A strange problem arises in Equestria that makes it impossible for stallions to impregnate their wives. Fortunately for them, some helpful zebra stallions are more than willing to take their place.
Now I know there were some complaints about the plot of this story. How zebras came off as OP, and everything seemed one sided. Well, I kind of made it like that on purpose. There really isn’t supposed to be the elements that are present in a balanced plot line like non-Mary Sue characters, meaningful character development, and whatnot that you might see in a good novel. It’s a thrill for people who are into the kinks in the story.
From a squeal point of view, it’s going to be a bit one sided because it’s the tragedy that marks the beginning of a story. Sort of like how, in Avatar, everything changed when the Fire Nation attacked. Or the same thing I pulled with my Changeling Invasion story, for anyone whose read that. The bad guys seem invincible and all hope seems lost for the drugged and clueless innocent involved. The following plot, however, usually details how the ‘good guys’ come back from that, and bring a satisfying happy end which feels all to good seeing the injustice they committed at the start. That is the part of the story that contains the more conventional things that make a good and balanced story.
In regards to the sequel though, I do love the freedom and openness with the concept of Zebrica. Their ways of life, their customs, their norms, their setting, etc, all are left in the air, and all can be totally perverted. It could be interesting to see what Zebrica has in store for poor old Rumble. Still thinking it through though as anything I’ve posted from that blog I wrote can change. Most of all, I’m interested to think of how the zebra’s handled the pony mares they all brought over, and their side of the story. Maybe things aren’t as black and white as we seem… Even though, you know, zebras are literally black and white.
9409337 The Zebra are OP but it kinda of expected. I mean we don't know how long they been planning to do this and doesn't help that most ponies tended to be too trusting for their own good.
I really, really want to see another chapter showing the princesses and Shining Armor (and maybe Rainbow and Pinkie) getting drained of their magic in similar fashion. I found this chapter the best of the story, and teasing the princesses' milking without showing it is a bit cruel.
Now I know there were some complaints about the plot of this story. How zebras came off as OP, and everything seemed one sided. Well, I kind of made it like that on purpose. There really isn’t supposed to be the elements that are present in a balanced plot line like non-Mary Sue characters, meaningful character development, and whatnot that you might see in a good novel. It’s a thrill for people who are into the kinks in the story.
From a squeal point of view, it’s going to be a bit one sided because it’s the tragedy that marks the beginning of a story. Sort of like how, in Avatar, everything changed when the Fire Nation attacked. Or the same thing I pulled with my Changeling Invasion story, for anyone whose read that. The bad guys seem invincible and all hope seems lost for the drugged and clueless innocent involved. The following plot, however, usually details how the ‘good guys’ come back from that, and bring a satisfying happy end which feels all to good seeing the injustice they committed at the start. That is the part of the story that contains the more conventional things that make a good and balanced story.
In regards to the sequel though, I do love the freedom and openness with the concept of Zebrica. Their ways of life, their customs, their norms, their setting, etc, all are left in the air, and all can be totally perverted. It could be interesting to see what Zebrica has in store for poor old Rumble. Still thinking it through though as anything I’ve posted from that blog I wrote can change. Most of all, I’m interested to think of how the zebra’s handled the pony mares they all brought over, and their side of the story. Maybe things aren’t as black and white as we seem… Even though, you know, zebras are literally black and white.
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The Zebra are OP but it kinda of expected. I mean we don't know how long they been planning to do this and doesn't help that most ponies tended to be too trusting for their own good.
Hmmm... Some decent writing and hidden hint's. And zebras who kinda don't seem to get anything done without potions IMO.
But hey, keep writing.
So rumble was chosen to be the only male pony to come? I wanted button mash
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One of the few. I wouldn't say the only one.
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Question..... about the mothers that have male foals. Did they willing leave them behind?
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I feel like it's better to pretend they don't exist in these sex-filled worlds I write due to Fim Fiction's rules.
With an ending like this, I kinda hope you do a follow up. It would be greatly welcomed
Idk why, but starlight loosing her magic really got me.....and now I'm showering the sight for more fics with something like that XD thanks.
I really, really want to see another chapter showing the princesses and Shining Armor (and maybe Rainbow and Pinkie) getting drained of their magic in similar fashion. I found this chapter the best of the story, and teasing the princesses' milking without showing it is a bit cruel.