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Lyra's grandparents come to Ponyville to pay her a surprise birthday visit and spend the day with her, but what they really have in mind not even Lyra could have seen coming.

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Wonderful! Lyra can really consider heself lucky to have such wonderful grandparents

“Let’s show them why they call us Heart and Soul.”

Is that meant to be a reference to Heart Gold and Soul Silver?

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I hadn't thought about that. It's actually a reference to their names, Lyra Heartstrings and Fiddle Soulstrings.

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Oh, I thought you made her last name Soulstring just to make that joke. :twilightsheepish:

A very delightful little Slice of Life fic if I do say so myself! Fits the definition of the genre about as literally as any fic I've ever seen; it's really just a day of stuff happening, but absolutely nothing wrong with that when done correctly, and the payoff at the end was especially nice.

I only have a couple of criticisms. There's just a few grammatical errors here and there along with some purple prose at times, but my only major critique is that the fic kind of just ends. Not that that takes away from the rest of the fic, but it was definitely a sudden ending. Overall, however, this was a delightful little read, thank you very much for it and for submitting it to our contest! :twilightsmile:

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Thank you for the feedback Batbrony.

I agree the ending did seem kinda sudden. I think if I'd written that last concert event a bit better and had a proper buildup it could've worked.

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