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dziadek1990


Hobbyist writer and a math geek. Mostly writing dialogue-heavy super-short Slice-of-Life/Comedy comics (fimfics: a lot less)

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Fluttershy invites Rarity to relax at a fast-food restaurant after an exhausting work-week (which was made only worse by her little sister's antics).

They meet Pinkie there, and the pink pony's story about the also-tiring project she's working on gives Rarity an idea how to make both of their lives easier.

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Not bad, but the story has all this build-up, and then it fails to deliver on that build-up. It feels rather incomplete, but it's a pretty good start.

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:) Thanks. Yeah, I agree.

I specialize too much with super-short scenes. The ones I wrote elsewhere are a lot better quality.

Ponies and D&D parts 1-4, for example.

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