A strange problem arises in Equestria that makes it impossible for stallions to impregnate their wives. Fortunately for them, some helpful zebra stallions are more than willing to take their place.
8337907 Seeing as people view the official show having basically made zebras into African equivalents, I'm not surprised they got stuck with the portrayal they have now.
It was a rather typical fantasy for African Americans in porn long before MLP even came around.
8340234 Interesting considering the directions you've went. If I had to guess this is going to end up like one of those interracial porn comics where the white woman gets a good BBC and leaves the white guy to get drunk in his own filth while becoming a black (or in this case Zebra) slut. I see no issue with this for some odd reason.
Eh? I'll be honest...I didn't like it. Now that's not to discredit the author at all.
One of the things I din't like was the character of Zed. I'm not sure what the author was trying to go for with him as I guess it's supposed to replicate the bbd fetish. However, I feel he's just an asshole who's taking advantage of a crisis situation so he can have sex with Cadence.(another thing about the BBD fetish that I find wrong in this story is that Zebras are normally smaller in that area and even though the fandom and show have linked them to africans... just because they are African culturally, they are still zebras biologically.
Another thing I personally didn't like was the choice of partner that Zed had sex with. I don't care if it's a fetish, OCs cuckolding characters is still annoying... especially when it comes to characters like Cadence since she's an alicorn. I felt that there were a lot of other choices of mares that could have been bred with (Like Derpy for example) because then it could have softened the blow of the OC having sex with them.
The last thing I didn't like was the fact that Zed got away with it. There wasn't really much conflict at the end...where Shining could be skeptical of Zed. I mean, yes...there kind of is tension when both Shining and Cadence are nervous but as soon as Zed's unrealistically large cock comes into play, game over for Cadence and Shining. If fact... I'm pretty sure that potion they talked about was complete bull...and was only another excuse for Zebra's to impregnate Mares...which kind of makes me hate the Zebra in this story.
Again, I do not want to discredit the author and if they continue writing pieces like this, even though I'd not like it and not read it, I'm sure that there are many who will and really enjoy it for the fetish value, the actual sex scenes themselves which I thought were nicely written. But...because of the points I mentioned, I'm gonna downvote it. I'm sorry.
For one thing, believe me when I say I'm not a fan of OC's in much of anything in the fandom. In my writing I avoid using them myself whenever I can but use them if I have to. In this story's case I wanted to use a zebra and no such official character exists in the show.
And yeah, I knew going into this that it'll be a set of fetishes not many people would like. People certainly don't like it when the 'bad guy' gets his way and gets away with it, most of all. It's safe to say a good majority of the dislikes on this story are from people who simply don't like the adultery kinks... but I wouldn't exactly be publishing stories like this if I was bothered by my like to dislike ratio.
8348265 Thank you for understanding. I wasn't really trying to be too negative but I think I may have come across that way. Like I said, I'm sure there are many people who'll enjoy it because of those reasons, I'm not going to judge anyone based on a fetish they have.
I hope you continue writing as, even though I didn't like the subject matter, the actual writing was good. Though, I do have one suggestion. I would suggest that not all the Zebra are behind this way of "helping" Equestria because the last thing we might need is a story depicting all members of a race to be assholes. I'm not gonna complain if you don't use that, however, since its your story.
Well, lets see where this goes... Hopefully with better explained background/reasoning/methods behind things than what NCN put on "canon" Fall of equestria. Also guessing that they SHOULD have red the contract...
Not yet pushing either like-button... Nor judging anyones fetish, since all have something "in their closet".
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Seeing as people view the official show having basically made zebras into African equivalents, I'm not surprised they got stuck with the portrayal they have now.
It was a rather typical fantasy for African Americans in porn long before MLP even came around.
Considering the tags and the author's usual fare, I don't believe you.
You really should have read it.
FoE ripoff
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Maybe, but without the cut horns and plucked wings, so far as I care, MUCH better.
8338262
You know Fall of Equestria doesn't hold a patent on any idea that seems somewhat similar to it.
And no... I didn't actually even give FoE any thought when I was typing out this story.
8340234
Hey, if some folks sport, grow or get stripes by the end of this, I"m totally okay with it.
8340234
Interesting considering the directions you've went. If I had to guess this is going to end up like one of those interracial porn comics where the white woman gets a good BBC and leaves the white guy to get drunk in his own filth while becoming a black (or in this case Zebra) slut. I see no issue with this for some odd reason.
I like it. Looking forward to more
Eh? I'll be honest...I didn't like it. Now that's not to discredit the author at all.
One of the things I din't like was the character of Zed. I'm not sure what the
author was trying to go for with him as I guess it's supposed to replicate the
bbd fetish. However, I feel he's just an asshole who's taking advantage of a
crisis situation so he can have sex with Cadence.(another thing about the BBD
fetish that I find wrong in this story is that Zebras are normally smaller in that
area and even though the fandom and show have linked them to africans...
just because they are African culturally, they are still zebras biologically.
Another thing I personally didn't like was the choice of partner that Zed had
sex with. I don't care if it's a fetish, OCs cuckolding characters is still annoying...
especially when it comes to characters like Cadence since she's an alicorn. I felt
that there were a lot of other choices of mares that could have been bred with
(Like Derpy for example) because then it could have softened the blow of the OC
having sex with them.
The last thing I didn't like was the fact that Zed got away with it. There wasn't really
much conflict at the end...where Shining could be skeptical of Zed. I mean, yes...there
kind of is tension when both Shining and Cadence are nervous but as soon as Zed's
unrealistically large cock comes into play, game over for Cadence and Shining. If fact...
I'm pretty sure that potion they talked about was complete bull...and was only another
excuse for Zebra's to impregnate Mares...which kind of makes me hate the Zebra in this
story.
Again, I do not want to discredit the author and if they continue writing pieces like this,
even though I'd not like it and not read it, I'm sure that there are many who will and
really enjoy it for the fetish value, the actual sex scenes themselves which I thought were
nicely written. But...because of the points I mentioned, I'm gonna downvote it. I'm sorry.
8346899
It's quite alright.
For one thing, believe me when I say I'm not a fan of OC's in much of anything in the fandom. In my writing I avoid using them myself whenever I can but use them if I have to. In this story's case I wanted to use a zebra and no such official character exists in the show.
And yeah, I knew going into this that it'll be a set of fetishes not many people would like. People certainly don't like it when the 'bad guy' gets his way and gets away with it, most of all. It's safe to say a good majority of the dislikes on this story are from people who simply don't like the adultery kinks... but I wouldn't exactly be publishing stories like this if I was bothered by my like to dislike ratio.
8348265
Thank you for understanding. I wasn't really trying to be too negative but I
think I may have come across that way. Like I said, I'm sure there are many
people who'll enjoy it because of those reasons, I'm not going to judge
anyone based on a fetish they have.
I hope you continue writing as, even though I didn't like the subject matter,
the actual writing was good. Though, I do have one suggestion. I would
suggest that not all the Zebra are behind this way of "helping" Equestria
because the last thing we might need is a story depicting all members of a
race to be assholes. I'm not gonna complain if you don't use that, however,
since its your story.
Well then, personally I look forward to seeing more chapters with other wives. This story has certainly fed my guilty pleasure.
8350443 Fuck this cuck shit.
8351044
well, you probably could have said it in non offensive way...
8358225 Cuckery is for the weak.
8358260
maybe...but if that's the case, why'd you click on this story?
8358282 Surfing through clop, disappointed to find out what this was.
8358295
Oh...I see.
Next chapter?
So, when can we expect the next chapter?
Well, lets see where this goes... Hopefully with better explained background/reasoning/methods behind things than what NCN put on "canon" Fall of equestria.
Also guessing that they SHOULD have red the contract...
Not yet pushing either like-button... Nor judging anyones fetish, since all have something "in their closet".
This was a fun read :) Hope you keep going with it.
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Not dead. Just having the usual problems of writing clop and being in the mood for writing.
(His ball tightened up against the quivering member) That poor basterd only got one ball