Though, I'm glad to see stories where Tempest gets to continue being a badass after the events of the movie. Was a little worried about the pendulum swinging too hard towards her reformation.
An exciting and humurous introduction, with an easy-to-follow action scene that does a good job introducing the two main characters. I'll definitely be following this.
Chief Military Advisor, the right and proper position of a reformed Tempest.
Who knows, maybe she gets hired on to train the Guard in the Sombra timeline in exchange for access to Equestrian medical technology. They have wing prosthetics, after all. What else might be on the drawing board?
I've waited so long to hear those words, and I didn't even know I was waiting! Oh gosh, there's a tear coming to my eye.... Glad you liked the action scene! As for Tempest still being an asskicker... come on, she kicks ass and I'm not gonna waste that.
“This either got really really funny, or not funny at all.”
“I need specifics!”
Rainbow hesitated for a few seconds, and then rubbed her hoof at the cloud beneath her. Her pegasus magic allowed part of the cloud to condense into liquid water, leaving a reflective puddle in the cloudbank.
Tempest looked down at it, and saw the dildo had been melted—fused, even—onto her horn. Little waxy dribbles ran down the sides, toward the base. Her eyes went wide.
Interesting ship and great fight choreography, though I'm nit sure how to feel about Tempest being able to perform magic that isn't explosive blasts of raw, unfocused mana. Especially not without any explanation. That was kind of her driving motivation throughout the movie.
Still, enjoyable, bizarre fun, and a regrettable conclusion of the movie. Though aside from the Wonderbolts, there didn't appear to be a single guard in Canterlot, period.
So, this is a story about a dickhead that goes around equestria screwing with the guard and topping skittles. It doesn't have the Sex or Romance tags, but hell if I'm not reading the dickens out of it
Interesting ship and great fight choreography, though I'm nit sure how to feel about Tempest being able to perform magic that isn't explosive blasts of raw, unfocused mana. Especially not without any explanation. That was kind of her driving motivation throughout the movie.
At the risk of making a pun, I'd have to say I dropped the ball on that one. Don't get me wrong, I did try to take it into account:
Tempest grabbed a few more clouds in her telekinesis and yanked them down, including the one she stood on; they zoomed downward erratically, creating a series of platforms below the main cloudbank.
The implication here being that she has no fine control over where the clouds end up, which oughtta fit with her magic being wonky.... And then, only four paragraphs later, I forgot and did this:
Tempest grabbed the kickball in her magic—her nose crinkled as she smelled something burning, but she paid no mind—and it spun around her in an ever expanding circle at high speed, a circle that threatened to strike Rainbow Dash.
So yeah, that was an unforced error on my part. In my defense, I wrote this in like three hours, and I promise to shanghai in an explanation - I kind of have to now.
So, this is a story about a dickhead that goes around equestria screwing with the guard and topping skittles. It doesn't have the Sex or Romance tags, but hell if I'm not reading the dickens out of it
Yeah, that's mostly my bad. I didn't 100% know where this story was gonna go when I published this chapter, so I left the tags off... but now that I have a clearer idea? I've just added them now. Thanks for the reminder!
It was actually pretty nice, even if my favourite moment was her crying herself to sleep and beating Rainbow Dash. Like usually I slightly disliked the shipping because I haven't exactly seen how they got together and every Tempest story seems to skip the moment that possible happened after the party. However I liked Tempest keeping her dominace appearance in the last sentences, just because I view her like that.
To be honest I hope since there seems an easy way to remove it, I hope that she doesn't keept the dildo and that the story is kind of about her getting several replacements for her horn like in the picture with Pinkie. I kind of liked the comedy aspect of her being overdramatic because of her horn.
Godammit R5h.
Though, I'm glad to see stories where Tempest gets to continue being a badass after the events of the movie. Was a little worried about the pendulum swinging too hard towards her reformation.
An exciting and humurous introduction, with an easy-to-follow action scene that does a good job introducing the two main characters. I'll definitely be following this.
Just as funny as the first time I read it. Can't wait for the next chapter!
I’m dead already.
Good job
Chief Military Advisor, the right and proper position of a reformed Tempest.
Who knows, maybe she gets hired on to train the Guard in the Sombra timeline in exchange for access to Equestrian medical technology. They have wing prosthetics, after all. What else might be on the drawing board?
The image of Tempest wearing a dick on her forehead is stupid.
The whole concept of this story is stupid.
The fact that this exists is stupid.
But, goddamnit, this is the funniest thing I've read in a while.
In the immortal words of Lord Shaxx, THIS IS AMAZING!
It fused to her head.
It fucking fused to her heada.
...Well, she was kind of a dick in the movie to be honest.
BADABING! BADABOOM!
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I've waited so long to hear those words, and I didn't even know I was waiting! Oh gosh, there's a tear coming to my eye....
Glad you liked the action scene! As for Tempest still being an asskicker... come on, she kicks ass and I'm not gonna waste that.
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Thanks! Humor was definitely a goal.
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It's gonna go farther than just fusing, I promise.
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... You do realize that just makes me worry more?
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I mean, yeah? It's called marketing. :P
I hope you enjoy the upcoming chapters!
Oh my gawd, what the fuck!
That was amazing! Tempest is really something else. So, she a dildocorn? Don’t turn your back on her!
My Exact Reaction:
KKKKKKKKKKKKKKK..... ~le ded ~ XwX
Fun start. Can't wait to see more of it.
Interesting ship and great fight choreography, though I'm nit sure how to feel about Tempest being able to perform magic that isn't explosive blasts of raw, unfocused mana. Especially not without any explanation. That was kind of her driving motivation throughout the movie.
Still, enjoyable, bizarre fun, and a regrettable conclusion of the movie. Though aside from the Wonderbolts, there didn't appear to be a single guard in Canterlot, period.
So, this is a story about a dickhead that goes around equestria screwing with the guard and topping skittles. It doesn't have the Sex or Romance tags, but hell if I'm not reading the dickens out of it
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At the risk of making a pun, I'd have to say I dropped the ball on that one. Don't get me wrong, I did try to take it into account:
The implication here being that she has no fine control over where the clouds end up, which oughtta fit with her magic being wonky.... And then, only four paragraphs later, I forgot and did this:
So yeah, that was an unforced error on my part. In my defense, I wrote this in like three hours, and I promise to shanghai in an explanation - I kind of have to now.
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Yeah, that's mostly my bad. I didn't 100% know where this story was gonna go when I published this chapter, so I left the tags off... but now that I have a clearer idea? I've just added them now. Thanks for the reminder!
It was actually pretty nice, even if my favourite moment was her crying herself to sleep and beating Rainbow Dash.
Like usually I slightly disliked the shipping because I haven't exactly seen how they got together and every Tempest story seems to skip the moment that possible happened after the party. However I liked Tempest keeping her dominace appearance in the last sentences, just because I view her like that.
To be honest I hope since there seems an easy way to remove it, I hope that she doesn't keept the dildo and that the story is kind of about her getting several replacements for her horn like in the picture with Pinkie. I kind of liked the comedy aspect of her being overdramatic because of her horn.
Shoulda gone with the carrot.
Hey guess what I'm reading.
We're off to a great start. :D
Most excellent chapter, if the rest of the story is anything like this chapter, I am going to be laughing forbade long time to come.
Finally got around to reading this story, and this first chapter is a promise of good things to come.
Will read it to the end!
That's... one way to start a story.