A man of dark magic and dreams of domination was flung into an unsupecting world of ponies. Watch as years later this dark lord faces down the greatest challenge he's ever known: parenting.
A Guardsmare of half height and double spirit finds love twice as tall and thrice as strong: a Reverse Gender Roles Equestria story of epic proportions and minuscule stature.
The major problem in the writting of your fanfic is the lack of pronouns. It makes reading it way harder than it should be. Otherwise, you seem to have kept the grammar to a readable level which is pretty good for a first fic. Keep working!
The major problem in the writting of your fanfic is the lack of pronouns. It makes reading it way harder than it should be. Otherwise, you seem to have kept the grammar to a readable level which is pretty good for a first fic. Keep working!
my brother read this before... i should"ve listened to him....*gives an akward grin while blushing* and are lightning and spiral your characters/ ocs?...
I'm just a young brony in puberty with wild imagination...
Heh reminds me of my birth but instead happiness it was an accident
Also its happiness not happyness
8005593 Thanks.
Nice profilepic btw...
*blushes* uhh.. this story was um.. i dont know how to express it... * face turns red*
8006045 Erotic? xD
The major problem in the writting of your fanfic is the lack of pronouns. It makes reading it way harder than it should be.
Otherwise, you seem to have kept the grammar to a readable level which is pretty good for a first fic.
Keep working!
The major problem in the writting of your fanfic is the lack of pronouns. It makes reading it way harder than it should be.
Otherwise, you seem to have kept the grammar to a readable level which is pretty good for a first fic.
Keep working!
i t-think im traumatized... *blushes more red*
my brother read this before... i should"ve listened to him....*gives an akward grin while blushing*
and are lightning and spiral your characters/ ocs?...
8006102 Lightning is my OC and Spiral is one of my friends OC. All of this is based on a Erotic Roleplay that we did.
8006092 Thank you!
8006104 oh thank you! *smiles at her face red*
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8006104 and i loved this fan fic to be honest..
8006110 *BLushing intensifies*
8006115 XD
8006115 anyways wanna roleplay? in a place idk u choose if u say yes .
8006120 Messenger, WhatsApp, Skype. You name it!
8006125 maybe whats app
8006125 tell meh ur number XD
8006126 Sure! :3
8006127 I sended it to you in PMs! :3
8005753 I took it when my dad shove his dick up his own ass
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Welp, it was nice knowing you for those 5minutes. R.I.P.
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