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Pinkie Pie invites everypony in Ponyville to her wedding, and with Princess Celestia as the SDIG (Super Duper Important Guest). Including Rainbow Dash, of course. She doesn't mind to go until she hears Pinkie Pie set up the rules.

One, any pony who attends Pinkie's wedding would have to bring a partner of the opposite gender with them. Two, the lucky mare who gets the bunch of flowers at the end of the wedding must come up on stage to kiss their partner.

Rainbow Dash isn't really comfortable with both rules. First, she doesn't have a partner. Second, she doesn't want to catch the flowers.

Given that Pinkie's wedding is in one month, Rainbow only has one month's time to find a partner...and a dress for the wedding.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 38 )

Amazing so far,the story really has potential. Keep up the good work! :pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss:

7345073 Thanks. It's my first story, so I poured all my heart into it. There's a follow-up story coming up in the future! :twilightsmile:

But..but what about the gays? ( T-T)

SOOOOO KEEEEEWWWWWTTTTT!:raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry:
ALSO, MAKE THEM KISS AT PINKS WEDDING! I DEMAND IT!:flutterrage:
ehhheh.....sorry:fluttershyouch:
Faving dis:raritywink:

7356667 I already did in Part 2 (sorry, it's a spoiler) :twilightsheepish:

I'm loving it, keep it up :heart:

This is yet the best stories I read. Keep it up your doing a great job.

KEEP IT UP
THIS IS AMAZING

This is beautiful! Can't wait for more!!! :pinkiehappy::heart:

7358405 This story is soooooo cute!!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::heart::heart: I WANT MORE!!!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:
MORE FLUFF!!!!!!!!!!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

These chapters are ssoooooo cute :twilightsmile::twilightsmile::heart::heart::raritystarry: i love it. Oooh can you mske more for use please.:scootangel::raritystarry::pinkiehappy::heart:

7359109 I am currently working on the follow-up story that I mentioned!:pinkiehappy:

OMFGGGGG THAT WAS SO AWESOME! I FANGIRLED TO HARD AT THAT MOMENT!!:raritystarry:

LOL I wrote that before reading part 2:twilightblush:

who's pinkie's husband? i want to read it when it's done so i just want to know who's the (lucky) guy

7364076 I've already stated at the start of the story when Pinkie Pie told her friends she was getting married. Cheese Sandwich is Pinkie's husband!:pinkiesmile:

Well, where do I begin?

This story was cheesy at best and disappointing at worst. My main grips with the story is the way you have failed to assign different speakers to different paragraphs for the most part. Inconsistently too.

Consider this:

  "So, any idea who you all are going to bring?" Pinkie Pie asked, not hearing what Rainbow Dash had muttered. Twilight grinned confidently, "I'll bring my coltfriend, Flash Sentry. I'm sure he doesn't mind, what's more, I even plan on getting the flowers!" Sure, Flash Sentry had been dating Twilight Sparkle for almost a year now. Rarity flipped her mane. "Fancy Pants would go with me. And I also plan on getting the flowers too!" Twilight and Rarity glared at each other in mock rivalry. They laughed after that. "Well, I'm going with Caramel. He's...he's a nice fella," Apple Jack stammered. Her five other friends ooh-ed. She groaned internally. "C-can..I...I go w-with... B-big Macint-tosh?" Fluttershy asked timidly. Apple Jack raised an eyebrow at her. The others nodded encouragingly.

Against this:

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  "Pinkie, thanks for inviting us to your place for a sleepover!" Twilight Sparkle thanked her.

Pinkie Pie grinned in response. She had invited her five friends, Twilight Sparkle, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, Apple Jack and Rarity, to Sugarcube Corner for a sleepover. Pinkie Pie had something important to tell her friends.

  "Guys? I got news! I'm getting married in a month!" Pinkie Pie exclaimed, jumping out of her sleeping bag. "I invited the whole of Ponyville, and anypony else who wants to see me at my wedding!"

  "That's wonderful, Pinkie! I knew that Cheese Sandwich was going to do that!" Twilight clapped her hooves together in excitement.

  "I shall make your wedding dress, Pinkie Pie, I've ideas in my mind already!" Rarity rambled on and on about her ideas.

  "Ahm happy for ya, Pinkie Pie!" Apple Jack tossed her hat into the air as a sign of celebration.
  "That's awesome!" Rainbow Dash flew up to the ceiling.

  "Wow, that's nice, Pinkie Pie," Fluttershy cheered softly.

At least try consistently applying this. You did a satisfactory job of it, even if you slightly messed the grammer up.

"Uh, yeah...um...of course!" Rainbow Dash replied hastily. In fact, she did not have any stallions in mind. She wanted to be the same with the rest of her friends. Being the odd one out was a huge blow to her ego.

I have a question for you. Is this actually Rainbow Dash? The Rainbow Dash who dislikes mushy signs of affection and anything she considers soft? The Rainbow Dash who has placed the idea of romance low on her list in favour of joining the Wonderbolts, putting up good flight shows and making a good career for herself?

Moreover, you have a tendency of telling instead of showing us information, like how Rainbow Dash-Lookalike is devastated that she doesn't have a date to Pinkie's Wedding. Instead of telling us, show us how Rainbow Dash reacts to the news, like for say, the way she talks and the body signs and non-verbal language she gives off to her friends.

Consider this:

In fact, she did not have any stallions in mind. She wanted to be the same with the rest of her friends. Being the odd one out was a huge blow to her ego.

Against this:

"Well, this is horse hockey!" Rainbow whispered. "Who cares about some stupid date that we have to bring to Pinkie's wedding, anyway? I don't need some dumb colt at my side throughout the whole thing, I'm fine on my own!"

She tossed about in bed, her brows furrowing into a V.

"I hope..."

Isn't that better?

That's not the end of it, though. I'll post more when I have the time.

Comment posted by Addictive Reads deleted Jul 5th, 2016

7376872 Coming up in the future. But I don't know when though. I'm currently working on my latest story, The War Within Equestria. :twilightsheepish::applejackunsure:

Pls make a sequel plsss !!!! I want some morrrrree

Pinkie Pie grinned from ear to ear (literally), and put on a devilish smirk.

The creepypastas! they burn!

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SO CUUUUUUUUUUTTTTTTTEEEEEEE:raritystarry::rainbowkiss::flutterrage:

"...have to bring a partner of the opposite gender with them."
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You actually got downvoted for stating the obvious? I mean, what the hell is the point of writing a story with this premise if Rainbow Dash is just going to ask Soarin'.

Even if Rainbow dash wasn't the focus character, someone should have said, "So, when will you tell Lyra and Bon Bon that they're not invited?" or somesuch.

Awkward.. (meh, nothing compared to an old blog of mine, with the cloud.)

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