Sunset returns home only to find it not as she remembers it. The ponies of the world she finds herself in are sexy futa mares and she's the only human in the world. And the mares of this world find her scent intoxicating making her very desirable.
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undressed themselves once they were all
I just decided to underline everything that needed to be past tense, this is only an example because EVERY paragraph would be in this comment if I decided to point out every mistake. Please remember that as a rule everything not being said by the characters should be past tense.
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"Well she is still the smallest for a unicorn while Dinky is still a
fowlFOAL !Actually the cannon timeline is more kid focus , and thus its what you get . Besides they would have not covered every bit of their so-called daily lives, so they has to be so much more than what is revealed.
Are there any plans to continue this rousing story??
She is rather easily convinced, so it seems a bit fast-paced. Also considering it is a Hearth Warming chapter I think you could have done more with it. This chapter missed a bit meat so to speak. Some situations with Hearth's Warming like exchanging gifts, or eating together, or watching the play. Just as some advice.