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A ripe harvest

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Killerokie

Killerokie #1 · Jan 19th, 2016 · · · A bushel of apples ·

Actually not bad. Should probably fix all the capitalization errors (all the "i" and "earth").
A few spelling errors I saw (weird not wierd).
Put new speakers in conversation in a new paragraph.
All in all I've see worse effort.

darkoutlaw007

darkoutlaw007 #2 · Jan 19th, 2016 · · · A bushel of apples ·

Thanks alot, im looking for a good proofreader. I suck at grammar and the english language in general

lmao222

lmao222 #3 · Oct 14th, 2016 · · · John Carter of Equestria ·

Good story. A little slow-paced though. However i have a short attention span, so it might just be me.

Living Dimension

Living Dimension #4 · Aug 8th, 2017 · · · John Carter of Equestria ·

The speed is perfect...
I like it slow and steady...
Very nice story
I cant wait to see Pinkies reaction to someone new and male xD
Oh! And what Celestia lets Twilight study... The Portal? And had that army from a thousand years ago been compromised of humans? But which ones...

Hawkx1