Sunset returns home only to find it not as she remembers it. The ponies of the world she finds herself in are sexy futa mares and she's the only human in the world. And the mares of this world find her scent intoxicating making her very desirable.
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another update
Okay, I really liked this chapter, but Sunset is still a b. So, how does Sunset get along with Fluttershy? Twilight is a herdmate. She doesn't seem to get along with Applejack or Rainbow. Rarity has a business relationship with Sunset. And she can't stand Pinkie Pie (I'm waiting for Sunset to push Pinkie into becoming Pinkamena).
Woohoo!
aren't snips and snails colts, not fillies?
Awesome chapter my friend and I can't wait for the next upload for this story I'll be waiting my friend and keep me posted on the story thanks
there should not be a period there and "and" is never capitalized.
Someone just needs to cast an elastic spell or elastic potion for sunset. Make her all stretchy.
That's where an in depth study of pinky pie comes in she does have a tendency to show cartoon like physics.
To madhat886.
Can you do a chapter where sunset walks through poison joke and becomes a nymphomaniac and takes her moms and aunts full size dicks. Like make the poison jokes effects turn her into a pony but leaves her able to strech beyond what she is capable of. Then cumflation shall commence.
7846953 That, and make her slightly less bitchy? Like I don't mind it too much, but tone it down a bit please
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I agree.
Im not too big on how she treats the mane6. Seriously they are heros sunset is just the adopted child of celesta.
Hope they dont turn Sunset into a pony and just give her a speel for a longer lifespan
I'm really sorry, but this chapter has left me no choice but to leave this in my Meh bookshelf.
The grammar is REALLY bad, the tense are all over the place and Sunset's shouting came the fuck out of nowhere and just felt like she was being a bitch for the sake of being a bitch. Not to mention explaining how the characters only didn't react when sunset came around is because they're scared of her. it just pissed me off so much and, to be frank, it was really hard to read through with how some sentences repeated themselves within themselves.
And, of all the things missing from this, is if anypony was going to call out trixie on her claims of defeating an ursa major and the image showing an ursa minor, it would have been sunset.
This story actually really had me hooked at first, but the way you're handling the episode chapters is really feeling forced and just throwing all the characterizations you did so well in the chapters before headign into the episode feels like it's just been shoved aside and you've decided "Screw it, i'll just have sunset be the bitch she was in the first movie to anyone aside from the characters i first introduced in the story". That's honestly what it feels like.
I'm really sorry; i will keep following this, but only as a Meh story.
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7846987 agreed. As i stated in my own comment, it feels like her characterization from the story's beginning has almost completely been shoved to the side in favor of returning her to the bitch she was in the first movie to anyone but her herd and her moms and aunts. it not so much jarring as it's painful to read.
Her shouting in this chapter comes right out of nowhere. it just really ruins it for me.
Heck, even the sex scene didn't feel all that good due to my enjoyment of the chapter being so little already that i kinda skimmed through the sex
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Honestly i wish Twilight would just back hand her. Seriously the part with trixie was a general call of her saying hay im better than you so try and prove me wrong. I dont know what Sunsets issue is at least AJ, and Dash have some talents all Sunshits good for is sex, well i wouldnt say she is good. Honestly id like if my previous comment was added to the story so ahe learns some humility.
7848686 she is still as she was before the first movie as she wasn't transformed into a demon. And she is under much more pressure then she was under in the human world. As for her dealing with the main six besides twilight, rarity and fluttershy. The others made bad impressions on her and haven't shown her their good sides yet.
Besides pinkie would get on anyone nerves as she won't take no for an answer with anything to do with fun. AJ and dash are jerks or hardheaded depending on the episode.
"I...," Applejack shuts her mouth seeing Sunset and knowing what would happen to her if she upsets her. And she's
sacredof Sunset after what she put her through. "scared"7844929 In canon yes, however this Equestria is composed entirely of herms for the pony race, with Sunset currently being the only female due to being from Canon Equestria and ending up in this one due to a magic mirror malfunction. Unknown at the moment if this extends to other equine based races like draconequuses, zebras, donkies, centaurs or changelings.
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The cows are the females of the Minotaurs in this cannon. And when I get to it there be other races who have two genders. Dragons are also one of the races that have two genders. Which is why Spike is a boy.
7890167 I see.
Trixie being part of the herd?! Oh my! Things are getting better and better!
In defence of Sunset for this chapter, Trixie is a stage preformer, meaning boasting and telling tall tales is literally her Goddesses-damned job. What Rarity, RD and AJ did was unfair to Trixie.
Though I do agree that Sunset keeps coming off as bitchier than she should be.