• Member Since 7th Jun, 2012
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Sparkling Shield


im a brony with some strange tastes for fan fics, but nether the less, i will write

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Living in Manehatten can get to you, but not as much as knowing you have a long lost sister. My brother has suffered long enough. Tomorrow, I'm taking him to Ponyville to start over, with his sister. i just wish i could stay... but i would need a lucky moment, or some kind of magic to change that.
(future chapters are going to need more OCs as they come)

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Lesson #1 for descriptions: Show, don't tell.

What? :ajsleepy::fluttershbad::raritydespair::twilightoops::rainbowderp::pinkiecrazy:
No… :facehoof: Don't directly address the reader in the story - let the story address the reader. Those instructions you have there are like an author's note.

Lesson #1 for putting a story on Fimfiction: Never......EEEEEEEEVER use the pony generator as the story picture. That literally kills you chances with most of the readers here, as they hold any story that uses it for the story picture in low regards.

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