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The Past and the Present: Remembrance - TheArcher20



Celestia is questioned by twi as to why her teacher can't use the Elements of Harmony anymore

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A Day of Remembrance

A/N: This is a one shot I thought of and in a matter of minutes I decided to write it up! this is my second story and my first completed one. It is widely appreciated that you guys give me at least your opinion on this. So without further adieu, here is the story.

PS: To clarify the flashbacks held in 'Canterlot' were that of the old Canterlot held in what is now the Everfree Forest.


It was a warm evening, and Princess Celestia had just finished her daily duties concerning her royal court, and was relaxing in the royal gardens when she heard hoof steps heading in her direction. The princess stood up and took a deep breath, ready to act formal to one of her subjects, whomever they be. Once Celestia saw just who it was though, she quickly exhaled and greeted the little purple unicorn heading to her.

"Princess Celestia, it's so good to see you!" said Twilight excitedly rushing over to nuzzle her mentor.

"Why Twilight it's a pleasure to see you as well" Celestia gave Twilight a nuzzle back "What brings you to Canterlot?"

"Well... I've been doing a lot more research on the Elements of Harmony after we used them on Discord and-" Twilight paused to take a deep breath and find the strength to say "-I was hoping you could enlighten me by answering my questions"

The princess looked at her student and silently thought to herself until she finally said "alright Twilight. Ask whatever you would like.” The princess kept it to herself, but she felt she would regret saying that sentence to her student even though the student in question was her protege.

"Alright, well, there is a gap in history that fails to explain how you no longer had control of the Elements of Harmony and-" she paused as she saw her mentor's face quickly shine a bit of sadness , but continued "was hoping you could tell me what had happened.”

The princess stood there for what must have been a half an hour and the sun was still high in the sky when she said "please sit down Twilight, this might take a while."

********Flash back********

The month was July, and the warm heat of the sun beat down upon the peaceful and tranquil lands of the recently freed Equestria. Having saved it from Discord a few months ago, Celestia and Luna were still attempting to get used to the high class life they've been given as the new rulers of the land.

"Sister, cometh back here, I say! Give us back our slice of cake!" yelled a young blue Alicorn towards a slightly older but still youthful Alicorn.

"You have to catch me first!" the white Alicorn shouted promptly and playfully, jumping away from yet another pounce by the blue Alicorn.

"But Tia! You always get the last slice of cake! why can't I take it this time?" whined the blue Alicorn getting on two knees and pouting like a three year old asking for permission to have early desert.

"Like I said, you have to catch me first Lulu!" Celestia said with a big smile beckoning the younger sibling to make another pounce towards her.

Yes, this was a usual occurring event in their day to day lives as the immortal princesses of Equestria. This was how it had been for the two siblings. They had excessive time to kill, seeing as they had brought peace back to the lands and no real threat had seemed to appear. The staff loved the siblings and their innocent and childish behavior. Though, they were older than the staff could ever hope to be, being around five hundred years old. The staff enjoyed that the two could be so happy in such a wondrous time such as then. Though none of the people of Equestria could have predicted as to what was soon to follow.

******End Flash back******

The solar princess stopped speaking and took a long pause as she stared up at the sky seeing as the sun was now descending and Luna's moon was now starting to ascend into the sky. Celestia was lost in thought as she was holding back tears in her eyes at the memories she was speaking of with Twilight. Twilight, as expected, was taking notes of what her mentor was saying. After about an hour of Celestia staring at the sky she was dragged out of her thought by Twilight.

"Um, are you okay princess? I mean, we can stop if you don't wish to continue talking about this and we can-" she was interrupted by a hoof to her mouth.

"No.... I.... I wish to tell you this story...It's more for me then it is for sating your curiosity." The solar princess wiped a tear from her eye as she started her story back up again.

******Flash back******


It was now a foggy September day as the two Alicorns were heard bickering quite clearly by the staff.

"But Tia! These subjects of ours are so ungrateful of Thy beautiful moon and the hard work taken into such a divine creation!" yelled Luna in an angered and annoyed tone.

"No, but Luna! They aren't ungrateful, they just can't understand how much work is done unless they became the god or goddess of the moon!"

"I knowest that Tia! But it doesn't change what I said, they are rude and disrespectful of this! To think they have the nerve to keep sleeping under MY Moon without a simple thank you!"

"That's enough!" Celestia hissed slightly, trying to stop this misguided anger.

This became a regular fight once the month of September began, and the nights started getting longer to make way for winter. Celestia always tried to settle her sisters qualms, and as such failed to realize how much hate filled her heart about the subject.

..........Time fast forward..........

It's was now a cold December afternoon, and Celestia was ready to lower the sun to make way for the moon. The last few months have discerned some of Luna's inner most thoughts, but she could not decipher why it was exactly, but that day she felt hesitant about lowering the sun. She and Luna were sitting side by side in Canterlot gardens chatting about random subjects. One subject from the next continued to leap around as The sun lowered and the moon started raising.

Celestia had thought that maybe finally Luna had given up her spiteful emotions towards her own subjects, and had started to feel cheery once again. Night continued on, and they continued chit-chatting, both of them did not seem to tire as time progressed. Things were looking happy when the moon suddenly froze mid center of the sky refusing to move. Celestia quickly felt a lump in her throat as she asked why her sister felt the need to stop the Moons orbit entirely at the highest peak in the sky. This was answered by a laugh. She aimed her horn towards Celestia, obvious diabolical intent in her eyes.

"LUNA! What is the meaning of this!" Celestia shouted only getting a villainous smirk at first.

"Why sister, whatever do you mean? I'm only showing my subjects how admirable my moon is....FOREVER!"

Celestia managed to quickly place a shield up as she narrowly escaped the death of one of Luna's deadly energy bolts. The princess knew she was outmatched since Luna's power came directly from the moon, similar to how she herself obtained her's from the sun. Celestia had to think fast as her hateful sister continued to fire bolts of deadly energy at the weakening shield.

At the last minute the shield faded, and Celestia quickly used her energy to teleport to the throne room where the Elements of Harmony were located. The princess had used up more power then she thought,and was barely able to lift each of the ancient orbs off of their pedestal. She was panting rapidly. Knowing her power was nearly depleted, she would need to use the rest of it on her sister when she arrived in order for her to survive.

Celestia thought of this and she was nearly in tears, but she forcefully threw the distraught thoughts to the back of her mind as she attempted to wait for Luna's next, and very soon, attempt on her life. Just as expected, Luna flew in through an open overhang window as she started to speak.

"Ah! So this is where you have been hiding my little pain!" she hissed this towards the sun princess, who flinched back and winced.

"Why are you doing this Luna!? What is causing you to act like this!?"

"HAHAHA! You still think I’m still that stupid child Luna! No I'm to be referred to as my new self! The new lone ruler of Equestria... NIGHTMARE MOON!" She hissed this out as the sun princess was now being pressed up against a wall, the Elements sitting around her.

Celestia tried once more to reason with her "w-what do you mean you're no longer Luna?" She asked nervously. She knew she had to use the Elements. Her horn started glowing and she cautiously and quietly began an attempt at activating the Elements of Harmony before Nightmare caught on.

"I mean that your sister is no longer here! I take her place in body and mind! And now it is time for you to die!"

Nightmare moon leaped towards Celestia horn lowered, onset on penetrating Celestia's skull. Celestia's horn started glowing brighter as she mustered up all her power and activated the Elements. As the Elements continued charging, Luna had already made the leap at Celestia with intent of taking her life. Right before the bright flash caused by the Elements firing off, two words came from the sun princess's mouth

"I'm... sorry.”

A flash of light blinded everything and the castle started rumbling. The light disappeared as quickly as it had appeared and Celestia found herself staring at Nightmare Moon, staring right back at her. Before she could say anything she quickly started crying as Nightmare Moon started turning to dust, starting with her lower hooves. The dust was swept away by an unseen wind and drifted outside the window, heading for the moon. Celestia stood there, crying as Nightmare Moon was fading away, hate and confused pain in her eyes, muttering only one word before fading away completely: "Why?"

*****End Flash back*****


Celestia was now crying violently as the purple unicorn attempted to comfort by rubbing the sun princess' back, feelings of regret washing over her for ever asking such a question. They silently sat like that for a long while until Celestia had to raise the sun. She eventually calmed down as it seemed that Twilight's comforting was finally having an effect. Twilight remembered when the princess had done the same for her.

With a few sniffs and a tear, Celestia had calmed down and said "After that final day, I could no longer be completely honest with myself. I covered up some of what happened, trying to erase any information of that day. I tried to make sure it was left as a myth and nothing more. Since I could no longer be completely honest with anyone, I was no longer in sync with the elements and slowly, one by one, they became useless and I could no longer use them." Celestia started smiling again "but if not for you and your friends, I would never again have my sister back."

She looked down to Twilight, pain now being overshadowed by closure. “.. and I couldn't be happier.”

Comments ( 33 )

First of all: First
Secondly, not bad I have to admit. Storyline flows well and I will be looking forward to the next chapter.

872365

sorry but this was specifically a one shot at a sudden spur of the moment idea. make no mistake i will make more stories following this universe in the near future. :pinkiehappy: glad you liked the story

Even better now that I'm leisurely reading it! :pinkiehappy:

872670

awesome to hear it!

I like this story c:

872698

lol sorry i forgot that was on monday :twilightsheepish:

oh and i'll send you a list of the story's i got planned for the future so expect it soon! i will want your honest opinion as always and its 9 different stories 8 with plots so get ready! :pinkiehappy:

872706
Okie dokie lokie!

872754

happy to hear that! :pinkiehappy:

wowwwww!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

A little short, but well flowing, nice job, no discernable mistakes, and it gets the situation across, though more emotion could be portrayed and that would really MAKE this story. But as it is it's good.
Well done :yay:
Honora Imperator

873388

thanks for telling me. in truth i planned to make this far more longer but somehow i accidentally put all i wanted to in it in such a short ammount of words. i agree it could use more emotion portayed but i find myself satisfied with this. plus i feel if i add any more words to this i would have to make this into a full blown story instead of the one shot i originally intended this to be. i will remember what you said for the other story's in the future.

873388 I have to disagree sir, I found a few mistakes. None too large, but they detract greatly from the rest of the story. I suggest you go get a good editor, author, and while I may like this story, it has several grammar and spelling mistakes.

873486

well my fine sir i will go back through and check as well as talk to my editor about the missed mistakes. i can assure you the both of us will fix this.

edit: no mistakes noticeable that would take away from the story by what i see.

That was a good little story :pinkiehappy: Good flow and excelentley paced :raritystarry:

874471

thank you! :pinkiehappy:

would anyone believe i wrote this in roughly five hours?

>>TheArcher20
i belive it!!! I wrote a cupcakes 2 story and it took 3 hours! i belive it! :pinkiehappy: :twilightsmile:

876419

really?

:pinkiegasp: oh no! the memories of cupcakes are returning :pinkiesick: *snap* :pinkiecrazy:

873495 I believe you mean ma'am. I can edit it if you wish.

923177
well ma'am apologies for the gender mistake. but if you see errors then by all means post a comment pointing them out. as i said the only thing i could see would probably be a small amount of grammar mistakes. but if you see something then like i said feel free to post a comment that has the sentence in question in the comment.

it's an interesting answer to the question, but i really think there could have been more put into the story. also, NightMare Moon's entrance was very...abrupt.
I think that my only issue with your grammar and whatnot is that your grasp of the older forms of English (thees and thous and such) could use a bit of help ('Thy' is a second-person possessive pronoun, and there's one point where you seem to be trying to use it in place of 'My', which is first-person(or pony...eh, details:derpytongue2:))

on the whole, not bad, just rough around the edges. my suggestion for whatever you write next is: don't rush yourself trying to get everything out in order, give your characters and story room to breathe, metaphorically.

929559
thank you for letting me know these things. i have little grasp of the old english so it made this a bit tough to write. her entrance was abrupt because i didn't take my time. i just went from the idea - plot - story - editor - post. and if i had taken my time it would of been maybe 300 words more maybe. thanks for the advice. i'll remember that for the next "The Past and the Present" story. If i have the time i may poke the story here and there to fix it up. but nothings for sure.

P.S: anyone else who just says its bad without actually pointing out some of the flaws as examples will most likely be ignored.

923344 Well, they don't really take away from the story per se, they're more like itty bitty things that nag at your brain that keep you re-reading the sentence, thinking "That doesn't sound right, why does that not sound right?!?!?" I'm currently editing it in Google Docs, I'll fix all errors that I can find. Most of it is just missing commas, running sentences together, and such. I can PM you the edited version if you want, or you can PM me your email and I can email it. (I think the second option would be best, as it is over 1,000 words.)

965682
well like i said you can just post a comment that pointed the mistakes out. i'm not too keen on comma's because when i do put them i put too many, as for run on's i'll have my editor look for those. you didn't have to completely rewrite the story. i hope this does not bother you too much as i didn't mean for you to completely try and go through and fix them yourself. since there probably is a few run on sentences i think they may even be there on purpose. i do not intend to have a viewer do my or my editors work.
may you have a nice day.

p.s. i appreciate your willingness to go to such lengths but dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Rainbow_Dash.png just let us run through it a few times now that you pointed out what exactly we should be looking for.

965718 Well, because of my nitpickiness, the list is... rather long... because I look at tiny details too much XD so do you want me to pick out the bigger ones only, or give you the full, nitpicky list? The whole list would probably go best through PM, people aren't too fond of long comments.
Most of these edits are probably nonexistent, I should warn you.

965812
i would say you may be worrying about this too much, i will as i said look back and take down the most obvious ones but i still have to continue the other stories i am working on. i have a few long chapters for both my stories to work with and i would have to say. it may just be you for the majority of the case. i would suggest shrugging off problems like that as i made those mistakes because. i am trying to be as polite and nice as possible on this matter.
so dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Rainbow_dealwithit.png

ps: this is only a fanfic site, i would say it is something worth nitpicking if it was going somewhere more important but i don't see much need in addressing this issue immediately or within the early future.

965907 Okay. Sorry bout that, I'm a little(<-- Understatement, HUUUUGE understatement)nitpicky. It really is a good story though, I didn't mean to make it seem like there's a mistake in every word. I really like it. It's probably better than what I could do on my own. Keep writing, you're pretty good at it.

i like this! The last few paragraphs were my favorite part. I feel that you ended it perfectly with the ". . . and I couldn't be happier."

If I wasn't even worse when I started writing stories of my own, then I would be complaining about the weird but mostly good grammar and horrible lack of proper punctuation. As it is though, this story just comes off as boring to me. A theory that probably has a lot of truth to it in canon, yet seems obvious to me (the part about the elements slowly going inert one by one is just a detail that has little to no consequence on the big picture, but more minor details like this would help the story). Celestia is described as crying, yet this is delivered in such a dry manner that I just felt annoyed when reading it, and Twilight is literally just used as a prop to further the story instead of being an actual character of consequence (other than being the catalyst for this situation when she asked the question(s)). It all flows together like a straight and thin river without life in it, if that makes any sense.

I wish I had more constructive criticism to give, as well as more specific pointers, but for all my experience in writing stories and reading both good and bad stories, I don't really have much formal education when it comes to English literature. Keep trying though, that was for the most part what I did when I wrote any fiction.

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