This chapter is better in my opinion. Up until now few chapters even had anything to to with twi and spike. Now I'm not one of those people how are like "show my fav character!!!" but at the and of the day it is a mop fan fic. Yet most of the story has had nothing to even do with them, mainly thrawn. Don't get me wrong, he is a cool guy, but after a while constantly listening to only his past gets old and, dare I say it, boring.
Your story is good. It is a exigent story with potential. But don't take away from the story by over saturation.
8537959 Yeah, I've been working on trying to get Twilight and Spike more involved. I've certainly have already come up with ideas for later chapters, but I'm having a hard time trying to come up with ideas for them in the next few chapters.
They'll have a bigger impact once they go to Eridau.
Thrawn ducked as Spike swung at his head, followed by a quick which You didnt even make a single sentance before producing an error so bad I have no idea what your talking about. You really really really really need an editor. Or just to look over your writing a couple times. I was forgiving for the first few chapters but this isnt improving, going to have to change to a downvote and untrack. Disappointing.
8538300 I have offered to edit I have pointed towards other great writing resources and groups and it doesn't seem as you have utilized any of them. Which leaves me wondering why you wouldn't get the help you need. If you are embarrassed by your writing ability don't be. No-one judges you harshly for seeking help on that type of thing trust me. If you are worried about people messing with your story don't be just use Google docs and set it to comments only so you have the end say. If you don't understand why you shouldn't have sentences that litteraly don't make any sense then let me put it this way. If you were watching a movie set in the middle ages and during a climactic battle everyone stopped and watched an intern holding a laptop wander through the battle would you think that's something that should be in the movie? Even if you could get past that you would be reminded your watching a movie and be pulled out of the story. Now I know you probably haven't read this far but to anyone who might have please take this to heart. It's okay to not be the best at grammar and spelling and the nuts and bolts but there are people willing to help. Utilize it.
8538624 I really don't care. I'm only writing for fun. The only times I ever ask someone to edit (besides ny first time writing) is if it's for something important like essays or reports for school.
I just don't find it worth my time looking for an editor for fics that I'm only doing for fun.
Fimfiction is only used for me to practice for any future writings that may be important such as scripts.
Since you said you find writing Twilight and Spike hard and writing about the Imperial officers easier, is that why the past couple chapters have been all about the lore and not about ponies?
8538651 Mostly, but I've already made plans for them to contribute more in later chapters plus a chapter entirely in the Celestial Alliance's perspective.
8538650 I understand that. Even then I would say find a good editor so all you have to do is give it to them then hit approve all changes and that's it. As long as you have a good editor it only takes 30 seconds of your time and dramatically increases the quality of your writing.
8538728 And I appreciate that you acknowledge that, but I just don't have the patience and I treat every day as if it's my last.
One of my main purposes is to inspire others.
For example, "Hey I've got an idea here I want to show. Maybe someone will notice, and be inspired to make their own."
Now if I was writing something for money or education, then of course, I would find an editor. I take great joy in writing things and I'm merely using Fimfiction to not only entertain myself, but to sharpen my writing skills for the future.
I will find an editor in the future, but only on works that actually matter.
8539026 Ok, but if you don't mind considering twilight has a similar power to the force "magic" I can think of some cool ways on how twilight could use her blaster creatively. I imagine twilight would be a pretty cunning fighter in combat.
8539025 You may care nothing for the quality of your stories but judging from the hundreds of up thingers 239 comments and thousands of hits someone does. I personally would feel like I owed those people at least 30 extra seconds a week but I guess thats where you and I differ.
I am pulling hair out in anticipation for Twilight's debut on the battlefield. I kinda want to see her get Command of the Vendetta since the name is appropriate, but also the Wraith just 'cause bad ass Twilight is best Twilight, and nothing is more bad ass then a SSD.
[warning, incredible levels of cryptography nerd shit detected] haven't really read this fic, just found it in my read later bin. decided to try and decode the gibberish at the bottom of the description
Gsv tzozcb szh yvvm nzmrkfozgvw uli gll olmt yb gsv uvd. Dv szev hfuuvivw zmw hzxirurxvw hl nfxs yvxzfhv lu gsvn. Rg rh grnv nb yilgsvih zmw hrhgvih, dv hszoo gzpv yzxp dszg rh irtsgufoob lfih.
translating this through one of the most popular gibberish translators left me with this, which makes no sense:
Ksv tzezcf szh yvvm nzmlkbezgvw uri krr ermt yf ksv uvd. Dv szov whbuuvivw thmw whzxilulxvw whr nbxs yvxzbhv ru ksvn. Lg lh klnv nf yirgsvih thmw whlhgvih, dv whszee kzpv yzxp dszg lh diltsgubeef rbih.
so i worked out the first code and found that it is most certainly a consistent substitution cipher due to several 'words' appearing, and i made a few guesses as to the damn thing's first few characters/words. alright, i have a good idea of a key to translate some words and letters. "The galaxy has been manipulated for too long by the few. We have suffered and sacrificed so much because of them. It is time my brothers, we shall take back what is rightfully ours."
i can share my worksheet with anyone who is curious. also, there are several other codes, damn the author, in this story that seem to be completely different. i may post another comment with my translation of that.
8620288 not asking for anything really, but can you give me a hint on the last word of the sentence? I've spent about twenty minutes trying to figure that one out. EDIT: solved the cipher. was a good challenge
8718854 I actively read and love both fics, it's no big difference to me which I get to read first. But i understand the motivation aspect of it, I hope you find what your looking for :)
8718868 I thought TLJ would motivate me, but that movie only got me nowhere. I need something, books, shows, or movies. I don’t like Rebels, but seeing something new about Thrawn does help.
Mandalorians don't think the way Hera thinks they do.
He cursed as he saw the Turbolaser batteries of the Admonitor miss the nimble A-Wing.
Star wars ships, including Star Destroyers, do have dedicated point-defense. Turbolasers wouldn't be used for it unless desperate. Bridge shields, which they have, would negate the need to be desperate. Knowing Thrawn, he's probably commanding from either deep in the ship or from the secondary bridge.
while the Rebels do indeed have superior fighters
That is highly debatable. The much faster, much higher acceleration, much muuuch more maneuverable TIEs and extremely skilled pilots could and should use swarm tactics so that no matter what the enemy does, they will be receiving fire from one or more directions at all times. This would also be useful even when outnumbered by superior machines. The Sith Empire used such tactics and dominated fighter warfare in this way. It forces enemy fighters into a position where they cannot dogfight without being blown up by someone else yet not dog-fighting just gets them wasted by flights, wings, squadrons, etc. of TIEs using larger scale swarm tactics against enemy flights, wings, squadrons, etc. So, dog-fight and you die, don't dog-fight and you die. Cannot run away from the faster (or at least much better acceleration) fighters, cannot out-maneuver them...you're just plain screwed.
9813729 Not to mention the empire was actually being to pump out fighters on par or in rare cases surpassing their rebel Equivalents all together rather than in select aspects such as the TIE interceptor the TIE phantom and the TIE advanced (an attempt at a mass produced version of Vader’s custom TIE)
I'm not usually a fan of heavy metal, but Sabaton is near-godly.
I have to wonder, will the Celestial Alliance ever consider joining forces with the Rebel Alliance?
I honestly wonder how Twilight will react to Syndulla, and his past. I hope that during the interrogation, Twilight asks if she can try.
U-406 Resurfaces for a third attempt and is successful.
Down with cham
the current rebelsseason is just terrible
This chapter is better in my opinion. Up until now few chapters even had anything to to with twi and spike. Now I'm not one of those people how are like "show my fav character!!!" but at the and of the day it is a mop fan fic. Yet most of the story has had nothing to even do with them, mainly thrawn. Don't get me wrong, he is a cool guy, but after a while constantly listening to only his past gets old and, dare I say it, boring.
Your story is good. It is a exigent story with potential. But don't take away from the story by over saturation.
8537959
Yeah, I've been working on trying to get Twilight and Spike more involved. I've certainly have already come up with ideas for later chapters, but I'm having a hard time trying to come up with ideas for them in the next few chapters.
They'll have a bigger impact once they go to Eridau.
8537560
doubtful the Ca is xenopohbic
I can wait for all of pony kind to fell the wrath of the empire!
Thrawn ducked as Spike swung at his head, followed by a quick which
You didnt even make a single sentance before producing an error so bad I have no idea what your talking about.
You really really really really need an editor. Or just to look over your writing a couple times. I was forgiving for the first few chapters but this isnt improving, going to have to change to a downvote and untrack. Disappointing.
8538253
Bye
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8538300
I have offered to edit I have pointed towards other great writing resources and groups and it doesn't seem as you have utilized any of them.
Which leaves me wondering why you wouldn't get the help you need. If you are embarrassed by your writing ability don't be. No-one judges you harshly for seeking help on that type of thing trust me. If you are worried about people messing with your story don't be just use Google docs and set it to comments only so you have the end say.
If you don't understand why you shouldn't have sentences that litteraly don't make any sense then let me put it this way.
If you were watching a movie set in the middle ages and during a climactic battle everyone stopped and watched an intern holding a laptop wander through the battle would you think that's something that should be in the movie?
Even if you could get past that you would be reminded your watching a movie and be pulled out of the story.
Now I know you probably haven't read this far but to anyone who might have please take this to heart.
It's okay to not be the best at grammar and spelling and the nuts and bolts but there are people willing to help. Utilize it.
8538624
I really don't care. I'm only writing for fun. The only times I ever ask someone to edit (besides ny first time writing) is if it's for something important like essays or reports for school.
I just don't find it worth my time looking for an editor for fics that I'm only doing for fun.
Fimfiction is only used for me to practice for any future writings that may be important such as scripts.
Since you said you find writing Twilight and Spike hard and writing about the Imperial officers easier, is that why the past couple chapters have been all about the lore and not about ponies?
8538651
Mostly, but I've already made plans for them to contribute more in later chapters plus a chapter entirely in the Celestial Alliance's perspective.
8538650
I understand that. Even then I would say find a good editor so all you have to do is give it to them then hit approve all changes and that's it. As long as you have a good editor it only takes 30 seconds of your time and dramatically increases the quality of your writing.
Quick question. Will twilight carry only one pistol or two? Cause I can see it both ways. Either Han Solo or Captain Rex style.
8538728
And I appreciate that you acknowledge that, but I just don't have the patience and I treat every day as if it's my last.
One of my main purposes is to inspire others.
For example, "Hey I've got an idea here I want to show. Maybe someone will notice, and be inspired to make their own."
Now if I was writing something for money or education, then of course, I would find an editor. I take great joy in writing things and I'm merely using Fimfiction to not only entertain myself, but to sharpen my writing skills for the future.
I will find an editor in the future, but only on works that actually matter.
8539000
Nah I ain't gonna spoil it.
8539026
Ok, but if you don't mind considering twilight has a similar power to the force "magic" I can think of some cool ways on how twilight could use her blaster creatively. I imagine twilight would be a pretty cunning fighter in combat.
8539025
You may care nothing for the quality of your stories but judging from the hundreds of up thingers 239 comments and thousands of hits someone does. I personally would feel like I owed those people at least 30 extra seconds a week but I guess thats where you and I differ.
8539190
People can hate it or love it, I don't honestly care. I'm only writing for fun.
I really love this story. It really makes you think in the Empire's perspective and It really is gratifying.
I am pulling hair out in anticipation for Twilight's debut on the battlefield. I kinda want to see her get Command of the Vendetta since the name is appropriate, but also the Wraith just 'cause bad ass Twilight is best Twilight, and nothing is more bad ass then a SSD.
8554567
Franchise not francise.
[warning, incredible levels of cryptography nerd shit detected]
haven't really read this fic, just found it in my read later bin. decided to try and decode the gibberish at the bottom of the description
translating this through one of the most popular gibberish translators left me with this, which makes no sense:
so i worked out the first code and found that it is most certainly a consistent substitution cipher due to several 'words' appearing, and i made a few guesses as to the damn thing's first few characters/words.
alright, i have a good idea of a key to translate some words and letters.
"The galaxy has been manipulated for too long by the few. We have suffered and sacrificed so much because of them. It is time my brothers, we shall take back what is rightfully ours."
i can share my worksheet with anyone who is curious. also, there are several other codes, damn the author, in this story that seem to be completely different. i may post another comment with my translation of that.
8620207
I don't believe anyone's deciphered it yet. Only one of the blogs for this story.
8620288
not asking for anything really, but can you give me a hint on the last word of the sentence? I've spent about twenty minutes trying to figure that one out.
EDIT: solved the cipher. was a good challenge
Any chance of a new chapter on the horizon?
8718826
When I feel like it. I have a lot of ideas, just lacking any motivation. Currently working on my other fic right now.
8718854
I actively read and love both fics, it's no big difference to me which I get to read first. But i understand the motivation aspect of it, I hope you find what your looking for :)
8718868
I thought TLJ would motivate me, but that movie only got me nowhere. I need something, books, shows, or movies. I don’t like Rebels, but seeing something new about Thrawn does help.
8742962
I'm intrigued.
8749961
Yeah, I grew up with those comics. I loved the Vos storyline.
I'm tempted to add the Morgukai into my fic.
Mandalorians don't think the way Hera thinks they do.
Star wars ships, including Star Destroyers, do have dedicated point-defense. Turbolasers wouldn't be used for it unless desperate. Bridge shields, which they have, would negate the need to be desperate. Knowing Thrawn, he's probably commanding from either deep in the ship or from the secondary bridge.
That is highly debatable. The much faster, much higher acceleration, much muuuch more maneuverable TIEs and extremely skilled pilots could and should use swarm tactics so that no matter what the enemy does, they will be receiving fire from one or more directions at all times. This would also be useful even when outnumbered by superior machines. The Sith Empire used such tactics and dominated fighter warfare in this way. It forces enemy fighters into a position where they cannot dogfight without being blown up by someone else yet not dog-fighting just gets them wasted by flights, wings, squadrons, etc. of TIEs using larger scale swarm tactics against enemy flights, wings, squadrons, etc. So, dog-fight and you die, don't dog-fight and you die. Cannot run away from the faster (or at least much better acceleration) fighters, cannot out-maneuver them...you're just plain screwed.
9813729
Not to mention the empire was actually being to pump out fighters on par or in rare cases surpassing their rebel Equivalents all together rather than in select aspects such as the TIE interceptor the TIE phantom and the TIE advanced (an attempt at a mass produced version of Vader’s custom TIE)