Sunset returns home only to find it not as she remembers it. The ponies of the world she finds herself in are sexy futa mares and she's the only human in the world. And the mares of this world find her scent intoxicating making her very desirable.
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8176702 They are ponies
Thanks for the update! Just checking around and found that you had left us another one
Are you going to let Sunset and Twilight go to the human world?
Grammar still needs a ton of work. Sorry.
Will Celestia and Molestia ever bang Sunset?
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That would be a great idea, if the Anthro Sunset has that journal just like the Feral Sunset had then if Anthro Twilight is able to work her magic on the portal and build those attachments like her Feral version did in the second movie then they could open the portal to the Human world, thought I would love to see how the Anthro ponies would react to seeing full human males, it would be cool to see if Human Shining Armor or Human Big Mac would become Anthro Stallions or Anthro Herm-Mares if they were to come through the portal.
i suprized they haven't just numbed her nerves to the point where she feels nothing then complete the transformation spell
This would have been a great story had the writer knew how to write english properly. The number of grammar errors is just a hug turn off for me. Not to mention the constant mention of oversized boobs in chapter 2 (which us just a personal problem really, not a big fan of over exaggerated body parts). It seems to me like this was your first every fanfic so little word of advice. Get better at writing fanfics and english in general before going straight to writing clop so you don't turn off your viewers with bad grammar that break immersion. Just sayin'.
8180672 I don't have a prereader as none of the ones I tried have ever took less then a month to ever write back to me. And as for body parts they're futa sex gods just deal with it as I was just tried of trying to find someone who wrote a fic like this so I just did it myself.
8180672 and if you think it's easy to write a story yourself without anyone helping you try it yourself.
8181129 I'm sorry if i came off as extremely hostile it wasn't my intention and i apologise. I understand writing is hard but it helps to read through it a few times yourself carefully to ensure there are as little mistakes as possible. Also the comment I made about the breast size was more of a personal dislike than a judgement and im sorry if I offended you in any way just felt i'd make it known for no particular reason other than to give my thoughts on it, furthermore I suppose everyone's version of a sex goddess is different my idea is that you don't have to have oversized tits to be considered one but again my opinion yours clearly differs and thats just fine. Again I in no way meant to offend you and I'm sorry if i had its a good idea for a story i just think it needs a little work that's all.
bloated ponies become after either your moms or aunts cu in them."
you can always tell that a male was writing this fic, coz of all the "inches".
Was this updated in any way? Cus I got notified that this got updated or something?
Forgot to comment on this, so I better do it now. Anyway, I'm glad this is back! It's an interesting and perverted story. Though you probably should read over your chapter at least once after it is finished to clear out the most obvious mistakes if you don't have an Editor.
In any case, I'm thrilled for more!
One chapter in, and the grammar (or lack thereof) kills it. Sorry, dislike and no reading it from me.
8181129 Hey! Whoa! The guy was just giving some constructive criticism! Geez!
Writers man, they ALL Special Snowflakes.
Also, just thought I would mention. The pacing is completely off.
8202072 I don't like it when people think I can't speak english. I'm just writing on my free time and the reason why the mistakes. No one I tried to proof read my works are able to send it back to me under a month.
Well at least Sunset is finally able to enjoy it without any pain . This mean she will be the center of orgies in her harem . Now the true fun will begin .
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If you need a proofreader that will read the story chapter by chapter and get it to you asap I can do so. I proof and do edit as I read and make suggestions or ask for clarification. If interested pm me I'm part of the looking for editors groop here on fim.
It seem that this little transformation awoke something in Sunset . At least its not as painful as before .
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They are anthro however so they only have 2 legs.
It seems like grammar has overall improved from cave man speech. Now I don’t have a headache when reading it!