This story is suppost to be written as a Grim Dark fiction. WARNING: DON'T READ IF AppleJack is your favorite or if you don't like RainbowMac or AppleDash. some parts might not be good for kids under the age of 10. But if you wanna read that's fine, aslo this does bring back things from Rocket to insanity, if you haven't read that, I suggest you read it before this, trust me. otherwise, enjoy!
p.s. if I offend anyone, I don't mean to.
The story is about the two Love birds Big Macintosh and Rainbow Dash out to seek and kill AppleJack because she is torturing Big Mac. towards the end when Rainbow Dash has to kill AppleJack she softens up and feels sorry for her, but Big Mac continues to make the mare kill his sister
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It was "bad", but in a good way. It made the story a bit more fun.
Pretty good storyline, well done! However, I believe you should get an editor or pre-reader for grammatical errors.
I agree with the aboven comment: While the storyline has some promise, you really do need to get the grammar and spelling errors sorted. Here's a link to the pre-readers group on this site; I'm sure someone there would be willing to help you.
This is stupid
765263 yes I know that, I was speed typing and didn't go back to check
Applejacks my, what... Fourth favorite pony. And still I cried
never..........ever...................EVER.............reading this again! i cried!!!
Wow. Just... Just wow.