Pinkamena Diane Pie has served in the Equestrian Crystal war since it had started. Equestria was slowly losing the battle and she was finally captured. What will be her fate?
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Oh. Well I do admit there has to be multiverse and alternate realities of that.
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Also yoinked the pic. X3
well, you couldn't have picked a better time to have her just show up with little to no quesitons asked by anyone involved.
Now the hard part is getting the buck out of there before they zap her, didn't seem prone to listening to reason in canon so doubt they would here without proof.
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It is a really good pic of a non murderous Pinkamena Diane Pie.
Um......I'm sorry. This is a really good story with tons of potential, but you need an editor. I was extremely confused and lost, and the pace is really fast.
I don't mean any hate. I'm just pointing out my opinion. If you get an editor, I would love to read this story.
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You are right, my grammar and stuff isn't so good. There is a reason why i barely passed my literature class with a c every time, but i did my best and even look up synonyms. Did you know that i heavily edited this chapter after almost every sentence I write? Like after writing a sentence, I reread the whole chapter. This actually got me to add more sentence later when it was reaching 1k words. I was like... "Hey! Wouldn't the crystals make a neat echo when Pinkamena and Shining was following Twilight?" and ended up adding those in. And the re-reading repeated. lols.
I am currently requesting am editor in the looking for editors forum. While i am waiting, I just read on their page that google docs was good for editing. So now I'm re editing my story again. The doc is pointing out so many errors to fix while i wait for an editor.
As for the fast pace...
(Looks away while blushing.)
I'm a slow reader ok!
To me, there are slow pacing stories out there that makes me sleep cuz I am so slow at reading. I only stay awake if the story was really engaging.
So...
Sorry for my fast pacing and confusing storytelling.
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All right! Good to know.
Yeah, I'm a fast reader, so I can see why it may have seemed fast to me, but fine to you. XD I hope to come back to this story later! It was a solid start, and did capture my attention.
Also, it's nice to see someone using the name "Pinkamena" and not having her slaughter innocent ponies. (I honestly don't get why it's used for her "dark side")
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I know right?
She looks so cute with a straight mane.
We can all blame the psycho look she had in party of one episode. It was fun the for the first few seasons, but now I just want to see Pinkie being cute in all forms: Including straight mane Pinkamena Diane Pie being lovey dovey. Sadly this isn't going to be a love story.
Someone, make a cute Pinkamena love story!
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You called?
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Did you get a notification from this fic?
It was probably because I edit the chapter in google docs and updated the chapter. or an earlier comment.
Also, which of your story should I start first?
Black Moon Howls, or The Super Duper Awesome Life of the Party Pony!
And Disharmoney: Genesis is canceled, but they are all a sequel of each other, so I don't know which one to start.
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Super Duper Awesome Life of the Party Pony. Midway through that, move to Black Moon Howls, then Disharmony: Genesis, then back to Super Duper.
Reread this after seeing it was edited, and I have to say it's much better now! I really love this!