You know... Being a complete Halo and Star Wars nerd, a Halo/MLP crossover with a S-III and a tag with sex in it should bother me... but meh... I'll give you a chance.
3319610 I know I proably will (I'll read anything) but what's really bothering me is several things.
His training; the hardest
They didn't have the hardest training. The S-II's did. The S-III's (Halo: REACH did not portray them how Bungie and Eric Nylund wanted to originally) were essentially disposable heroes. Taken as war orphans they were trained for three to five years in training groups of up to three hundred and then sent to die on unnamed worlds simply to slow down the Covenent. Little to no S-III's lived through these assualts. In fact they were expected to die.
The second thing. S-III's didn't even use MJOLINR power armor. They couldn't. They weren't as strong or as fast or had any of the ehancements that the S-II's did. (Though they did have some) If they tried to use the MJOLNIR armor they would die from their own pain induced spasms.
I agree with you on those points but story wide it is good.
in twilights mind she thinks Nathan had the hardest training. I'm not sure he mentioned the Spartan II's yet.
The Spartan III armor is revamped and downgraded. Because yes if Spartan III's used mjolnir armor made for the Spartan II's they would be severely crippled.
3319598 It should bother you if you're a huge Halo/Star Wars nut. Because the only aliens Humanity have ever encountered were trying to commit genocide of the human race. They wouldn't justdecide to fuck a horse, let alone an alien.
3319636 Well, through his view, it was the hardest. He didn't know what the Spartan II's went through, so he can't compare it to that. But between the endless hours of training and the expectations placed on him, it probably was the most difficult thing to aspire to. And in Halo: Reach, what most of this is inspired from, the Spartan's wore MJOLNIR battle armor. I read all the books, and the Spartan III's did have the same augmentations done to them, but they weren't given MJOLNIR armor because it would be too cost effective for soldiers who were sent on suicide missions to have it. Let alone the Covenant could get their hands on it.
3319733 I'm not going to disagree with you. Except for one pont. If you payed attention in Ghosts of Onyx. Colonel Akkerson decided not to have the bones augmented or their reaction times as fast as the S-II's. thing that made them so good was that they were given chemical enhancements that would make the more animal instincts more prominent in the adrenal high of combat and they could take massive amounts of punishments before finally dying.
I've probably forgotten more about the Halo Universe than you will ever know.
3319842 The USNC have never encountered a world full of colorful friendly ponies. I can see them being overly cautious, of course, and very skeptical, but never outright hostile.
3319808 indeed he did, but if you pay attention to the lore of the games as well, some Spartan III's are outfitted with MJOLNIR battle armor. And in Halo 4, the Spartan IV's are either former Spartan's themselves, or just random volunteers from within the military, who have no augmentations, yet still wear MJOLNIR armor. Who's to say the Spartan's in Reach didn't have a prototype of said armor variants? After all, Reach was the UNSC's military base, so they would have access to new types of equipment. And, let's not forget the most important part of this whole thing; Halo is a work of fiction, and therefore, open to any interpretation a writer sees fit to bestow upon it.
3319912 I know and you're allowed to make you're own interpretations as an author. God knows I did it for my Star Wars fic (I'm going to take this opportunity to whore myself out: Darth Bane: Chaos (Book 1) warning this fanfic is filled with adult materiel but doesn't include sex) I've also been known to be wrong about Star Wars and Halo (Albeit rarely) but anyways as far as I know they didn't use MJOLNIR because they didn't have the bone augmentations. And the S-IV's are recruits from other branches of the military(usually ODST) that have the correct gene set to undergo augmentations.
3319912 All S-IV's have the augments, just to a lesser extent then the S-II's. That's what makes them Spartans, and able to use the GEN2 armor (which they would need those augments in order to use the Mark VI armor attachments to the GEN2 system). They are about on par with the S-III's augments, only the IV's have prior service rather than just harsh training as a foundation.
3319770 An alien is still an alien. The elites agreeded to stop hostilities with the humans and look what happened. The elites went back on their word and started another war with tthe UNSC.
3323859 I repeat myself; Covenant vs pony. I don't care how cynical a guy gets, you can't associate the two so easily. They would definitely consider them aliens, and would be very cautious, but I don't think they'd immediately make frowny faces.
3328083 Says the guy who only held a feature spot for a single day? HA! Looks like your feature was an accident and I am happy fimfiction fixed that oversight.
I may write foalcon but at least my stories out score your trash in positive ratings and that's counting the fact that NONE of my stories have been featured. Honestly, your story is an abomination. Yet another halo crossover that does all that WRONG things. I would know, I have read lots of them. Let me make this simple for you. Your story is not show accurate, hell, it's not even accurate to the HALO series. You filled this story with so much head canon that it shouldn't even be based in the MLP universe! So I suggest you get good or dont post your trash at all. All you're doing is wasting peoples time.
3328106 This is too cute. A psychotic, asshole writer who thinks he's better than me because his stories have a couple of likes is trying to bring me down? Aww, look how devastated I am! I may just have to quit writing forever! Ha! Honestly, I have had constructive criticism on my stories, but never anyone who's just an outright c**k sucker! I find it absolutely hysterical that you think my story is shit, when you yourself have never been featured. I've been in the feature box three times before this, kiddo, and all three of those times, I got more followers, more likes and more favorites. Not to mention I value each and every one of my followers and readers as my FimFiction family. You probably just see your followers as statistics to make your stories look better and give you more credit as a 'writer'. How many followers do you have? 83. How many do I have? 171. How many stories do you have up? 2. How many do I have up? 5 How many times have you been featured? Oh, yeah! Zero. If you're going to act like a twat, don't you dare say you're the better writer here! You're nothing but a vain little brat, and I pitty you. Never once have I degraded an author over a story I personally didn't like, but many others did. Just remember, you're one voice in a group of hundreds, and your voice will NEVER sway me from my writing or what I love to do. Have a fantastic day! P.S: Here's what I think of your opinions... 27.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m1mo1wzFiu1qbubzqo1_400.gif
3328245 Uhhh.. Shouldn't his Spartan armor be able to protect him from whatever the hydra can throw at him? P.S. Nice story! Any plan for updates anytime soon? P.P.S. To salsav91:
3350814 To answer this, remember, the creature is about fifty feet tall, and with size comes strength. If each head were to grab at, say his arms, legs, or head, he'd be pulled apart by the sheer power of the beast.
3328245 Don't listen to that pathetic excuse of a human being that salsav91 is. You have an amazing story, and I think this revised version makes it look better than the first version that you had. Keep up the good work! And are you going to work on the sequel again?
3847798 Do not fear, it still lives. It's just that I first wrote this story back before I had my job, and I thought, in my idiocy, that I could revise it while working on a butt ton of other stories. I wasn't smart in my planning. At all. I've just been swamped with work and bad happenings in my family. I'm working as hard as I can to write, edit and put out chapters, to all my stories, as quickly as possible.
Love this chapter! I hope Nathan kicks Shinings ass and rips of his horn and balls.
You know... Being a complete Halo and Star Wars nerd, a Halo/MLP crossover with a S-III and a tag with sex in it should bother me... but meh... I'll give you a chance.
3319598
You're gonna like this story.
3319610![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
I second this....
3319610 I know I proably will (I'll read anything) but what's really bothering me is several things.
They didn't have the hardest training. The S-II's did. The S-III's (Halo: REACH did not portray them how Bungie and Eric Nylund wanted to originally) were essentially disposable heroes. Taken as war orphans they were trained for three to five years in training groups of up to three hundred and then sent to die on unnamed worlds simply to slow down the Covenent. Little to no S-III's lived through these assualts. In fact they were expected to die.
The second thing. S-III's didn't even use MJOLINR power armor. They couldn't. They weren't as strong or as fast or had any of the ehancements that the S-II's did. (Though they did have some) If they tried to use the MJOLNIR armor they would die from their own pain induced spasms.
3319636
I agree with you on those points but story wide it is good.
in twilights mind she thinks Nathan had the hardest training. I'm not sure he mentioned the Spartan II's yet.
The Spartan III armor is revamped and downgraded. Because yes if Spartan III's used mjolnir armor made for the Spartan II's they would be severely crippled.
3319598 It should bother you if you're a huge Halo/Star Wars nut. Because the only aliens Humanity have ever encountered were trying to commit genocide of the human race. They wouldn't justdecide to fuck a horse, let alone an alien.
3319636 Well, through his view, it was the hardest. He didn't know what the Spartan II's went through, so he can't compare it to that. But between the endless hours of training and the expectations placed on him, it probably was the most difficult thing to aspire to.
And in Halo: Reach, what most of this is inspired from, the Spartan's wore MJOLNIR battle armor. I read all the books, and the Spartan III's did have the same augmentations done to them, but they weren't given MJOLNIR armor because it would be too cost effective for soldiers who were sent on suicide missions to have it. Let alone the Covenant could get their hands on it.
3319697
Right, because it's oh so very easy to compare a member of the covenant with a tiny colorful friendly pony.
3319733 I'm not going to disagree with you. Except for one pont. If you payed attention in Ghosts of Onyx. Colonel Akkerson decided not to have the bones augmented or their reaction times as fast as the S-II's. thing that made them so good was that they were given chemical enhancements that would make the more animal instincts more prominent in the adrenal high of combat and they could take massive amounts of punishments before finally dying.
I've probably forgotten more about the Halo Universe than you will ever know.
3319770 They're aliens. As far as the UNSC is concerned they're hostile because they're aliens.
3319842
The USNC have never encountered a world full of colorful friendly ponies. I can see them being overly cautious, of course, and very skeptical, but never outright hostile.
3319808 indeed he did, but if you pay attention to the lore of the games as well, some Spartan III's are outfitted with MJOLNIR battle armor. And in Halo 4, the Spartan IV's are either former Spartan's themselves, or just random volunteers from within the military, who have no augmentations, yet still wear MJOLNIR armor. Who's to say the Spartan's in Reach didn't have a prototype of said armor variants? After all, Reach was the UNSC's military base, so they would have access to new types of equipment.![:raritywink:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritywink.png)
And, let's not forget the most important part of this whole thing; Halo is a work of fiction, and therefore, open to any interpretation a writer sees fit to bestow upon it.
3319912 I know and you're allowed to make you're own interpretations as an author. God knows I did it for my Star Wars fic (I'm going to take this opportunity to whore myself out: Darth Bane: Chaos (Book 1) warning this fanfic is filled with adult materiel but doesn't include sex) I've also been known to be wrong about Star Wars and Halo (Albeit rarely) but anyways as far as I know they didn't use MJOLNIR because they didn't have the bone augmentations. And the S-IV's are recruits from other branches of the military(usually ODST) that have the correct gene set to undergo augmentations.
3319912 increases list
http://halo.wikia.com/wiki/8942-LQ99#8942-LQ99
3319912
All S-IV's have the augments, just to a lesser extent then the S-II's. That's what makes them Spartans, and able to use the GEN2 armor (which they would need those augments in order to use the Mark VI armor attachments to the GEN2 system). They are about on par with the S-III's augments, only the IV's have prior service rather than just harsh training as a foundation.
continueee
Awesome, another poorly written, OOC, Halo crossover!
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Honestly.. This is painful to read![:pinkiesick:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiesick.png)
Still doing great, I kinda wished I waited until you had rewritten all of this, sometimes I just hate waiting for new chapters to come out.
3319770 An alien is still an alien. The elites agreeded to stop hostilities with the humans and look what happened. The elites went back on their word and started another war with tthe UNSC.
3323859
I repeat myself; Covenant vs pony. I don't care how cynical a guy gets, you can't associate the two so easily. They would definitely consider them aliens, and would be very cautious, but I don't think they'd immediately make frowny faces.
3322689 Says the guy who writes Foalcon?
Don't leave a dick comment on someones story when you're writing THAT. ![:pinkiesick:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiesick.png)
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3328083![:trollestia:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trollestia.png)
Says the guy who only held a feature spot for a single day? HA! Looks like your feature was an accident and I am happy fimfiction fixed that oversight.
I may write foalcon but at least my stories out score your trash in positive ratings and that's counting the fact that NONE of my stories have been featured. Honestly, your story is an abomination. Yet another halo crossover that does all that WRONG things. I would know, I have read lots of them. Let me make this simple for you. Your story is not show accurate, hell, it's not even accurate to the HALO series. You filled this story with so much head canon that it shouldn't even be based in the MLP universe! So I suggest you get good or dont post your trash at all. All you're doing is wasting peoples time.
3328106 This is too cute. A psychotic, asshole writer who thinks he's better than me because his stories have a couple of likes is trying to bring me down? Aww, look how devastated I am!
I may just have to quit writing forever! ![:raritycry:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritycry.png)
![:heart:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/heart.png)
Ha! Honestly, I have had constructive criticism on my stories, but never anyone who's just an outright c**k sucker! I find it absolutely hysterical that you think my story is shit, when you yourself have never been featured. I've been in the feature box three times before this, kiddo, and all three of those times, I got more followers, more likes and more favorites. Not to mention I value each and every one of my followers and readers as my FimFiction family. You probably just see your followers as statistics to make your stories look better and give you more credit as a 'writer'. How many followers do you have? 83. How many do I have? 171. How many stories do you have up? 2. How many do I have up? 5 How many times have you been featured? Oh, yeah! Zero. If you're going to act like a twat, don't you dare say you're the better writer here! You're nothing but a vain little brat, and I pitty you. Never once have I degraded an author over a story I personally didn't like, but many others did. Just remember, you're one voice in a group of hundreds, and your voice will NEVER sway me from my writing or what I love to do. Have a fantastic day!
P.S: Here's what I think of your opinions...
27.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m1mo1wzFiu1qbubzqo1_400.gif
3328245
Uhhh.. Shouldn't his Spartan armor be able to protect him from whatever the hydra can throw at him?
P.S. Nice story! Any plan for updates anytime soon?
P.P.S. To salsav91:
3350814 I must agree with you
3350814 To answer this, remember, the creature is about fifty feet tall, and with size comes strength. If each head were to grab at, say his arms, legs, or head, he'd be pulled apart by the sheer power of the beast.![:derpytongue2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/derpytongue2.png)
3376077
Well, that makes sense.
Here, have a Twilight.
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3328245 Don't listen to that pathetic excuse of a human being that salsav91 is. You have an amazing story, and I think this revised version makes it look better than the first version that you had. Keep up the good work!
And are you going to work on the sequel again?
Is this story still alive?
3847798 Do not fear, it still lives. It's just that I first wrote this story back before I had my job, and I thought, in my idiocy, that I could revise it while working on a butt ton of other stories. I wasn't smart in my planning. At all. I've just been swamped with work and bad happenings in my family. I'm working as hard as I can to write, edit and put out chapters, to all my stories, as quickly as possible.
Why do all the good haylo stories have to be on hiatus or are just not updated. It saddens me :(
Is this story dead?