Anon has moved to Equestria seeking a calmer life style. With his job in Canterlot and his home in Ponyville, Anon gets to meet a lot of new ponies to and from work. Three such ponies he meets change his life, and the calm he had sought is shattered.
This story was just about 2 moms, now you put rainbow's too? why not Fluttershy's? or time travel to bang Butter Pear too just then she has a temporal falling out? you can leave Rarity's mom, really the most beautiful pony having an averagish mom.
8255665 Tbh, I can't stand her. Or Flutters. Too cowardly and meek for me. I just can't see myself writing about them without tormenting and teasing them in the easiest ways possible, recording their reactions, and playing it all back to laugh at over and over. I'm a horrible person.
I waited for at least 3 chapters of this to be out, and took longer to read it than I should have, but I'm enjoying what I've read so far. Despite my dislike for "Anon" related stories, I've truly enjoyed what you have created. I look forward to more chapters as they come out.
8279610 Okay, but she instead came off as something much, much worse. The "This night has not gone how I wanted it to, so I'm going to take out my frustrations on the nearest person" type.
That waiter did nothing to her or anonymous. He had no way to know that booth was going to collapse. He took their order, and gave them their food; just like his job entails. There was no reason for Velvet to blame the accident on him. It was the manager's fault.
8281216 Not necessarily. The up-keep of tables and chairs falls on every member of a restaurant's staff. They have to check it every time they wipe down the seats and table tops. If something breaks, you can tell how well that thing is taken care of by the kind of excuse you get. Such as, "I'm very sorry. Allow me to move you to another table." Which to me says, "I knew about it but didn't or couldn't do anything do anything about the problem." Then you have the, "I'm very sorry, I don't know why it broke. It was fine when I cleaned it..." and so on. This is more believable and usually much more sincere. Coming from both food service and customer service, I know many excuses and apologies. After a while, you can easily pick out people's b.s. Actually... you just gave me a great little segment to add into Anon's and Velvet's future interactions. Thanks!
8281336 That's... What? No! That's not at all how restaurants work. The general staff is in no way responsible for the upkeep of the equipment.
The upkeep of furniture and equipment is the sole responsibility of the restaurant's owner, and the one responsible for letting the owner know that something is run-down is the manager. I don't know where you got the idea that a waiter should know exactly how close a bench is to collapsing, but you've been sorely mislead.
8281409 True, but, in a small hole-in-the-wall restaurant like the one in this chapter it's also very much the duty of the staff to tell (or to outright fix, depending on the level of corporate control if any) the person responsible for taking care of those things. If something like this happens in a real restaurant the waiter will get yelled at first, then his supervisor, and so on up the chain until something is done about it. What Velvet did was actually very smart. You make the poor sob working the tables feel as though it's his responsibility and force him into a corner. Then, demand some kind of compensation for your troubles; which they got. If the waiter had been on-the-ball he would have left to get the Chef or someone with that kind of power to come out and placate the upset customer. He didn't do it and basically an expensive meal just got deducted from his pay. This game might be cheap and underhanded, but it happens all the time. I've watched it happen in restaurants. Maybe not blown out of proportion like I wrote, but similarly. A restaurant will do anything to keep from being sued, especially if what happened causes direct injury to the customer.
All that aside, this is basically a night gone horribly wrong. Everything that could have gone wrong, did. Things were handled improperly, people got hurt, and there was a fight. Horrible night. But, tragedy plus time is comedy gold. The next two chapters should have some reconciliation to cover all the things that happened.
8281954 A waiter's job is not to do carpentry. You can say that a good waiter would mention to the manager that a booth is starting to fall apart if they notice it, but the reason they are paid, and the reason they are in the establishment at all, is to wait tables.
What Velvet did was actually very smart.
Maybe for a sociopath who just wants to use people. A decent person would recognize that a mistake was made, and that yelling at people who aren't responsible for it isn't going to change what has already happened. Instead, the effort should be put into getting recompense from the person who is actually supposed to stop such things from happening in the first place.
Velvet should have brought her grievance directly to the manager, if not even further up. As it is, she comes across as a psychotic bitch who just likes screaming at random people when things don't go her way.
8282158 Maybe, maybe not. In smaller establishments the waiters have to be able to do basic maintenance. Psychotic or not ("not" in this case), she's still in the right. Her date got hurt because of the restaurant staff on top of her having an emotionally mixed night out. Acting psychotic and actually being psychotic are very different things. Your argument is based on people not making mistakes and actually being decent, reasonable beings... especially when everyone has lapses in judgement no matter how good they are.
Anyway, you'll have to wait and see what happens later. Like I said, you gave me a few points to hit later on that I think I can use to make the story longer.
8282329 If a restaurant is big enough to have a dedicated waiter, it's big enough to have a dedicated maintenance worker. The only time the general staff are responsible for taking care of furniture is when the restaurant is actually a diner. In which case, there's usually still a maintenance guy because the on-hand staff rarely exceeds four people total, and can't spare the time.
It is never a waiter's responsibility to know exactly what condition the tables are in, and it's certainly not their fault if something breaks. Furthermore, it's absolutely not a waiter's fault if a random patron is having a bad day. The only person who holds any responsibility in this scenario is the manager.
You're never in the right for yelling at someone. Especially not in public, especially not at someone you don't know, and especially not at someone who has no hand in why you're upset.
You went out of your way to describe that the waiter was haggard and stressed, and yet he still did his job perfectly. He got Anon and Velvet a private booth, he took their orders without a fuss, even though Anon was trying to fuck with him, he brought them their food as soon as it was ready, and he even apologized on behalf of the restaurant when something went wrong. He did absolutely nothing wrong, and yet you're telling me that Velvet was in the right to not only yell at him in public, but threaten him as well?
No. No, she's not in the right.
As a writer, you're not connected to your characters. You're generally not advocating for them when they do something wrong. I don't get why you're so defensive of Velvet here. She mistreated an innocent person in public, possibly got them fired, and you're trying to tell me that this was a good thing for her to have done. You can just say, "Yeah, what Velvet did was really fucked up," and leave it at that, but you're dead-set on the notion that she was right.
It confuses me greatly.
The story's still fine, and I'm definitely going to keep reading. It's good to have a protagonist do something morally wrong, especially if the story makes it clear that it was a wrong thing to do. It puts some gray in the world. It means that the story is more complex than "protagonists good, antagonists evil". But the way you're defending Velvet's actions makes me concerned for the story.
Velvet comes across as a bitchy, used up, attitude mare with a history of making bad decisions. I'm willing to bet her marriage with Night Light wasn't all one sided in his fault. Anon seems to be an opportunistic mom white lighting faggot with a penchant for only going for mares that have had kids so their biological clock has been satisfied. I have seen no attempt made for him to date a younger, foalless mare at all.
I hope to see more soon, but as someone who has dated a single mom before, I know this shit ain't what it's cracked up to be.
Nice to an update, I'm enjoying this story. You don't seem to see many about Velvet. Waiter was right though, Velvet is a milf.
Clop after being knocked in the balls twice? Is that even possible?
Great first date. no really they will be talking about this for ages. And if they do that means it was memorable right?
It lives
8252526
It is possible. He just won't be "swinging" or slapping" them in any way.
8252534
Yus. Memorable first dates are the best. Even if they're terrible. If you can look back on the whole thing and laugh, then it was good.
8252542
I just found a new reason to cringe and cross my legs...
Can we have the pink mare decked by Velvet? She wants to fight like a stallion she gets dropped like a stallion - by an actual classy mare.
*passesout* So happy....
A nice chapter!
Also, just noticed you added windy whistle s t the description
Well it's about damn time!
And now my nuts hurt...
Yay I love your story keep it up
I thougt this story was dead, glad to see it live on
YEEESSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!
its been so long!!!!!!
YEAAAAHHHHHH!!!!
the milfs are BACK!!!!!
What a new chapter!?!?
I must be dreaming!
I was expecting him to pull a knife out and start stabbing at that last part.
I guess I've been watching too much movies.
8253271
I think your avatar justifies your reaction, eh?
*<>* Berry Punch's drunken escapades ep. 1
DODGE ! ~ Namekian proverb . . .
Wait why is rainbow mum on the cover did she also had a agreement with her husband ?😕
Holy Shit! IT LIVES!!
Ok, just read the story over three days. More, I must have more!
8253563
Naw, nothin' like that. But, she was just too cute to pass up. I couldn't leave her out of this story.
This story was just about 2 moms, now you put rainbow's too? why not Fluttershy's? or time travel to bang Butter Pear too just then she has a temporal falling out? you can leave Rarity's mom, really the most beautiful pony having an averagish mom.
Hmmm, interesting. I do like their dynamic, nice bantering
Yay update! Did you add RD's mom to the picture?
8255609
I did. She's too cute to pass up.
8255662
But what about Mrs. Shy? She is super adorable!
8255665
Tbh, I can't stand her. Or Flutters. Too cowardly and meek for me. I just can't see myself writing about them without tormenting and teasing them in the easiest ways possible, recording their reactions, and playing it all back to laugh at over and over. I'm a horrible person.
8255756
It is fine but I love how cute Fluttershy is and her mom too.
I see you got some "inspiration" after watching "Parental Glidance"
Why are they snapping at the waiter, do they think it's his fault the chair broke?
I waited for at least 3 chapters of this to be out, and took longer to read it than I should have, but I'm enjoying what I've read so far. Despite my dislike for "Anon" related stories, I've truly enjoyed what you have created. I look forward to more chapters as they come out.
Yay! I'm so happy this story got updated! There isn't enough Romantic Stories with older Mares on here. XD
8252514
I agree. there seems to be quite a few in the Series. Button Mash's Mother, Mrs. Cake to name a couple.
8261830
Mrs. Cake has quite a few that are really good. Two of which are my favorites. No clop, just damn good stories.
8264076
Really? I'll have to search for those. No Clop is fine, romance can be fulfilling enough by itself! :D
...I love Twilight Velvet
Thanks for the update Ravvij! I glad to see the story is not dead. I do hope you continue.
For the life of me, I can't understand why Velvet went off on the waiter.
8278993
because i didn't want to make her the "i demand to speak to the manager" type. not sure how else to show it though.
8279610
Okay, but she instead came off as something much, much worse. The "This night has not gone how I wanted it to, so I'm going to take out my frustrations on the nearest person" type.
That waiter did nothing to her or anonymous. He had no way to know that booth was going to collapse. He took their order, and gave them their food; just like his job entails. There was no reason for Velvet to blame the accident on him. It was the manager's fault.
8281216
Not necessarily. The up-keep of tables and chairs falls on every member of a restaurant's staff. They have to check it every time they wipe down the seats and table tops. If something breaks, you can tell how well that thing is taken care of by the kind of excuse you get.
Such as, "I'm very sorry. Allow me to move you to another table." Which to me says, "I knew about it but didn't or couldn't do anything do anything about the problem."
Then you have the, "I'm very sorry, I don't know why it broke. It was fine when I cleaned it..." and so on. This is more believable and usually much more sincere. Coming from both food service and customer service, I know many excuses and apologies. After a while, you can easily pick out people's b.s.
Actually... you just gave me a great little segment to add into Anon's and Velvet's future interactions. Thanks!
8281336
That's... What? No! That's not at all how restaurants work. The general staff is in no way responsible for the upkeep of the equipment.
The upkeep of furniture and equipment is the sole responsibility of the restaurant's owner, and the one responsible for letting the owner know that something is run-down is the manager. I don't know where you got the idea that a waiter should know exactly how close a bench is to collapsing, but you've been sorely mislead.
8281409
True, but, in a small hole-in-the-wall restaurant like the one in this chapter it's also very much the duty of the staff to tell (or to outright fix, depending on the level of corporate control if any) the person responsible for taking care of those things. If something like this happens in a real restaurant the waiter will get yelled at first, then his supervisor, and so on up the chain until something is done about it.
What Velvet did was actually very smart. You make the poor sob working the tables feel as though it's his responsibility and force him into a corner. Then, demand some kind of compensation for your troubles; which they got. If the waiter had been on-the-ball he would have left to get the Chef or someone with that kind of power to come out and placate the upset customer. He didn't do it and basically an expensive meal just got deducted from his pay.
This game might be cheap and underhanded, but it happens all the time. I've watched it happen in restaurants. Maybe not blown out of proportion like I wrote, but similarly. A restaurant will do anything to keep from being sued, especially if what happened causes direct injury to the customer.
All that aside, this is basically a night gone horribly wrong. Everything that could have gone wrong, did. Things were handled improperly, people got hurt, and there was a fight. Horrible night. But, tragedy plus time is comedy gold. The next two chapters should have some reconciliation to cover all the things that happened.
8281954
A waiter's job is not to do carpentry. You can say that a good waiter would mention to the manager that a booth is starting to fall apart if they notice it, but the reason they are paid, and the reason they are in the establishment at all, is to wait tables.
Maybe for a sociopath who just wants to use people. A decent person would recognize that a mistake was made, and that yelling at people who aren't responsible for it isn't going to change what has already happened. Instead, the effort should be put into getting recompense from the person who is actually supposed to stop such things from happening in the first place.
Velvet should have brought her grievance directly to the manager, if not even further up. As it is, she comes across as a psychotic bitch who just likes screaming at random people when things don't go her way.
8282158
Maybe, maybe not. In smaller establishments the waiters have to be able to do basic maintenance.
Psychotic or not ("not" in this case), she's still in the right. Her date got hurt because of the restaurant staff on top of her having an emotionally mixed night out. Acting psychotic and actually being psychotic are very different things. Your argument is based on people not making mistakes and actually being decent, reasonable beings... especially when everyone has lapses in judgement no matter how good they are.
Anyway, you'll have to wait and see what happens later. Like I said, you gave me a few points to hit later on that I think I can use to make the story longer.
And so it begins...
8282329
If a restaurant is big enough to have a dedicated waiter, it's big enough to have a dedicated maintenance worker. The only time the general staff are responsible for taking care of furniture is when the restaurant is actually a diner. In which case, there's usually still a maintenance guy because the on-hand staff rarely exceeds four people total, and can't spare the time.
It is never a waiter's responsibility to know exactly what condition the tables are in, and it's certainly not their fault if something breaks. Furthermore, it's absolutely not a waiter's fault if a random patron is having a bad day. The only person who holds any responsibility in this scenario is the manager.
You're never in the right for yelling at someone. Especially not in public, especially not at someone you don't know, and especially not at someone who has no hand in why you're upset.
You went out of your way to describe that the waiter was haggard and stressed, and yet he still did his job perfectly. He got Anon and Velvet a private booth, he took their orders without a fuss, even though Anon was trying to fuck with him, he brought them their food as soon as it was ready, and he even apologized on behalf of the restaurant when something went wrong. He did absolutely nothing wrong, and yet you're telling me that Velvet was in the right to not only yell at him in public, but threaten him as well?
No. No, she's not in the right.
As a writer, you're not connected to your characters. You're generally not advocating for them when they do something wrong. I don't get why you're so defensive of Velvet here. She mistreated an innocent person in public, possibly got them fired, and you're trying to tell me that this was a good thing for her to have done. You can just say, "Yeah, what Velvet did was really fucked up," and leave it at that, but you're dead-set on the notion that she was right.
It confuses me greatly.
The story's still fine, and I'm definitely going to keep reading. It's good to have a protagonist do something morally wrong, especially if the story makes it clear that it was a wrong thing to do. It puts some gray in the world. It means that the story is more complex than "protagonists good, antagonists evil". But the way you're defending Velvet's actions makes me concerned for the story.
i see you've added Rainbow's mom to the cover
proceed
Velvet comes across as a bitchy, used up, attitude mare with a history of making bad decisions. I'm willing to bet her marriage with Night Light wasn't all one sided in his fault. Anon seems to be an opportunistic mom white lighting faggot with a penchant for only going for mares that have had kids so their biological clock has been satisfied. I have seen no attempt made for him to date a younger, foalless mare at all.
I hope to see more soon, but as someone who has dated a single mom before, I know this shit ain't what it's cracked up to be.