Sunset returns home only to find it not as she remembers it. The ponies of the world she finds herself in are sexy futa mares and she's the only human in the world. And the mares of this world find her scent intoxicating making her very desirable.
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Kinda short for my liking, but great chapter
Technically they should've had a sign or something indicating that they're in Diamond Dog Territory so both sides are to blame.
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I agree! What if Rarity didn't know she was on their territory taking their gems. All this could of been avoided if they talk to her about it.
If The Diamond dog leader was willing to talk to Sunset, why not do the same to Rarity from the beginning?
Come on Sunset! You're suppose to be the smart one in all this. Clearly you see the obvious contradiction here.
Did Rarity know she was on The Diamond dogs land, stealing their gems?
And did they at least talk to her about it and explain things?
If she didn't know you can't fault her for making a simple mistake that could of easily been resolved without punishing her straight up. She could of apologize and returned the gems no problem, but instead (in Rarity point of view) she was kidnap and raped and Sunset didn't even bother to look deeply into the situation first to see if Rarity was purposely stealing or it was just a simple mistake on her part.
I remember when Sunset had both Applejack and Twilight punish for their own stupidity, at least then it all made sense because of what they 'purposely did' and they rightfully deserved their punishments.
Here we don't know if Rarity deserves her punishment or not and judging by her reaction at the end it makes you feel that she didn't know she was in the wrong until Sunset told her and just cruely left her to be punished without at least giving her a chance to explain.
I hope theirs a part 2 to this cause I would love to see Rarity get payback once she is given a chance to explain things and it will be Sunset along with the Diamond dogs leader who will face a just punishment
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And I know it's possible for Sunset to be punished. Just because she's a princess doesn't mean she can get away with anything. No one above the law, not even royalty.
Remember Luna was punish for her crimes by being banish to the moon for a thousand years, The Zebra queen punish her daughter for fucking Sunsets ass without consent; hurting her. By letting the two Celestias and Lunas used the zebra princess as a sex toy for the rest of the orgy, and lets not forget that evil noble mare who severily hurt another mare so bad that mare couldn't recover from the horrors that Noble did to her. So the noble was punished by being rape day and night by the castle staff and gaurds, she was also raped at high Canterlot events like the grand galloping gala, as an example to the other nobles, to show them that no matter who you are 'NO ONE' is above the law.
So what will Sunset punishment be by not giving Rarity a chance speak her side of the story at least. Remember when Spike told Sunset what happened he clearly didn't say that he and Rarity was digging on the Diamond dogs land.
So to him they were just hunting for gems when out of nowhere Diamond dogs took Rarity without reading her rights first or explaining why they took her.
The point is, Spike didn't know they were on someone else's land and its safe to assume that Rarity didn't know either but Sunset did.
And what did she do to solve the problem. Well she did talk to the leader buuuuut?
It didn't even look like anyone tried to dig deeper into the situation and Spike just a kid, so he probably believed what was talked about Rarity being a a straight up thief, but is she really? Did she know the land belong to the Diamond dogs?
I don't think so. If she was she wouldn't be taking her time collecting the gems while having a nice conversation with spike. She would of instead be in hurry to collect them or at least be more sneaky about it.
My guess is that Rarity needed to find a source of gems that were both close by and easy to get to. She did had a big order to work on after all. So by using her gem finding spell it led her to the quarry and with nothing or no one around to tell that she was on diamond dog territory. She believed the gems were free for the taking.
So when the diamond dogs took her she didn't know why, only that she was being kidnap. Sure she did whine to try and get them to let her go and yes her whining could of prevented them from explaining things, but they did stop her whining by shoving a dick in her mouth. So what was stopping them from saying anything right then and there.....NOTHING!
But it clearly seemed that the diamond dogs had no interest in to talking things out. To them Rarity was a no good thief who needed to be punish and not once through out rarity punishment until Sunset arrived did they call her a thief or call her out for her crimes.
If they did Rarity would of tried to explain things, she probably tried to after Sunset and the girls left, but was ignored because everydog wanted to fuck her.....that and she probably had a dick in her mouth most of the time.
But what happened after her punishment was over. I hoped she at least tried to talk to the leader and explain things to her and pointed out how they just punish her without even telling her why she was being punished or that she was being punished at all. Cause to Rarity she was just kidnap and rape and Sunset didn't do anything to try and understand the full situation by listening to both sides of the tale but instead listen to one and flat out ignore Rarity and not give her chance.
Sunset had shown in the past to talk to and listen to people in order to solve problems, like she did with the cows on AJ farm. So why didn't she do the same for Rarity? She only talk to the leader who just said she was punishing a theif, which Sunset already knew, but did they know Rarity was purposely stealing? Did they know that Rarity knew that this was the Diamond dogs land? No they don't and by the look of things they didn't even bother to asked.
So I hope Rarity gets justice for this. It would be best for her to go to Canterlot and tell the Celestias and Lunas about what happened and what Sunset didn't do. I know they love Sunset very much but they can't just let her get away for what she did as well as the Diamond dog leader.
They both must be punished for their stubborness to talk and explain things fully to Rarity, if they did all this would of been solved without incident.
Now it will be Rarity turn to punish them both and make sure they never make this mistake again.
Mistress Rarity
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yeah one problem though. There is a real world equivalent to this situation. Gold Mining (the surface kind which involves more searching through rivers or smaller digging operations).
Lets say you own a chunk of land in Alaska, and you have a gold claim for your land. I'm your neighbor, and have my own claim on my land next to yours. Now I unknowingly cross the boundary line, and start searching for gold on your land. This makes me a "Claim Jumper", and I can be punished several ways because of that. If I knew I was on your land or not means nothing in the eyes of the law on this topic.
Potential Punishments
1) As the land/Claim owner it is well within your rights to shoot/kill me under the defense of "Protecting your claim". I was trespassing and stealing from your claim. And in such remote areas like Alaska there is an expectation for people to shoot first an ask questions later.
2) You can detain me and wait for the police to arrive. Now remember due to the size of the areas we own there is a good chance that we have never met. To you I'm just a stranger that was trying to steal your claim. Are you legit going to believe me if I say that I didn't realize I was trespassing? No you are just going to think I'm lying so I can come back later to steal gold again.
3) Once the police are involved I'll be forced to pay a large fine, hand over any gold I found over to you, and probably be facing some jail time.
No matter the reasoning I broke the law and thus must take the punishment. I would also be at fault for not checking the boundary lines to make sure I was still on my property.
This is basically the situation Rarity has found herself in. She found an area full of gems that nobody was digging up, and didn't question it. It was her responsibility to check if she was allowed to take gems from that area. For all she knew the land could have belonged to someone else, and her taking the gems would damage their livelihood, but that thought never crossed her mind. Now as for what Sunset did. Do we know if the Underground Diamond Dog territories count as part of the Equestrian Kingdom? Do they even count as an area under Sunset's rule? For the fact that the Dogs have their own separate leader, it seems like they ARE NOT part of the Equestrian Government. This means Rarity was basically trespassing on the lands of another nation or at the very least some kind of reserve for the Diamond Dogs. This means that Sunset would have very little political power there, and this was likely the best she could do for Rarity. Giving the Dogs a limited amount of time to hold Rarity, instead of them holding her indefinitely.
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I still believe that their should of been some short of indication that Rarity could see to let her know she was on their turf. Despite all the rules you mentioned, isn't the land owner responsibility to make sure that their land is fence off in someway and have signs to let others know that this is their land.
If Rarity chose to hop that fence in order to get the gems on the other side and she didn't question the fence or see/ignore the signs then fine see's a thief.
But clearly thier weren't anything besides the map that Sunset read that told her Rarity was digging on their land. You can't just expect people to just know these things right off the bat without some indication first or being let know.
Sunset knows because she's a princess and studied the other cultures laws, and territory, but not everyone going to know that which means this mistake can be made multiple times by many different ponies who don't know about the border line.
Their need to be something physical on the land itself to let others know that this land is yours. It maybe your land and you do have the right to defend whats yours but you also have an obligation and responsibility to make sure you set up something around your land so others can know before they tresspass or else its just comes out at looking like a trap of some sort.
The dogs should of told Rarity what she did but instead
They clearly didn't, hell I bet the leader didn't know until Sunset told her about Rarity stealing her gems and just agreed to have her punish, but the dogs were already fucking her before that announcement, which means they weren't punishing her for stealing the gems, they saw how she can find gems easily and originally were going use her to find more for them but decided to just fuck her instead.
In conclusion everyone is in the wrong here. The Diamond dogs should of fence off their land and left signs around to alert people. Sunset should of known this obvious fact and understood that Rarity not knowing she was on DD territory and should of resolved the issue like she did with the fire hazard of the barn where the cows work by having the apple family build emergency exits.
But instead they just took advantage of clearly unfair situation and left Rarity to be punished unjustly. Its not her fault their was nothing telling her that she was on their land. So how can you possibly fault her for that, you might as well fault the cows for their being no other exits out of that barn (Which was an extreme fire hazard) and not the owners/employers who runs the farm.
Rarity you do deserve justice and Sunset and the DD leader needs to answer to these claims. I'm not given up on you yet.
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Applejack was gang rape by the whole town so rarity being gang rape by Diamond dogs for trying to steal their gems fits the setting
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again one issue in the real world you need permits to search for materials like gems or gold (At least in large quantities, and to show you have done the proper paperwork and know what you are doing). Should the DD territory have been better marked as such? Yes I will agree with that, but again Rarity should have made sure she was legally allowed to dig those gems up before hand.
Imagine if those gems were being grown in that area by the Royal Family for any visiting Dragon dignitaries instead of DD territory. By not taking to time to make sure she was allowed to be there she would have been guilty of stealing from the crown, which could be seen as a traitorous act against Equestria.
Now as for leaving Rarity to the dogs. They were in the territories of another nation/culture, separate from Equestria. Sunset would at best be a visiting dignitary. She really has no control over what the dogs do, and thus can't be held responsible for their actions. Remember Sunset isn't Celestia or Luna, she doesn't have the same political weight to throw around as them, nor does she have the magical weight to leverage over the dogs either. What happened to Rarity is literally Sunset's best option to avoid an international or Political incident.
But if you don't agree with that then give me 10 alternate solutions for Sunset that would also avoid any of these problems;
1) Insulting the Diamond Dogs by basically saying "Your laws don't matter, I'm taking this criminal and leaving".
2) Pissing the Diamond Dogs off because of a lack of Justice in their eyes.
3) Potentially causing a neighboring nation and potential trade partner to sever all ties with Equestria.
4) Giving off the impression that it is the Pony way or justice isn't served.
There are more, but what I'm trying to do is point out that Rarity put herself in a position where Sunset had very little to do anything. Could Sunset have busted in an saved Rarity through force? Yes but that would likely be taken as an act of War by the Diamond Dogs. The best Sunset could do is set up a trading system so this doesn't happen again, and have Rarity pay for the Gems she took with her body.
Also if Sunset could easily tell the territory belonged to the Diamond Dogs on a map, the map probably had it marked down as such. Meaning Rarity should have at least checked a map to make sure it was Equestrian territory before she started digging away.
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Also it is a grey area when it comes to clearly marking one's land. What one person might think is clearly marked, another person could say wasn't marked clear enough. For all we know the Dogs could mark their territory by peeing along their borders and that is enough to tell other creatures with sharper noses that it is Diamond Dog country, but to a pony they might not be able to smell it that well or may not understand the meaning behind the smell.
And even if the land isn't clearly marked it falls onto both parties involved to know where the border lines are. I know this as I own a good chunk and land accidentally wound up on one of my neighbor's trails when I was cutting trails through the forest on my property. Granted all that happened was she saw me on a trail cam and called me up asking what I was going and I just apologized and told her I got turned around while cutting trails on my side of the property. That being said unlike what Rarity did I didn't take anything from my neighbor or damage her land in any way.
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But AJ punishment was just, theirs no argument for what her stubborness did to the town.
Rarity is a different case, if she's gonna be gangrape by a bunch of DD's then their need to be a fair and logical explanation as to why, other then just saying she dug on their land. Theirs too many contradictions and nothing was properly explain.
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What do you really expect from a fic that is only written to be a hentai
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Too much I guess
I'm sorry I know this is just a fun porn story but the way you written it haves so much depth and world building and I love it I just wanted the same for this chapter as well.
Don't get me wrong, I still love this chapter and what happened to Rarity. I just get carried away with not getting all the details, and I have fun making my own theories.
This chapter alone could make one heck of larger story based on the arguments both me and MegaMasterKing been having. Eehh
Once again I'm sorry if I caused you any problems and sorry for causing such a big ruckus about all this....but I still need something to say to MegaMasterKing, our war ain't over yet
nice work
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Even so why would see think to do that. I rewatch a clip of the beginning of the episode and at the very start you can clearly see Ponyville in the background.
Which means the town and the DD are literally neighbors to each other. Now I know what your gonna say. If they live so close to each other then clearly the citizens should know of the DD's right. I won't argue that they should but this story made it quite clear that the citizens of ponyville are ignorant when it comes to other races outside their own, Sunset even calls them out on it. Heck just asked Zecora.
For all we know the ponies of Ponyville and DD'S never came into contact with one another. If they did their would be no reason for Rarity to not know about their territory and theirs one more thing about the DD's we forgot to mention.
They live underground. Their are no houses or buildings, or anything to indicate that anyone even lives in that quarry. Its just a barren land not that far from ponyville that Rarity could easily mistake it for being apart of Equestrian soil. After all, how the heck is she supposed to know that she live so close to the border of a species she probably never met before let alone knew just how close they were.
But who else in Equestria even need gems besides jewelry makers and such.
As for Rarity needing legal means. I doubt that's the case in this scenario. Rarity have been using gems for some of her dresses for years, Sapphire Shores even personally asked her to make a dress with gems for her. So its clearly no big secret and if she is digging gems illegally (excluding the DD's) then wouldn't she be confronted by the authorities long ago.
My point is, Rarity has been mining gems freely without consequence ever since she was a filly, when her magic literally drag her miles away to a huge rock with gems inside. Even after this crazy event, we know she's gonna continue mining for more in the gem cave.
So if we say that not only Rarity but everypony in ponyville never knew that their town was that close to the DD's land and were never told about it at all, then Rarity was a poor victim of miscommunication.
So here's a new question, why wasn't ponyville told about the DD's living so close to them? That's pretty important news that everyone in town should know. Yet its clear on Rarity face that she didn't know, which is why she was digging on their land because she didn't know it was their territory. Their was nothing on the land to indicate that it is, and the DD's live underground, which doesn't help Rarity situation at all.
Now I 100% agree with you on this one. So far we don't know much about the DD's laws and how they do things, but Sunset does. Judging on how she is in the story, when it comes to these kind of situations. Yeah I can see her doing what she did for this exact reason.
I can also she her waiting at Rarity house as the DD's brought her home along with the gems they promised she could keep. When Rarity notice Sunset its understandable that she would be angry and asked why Sunset abandon her like that.
Sunset would explain everything to her, exactly the same way you explain in your theory. Thus getting Rarity to understand. Sunset would also tell her that as soon as she got back to ponyville, she'd learned that the citizens truly didn't know about the DD's living so close to them let alone living on the border of their land. So Sunset calls a town meeting to spread the word and those rocks that form a natural wall could be the divder between the borders.
After which Sunset apologizes to Rarity for abandoning her like she did, but Rarity forgives her, fully understanding the situation and will dedicate herself into learning about territories so she wouldn't make this mistake again.
Still feeling bad Sunset wants to make make it up to Rarity. So she offer her own body to her, which Rarity happily accepts and they fuck through out the night.
Later when Rarity was in need of more gems, she made her own little trade with the DD's. Letting them fuck her and in exchange she is free to dig for gems on their land, no problem.
And that it for me I had bumping minds with you but now I'm done I got nothing left to say unless you encourage me. Ah well Its been fun.
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VERY Good Points right their! I'm surprised that the Author didn't respond back to you yet?
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I would love to write a story base off this chapter while using the theories between both me and Mega.
If I didn't have so many stories I still need to work on.
This chapter deserves more love in my opinion. A little more TLC. I know its just a quick fun sex story but I wish it got the same amount of depth as the earlier chapters.
Oh man rarity dun fudge up
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nice picture bro
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Thanks
The description is working because it sounds like “cave man speak” and I really hope it does not reflect all the writing.
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I remember that story, by any chance, do you still have it? since I think it was deleted, I liked it a lot.
I always wondered if territory that rarity dug up gems were part of diamond dog territory or not. Also wondered if diamond dogs kidnaps ponies and other species to forced others to work in their mines and extra r gems and precious mineral for the,. Amongst other things as your fic points out.