Behind an Hearth's Warming story on stage, is the actual event of what happened, long before the birth of Celestia and before harmony settled in. We all know how Equestria was founded, but how it actually turned out? Find out by following the hoofsteps of Clever Clover, an audacious unicorn who will discover the secrets of the three pony tribes, befriend ponies he shouldn't have and taking on a risky journey with the Unicornia tribe to find a new land...
that may lead to their loss.
Chapters (2)
Interesting beginning, I hope to read the next chapter soon! Seems like you have quite a story to tell
The grammar and word choice would need some tweaking here and there, but still, it was nothing all too bad. Though, one recurring issue I noticed; remember to use quotation marks on both sides of direct speech.
Written like this, Celestia is also saying the sentence about nodding in satisfaction.
Now, she praises the guard, nods and speaks again. Notice the placement of all the quotation marks. There are more rules to this, pertaining to urge usage of commas and periods, but I think this is enough for now
Story-wise, it’s really nice and I like the lore. Both Clover and Pen seem very well-written as well. However, as I said previously, there are some spelling and grammar issues dampening the enjoyment of the story. Still, it’s nothing a quick glance from editor couldn’t fix. I can offer my help with that, only if you want me to, of course