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Shortly after a party that went terribly wrong, Rainbow Dash begins acting in ways nopony ever expected! Now it's up to both a current and an old friend of Dash's to make sense of things... before Rainbow Dash has no friends left!
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Yikes....
0 comments? Really? Wow well that's surprising.
Anyway let me give you my opinions of this story. First off I didn't expect Gilda to have such a part in this and since I haven't read anything with Gilda starring a major role I still see her as that "meanie grumpy Gilda"
<-- as she would have said it.
But her new intentions came across pretty clearly even though it still felt a bit awkward having the villain (if you wish to call her that from the episode) turn good, or always having had good intentions but I'm willing to look beyond that for now and simply accept it.
As for R-D's role in this I'd say the story caught me from the beginning. When I read about her wrong-doings I was immediately curious as to why she had done such things. I know she can be kind of full of herself sometimes, but she is the element of loyalty and would never cause any trouble or harm for her friends if everything was right. So I started to speculate upon different possibilities. Disease, curse, nagging memory and so on. I guess I was pretty right about the memory thing so that was cool :P. Nice job on that btw. I liked the ->
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Anyway so I was glad to see the story end happily and apologies were made and accepted. To me that is always the best part if done correctly which I think you got pretty close to. If not perfect it was damn close
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In short I liked the story and would definitely read any other story of yours if I ever came across it. So keep up the good work and let's hope you get a bit more attention
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Thanks for the in-depth review! My main aim with this story was to--instead of trying to paint Gilda as some sort of oppressed figure--simply play how she was presented in the show completely straight, lean into her abrasiveness, and make it work for her as a character. It seems to have worked out! Glad to see Dash came off believable to you as well.
DAAAAAAWWWWWW~
. That was adorable. And totally in character (well, 'cept for Pinkie Pie at times, but she's REALLY hard to capture if you want her to have meaningful interactions with ponies). And a completely accurate portrayal of PTSD. Kudos to you, my friend, for that was awesome. Also, Rainbow Dash in a maid outfit is, like, 20% more moe. Applejack's got the right idea.
I think it deserves to be said: I loved this story!
Rainbow in a maids outfit with Gilda laughing, and Rainbow serving food for the Apple family... I KNOW I've seen pictures like this!
Stop messing with my head!
Great story! And I like the continuity you have with your other stories
bloody brilliant! we need more stories like this, that show character development as well as you have here!
please write more stories like this.... as well written as this one at least
and now i leave a little quotation here, just because I'm weird like that
"It is possible to fail in many ways...while to succeed is possible only in one way." ~Aristotle
First I was all
And then I went
Things got a little
And then I squee'd.
Well written.
Gilda has been receiving lots of hate just because she made Fluttercry
There are quite a few who believe that Gilda does have some redeeming qualities, and this story shows us that even the Griffon has a heart under that tough girl exterior. Thankfully Pinkie Pie was the one who rekindled Dash and Gilda's friendship!
Good story, I enjoyed it. Green thumbed!
... I fucking love this story.
The flow and the IC, so amazing X3
I love this story to death. Really believable.
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Thanks so much!
Bravo! Its nice to see Gilda get some attention, and to be treated as someone more than just a monster who made Fluttershy cry. Your story doesn't sugarcoat her flaws, but shows us that anyone Dash could be friends must have some good traits as well.
The aftermath of the pegasus race, when Dash would have returned to find Fluttershy missing, is an untold story with great potential. I like how you used it to give Dash's psyche an interesting, but in still character, twist. A Rainbow Dash who's as cautious about hurting others as she is careless of her own welfare matches her canon portrayal quite nicely.
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You've pretty much hit all the nails on their heads. The whole Fluttershy crying thing was all anyone could remember around the time I wrote this, and there were a few Gilda sympathetic fics cropping up in response. Didn't sit quite right with me though, so I just asked myself, "What if I just played Gilda straight?" And thus this story was born. I remember it scaring lots of people when it was first posted. 
Thanks.
Dash's complex came entirely by accident, but when I happened upon it, I figured it'd be perfect to toss in.
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So without somepony to vent to RD turns into a rage filled Jerk monster
AWESOME
Man. If there is one guaranteed way to get committed readers, it is by showing them that Pinkie Pie has a plan.
Hmmmm. Well, now the question is: what's in chapter four?
1380587 Excuse me sir but I believe someone forgot to upvote your comment. Don't worry as I took the time to upvote it instead.
Saw you mention this in one of your question blogs. And since I love the idea that Gilda ISN'T a totally nasty character, I thought I would give it a looksee.
Bloody good show!
I see what you meant before, about how it's age shows, but the core story is quite good, and at it's worst it is still a very good tale. I kind of really want to see you remake this now.
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Thanks!
And we're highly considering it.
I would ask for a story about their time at the festival to be made, but given that this story is close to 4 years old now, and it hasn't happened yet, I doubt it's going to happen anytime soon.
A few days ago, I did some removing of stories from my favorites, and this and Applecenomics were two of the ones I ended up removing.
And even though you probably don't really care enough for me to explain, but I feel like I should, just to be on the safe side:
It's nothing to do with how either story is structured, since both are well written and have their sweet moments. Plus the characters' behavior made sense (for the most part) considering when the stories were written.
My issue is with what RD had to go through in order to make up for her actions. Not only do I think things went too far, especially on AJ's end, but on top of that...
Well, the second part is a bit more complicated.
When I first read both stories on Fanfiction.net, it was at some point during early 2013 (I think it was anyway. The amount of time I've been in the fandom has caused my earlier days to sort of blend together), and I was not as big a fan of the show as I am now, so I wasn't as connected to the characters. Thus, I could laugh at the situations they ended up in a bit easier. So I didn't mind what Dash had to do.
However, as I've spent more and more time in the fandom, I've gotten more and more attached to the characters, and, as a result, when they end up in situations that are embarrasing for them, even if there's the chance that their own actions caused them to deserve said embarrasment to some degree, I end up feeling that embarrasment with them. And sometimes, that said secondhand embarrasment can be enough to make it impossible for me to reread a story, even if:
a. The embarrasment doesn't take up half the story.
b. The rest of the story is great.
I hope that all makes sense.
And, again, even though you probably don't need this explanation, just typing it out helped me feel better.
Though I do have two questions:
1. Are you still planning on remaking the story?
2. If so, would RD still end up facing the same "punishment", or would you have AJ and Rarity be a bit more lenient towards her?
Best way to deal with Best Pony's shenanigans.
That ending! You have my attention...
"Slobberknocker". XD That's a new one.
I don't know where this is going, but I'm intrigued!
Wow, that was kind of a dark twist with Fluttershy in that flashback.
Wat do?
That was really touching. Who knows, you might make me cry before you come out with your next Juniper story!
You can has review!
Four chapters, sixteen thousand words. One story a day's been a useful upper limit so far, but I think I'm going to have to play larger stories by ear.
Twilight no, The Mysterious Mare Do Well is going to go over poorly, you can still turn back
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So much continuity.
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So uh, answers to come, obviously, but what is up with Rainbow Dash. She's obviously deeply bothered about something, but a lot of this chapter hurts to read in the same sort of way that Rainbow Rocks hurts to watch, just more one-sided. And with season one Gilda here to turn things around, I feel like I'm in for the emotional equivalent of sandpaper: things will get smoothed out eventually, but it'll be rough, coarse, and abrasive for a while.
Curiosity got the better of me.
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I liked pieces of it.
There's scattered moments across the back half that feel like they're coming from a personal place and land well in the moment, but the overall pacing feels like it's trying to tell a couple different stories at the same time. And where the last several stories absolutely nailed character voice, I caught myself mentally revising dialogue in my head more than once, especially for Rainbow Dash and Gilda's conversations.
Good ideas that didn't quite come together for me.