite of all things, you managed to miss so many minor mistakes. Minor, but irritating nonetheless.
3179295 Yes, but that spelling of 'fashionista' in chapter 2 made me gag a bit. Fasioniesta sounds like a Spanish word for fashion party. Admittedly, after I gagged, I laughed pretty hard at the afterthought.
This is an intestine little bit. It was fun to read for as long as I did read it.. I can tell that a lot of effort and time went into it. Enough for my respect at least. But I feel the story was a tad rushed. Easily written with less experience. Still fun though
oh this here, is good.
1017349
Your good! Thank you for da positiveness! have a mustache!
Yes, next chapter :D keep going
1017430
You ask, and I oblige. IT SHALL BE DONE!!!!! Give me a few minutes to proof read really quick like to make sure it's all good.
1017487
Okee dokee lokee!
PRETTY PLEASE!
seriously this is good, at least the set up is original as it can get, keep'em coming!
1017509
IN 5 MINUTES MY FRIEND!!!!!!
So much win
1017719
Haha. Thanks! Yeah, when I finished that chapter, I realized I hadn't described the Spartans in detail. I just didn't have the room for it. I was playing Reach at the same time and I thought, Why don't I just put the armor selections in the authors notes?! And so I did. Now, if this story is popular enough, I'm expecting to see my characters run around in Reach. That would be...lowbird.com/data/images/2011/01/so-much-win.jpg
great to see your taking the romance at a steadier pace, can't wait to see Nathan mop the floor with whatever Celestia has in store.
I want to see this continued
3167763 It still is. Don't worry.
Well, from what I've seen of these first few chapters, it's turning out pretty good.
Though, I don't know how, in the rewrite of all things, you managed to miss so many minor mistakes.
Minor, but irritating nonetheless.
3179263 So, I miss a few things. I'm only human.
3179295
Yes, but that spelling of 'fashionista' in chapter 2 made me gag a bit.
Fasioniesta sounds like a Spanish word for fashion party.
Admittedly, after I gagged, I laughed pretty hard at the afterthought.
3179352 I'm sorry I have dyslexia. It's hard sometimes to catch those things.
3182547
Well damn.
Now I feel horrible.
I honestly don't know how to feel about this TwilightXHuman foreshadow...
But I like the rest of the story a lot.
3182547
Ah, that would exain some errors my OCD spotted. Not to worry, dude. My brother has Dyslexia.
Awesome so far, I will continue reading!
EDIT: If I make any mistakes with spelling, blame my Playstation Vita. the touch screen hates me.
I'm probably gonna get hate for this but...
Celestia.Luna.Your idiots.
5892364 *YOU'RE*
But yeah I'll stop that XD
This is an intestine little bit. It was fun to read for as long as I did read it.. I can tell that a lot of effort and time went into it. Enough for my respect at least. But I feel the story was a tad rushed. Easily written with less experience. Still fun though