You Did Something to Make Her Love You
Chapter Six
By MixA4
Saturday evening, 5:36 p.m.. Your mind is a blur of different thoughts and feelings, ranging from anxiety to pure ecstasy. You bolt around the house, trying to quell your festering mind as you try to find everything you're going to need for the dance.
"House keys, check. Do I have my wallet?" You mutter. A brief search of your coat reveals a black leather bifold wallet. "Check, do I look like I should be at a dance?"
You run to the bathroom and inspect yourself in the mirror. A skinny, decently dressed teenage boy with combed blue hair stares back at you.
"I think it'll pass for a dance." You turn your head to get a better look at yourself. A mental image of Rainbow Dash makes you rethink your hairstyle. "It could be better for Dash's sake." Just as you dip your head into the sink, the booming sound of your doorbell makes you jerk upright, smacking your head on the faucet. Pain seems unnoticeable, however, as a mix of excitement and adrenaline dull your senses. You waste no time in sprinting down the stairs to the front door. You pause, taking a breath to regain your nerve, and open the door. Rainbow Dash stands before you, dressed in a beautiful rainbow colored dress, with matching gloves, and a set of pink boots. Her big dorky smile makes you almost lose your nerve once more.
"Hey Blu!" She says sweetly. If voices had flavor, you could swear hers would be the flavor of Skittles. "You look really nice!"
Your brain is in near-total anarchy, her compliment almost flies clean over your head.
"Oh, erb, thank you, Dash!" You sputter, trying to throw together a return compliment. "Wow, if you made my heart run any faster, I'd need triple dose of Lidocaine to keep my heart from failing!"
Fucking smooth, Blu. About as smooth as a fucking sandpaper margarita. You feel heat surge to your cheeks as you process what you just said. To your surprise, Rainbow Dash grins and begins laughing.
"Oh, Blu." She throws her arms around your neck and pulls you into a hug. "You're so cute when you're nervous."
Despite a rocky start, the night proceeds without a hitch. Dash drives the two of you to the dance, never once losing the excited smile she's got spread across her face. The dance itself is spectacular. You knew Pinkie Pie had a reputation for extreme parties, but this is something that could rival a Hollywood party! Balloons completely cover the ceiling, music blasts from speakers all over the gymnasium, a line of party food and refreshments spans the length of six party tables, and multi-colored lights and lasers shine new life into a crowd of eager party-goers. It's truly something to behold.
"Huh, I'd guess Pinkie Pie didn't have as big of a budget this year." Dash comments, seemingly underwhelmed by the near-insanity laying before her.
You are unable to fathom a party any bigger than the one before you. Before you can think too hard, however, Rainbow Dash grabs your hand, interlocking her fingers into yours, and drags you to the dance floor, flailing her arms around with yours in tow. It suddenly hits you: You cannot dance. You have never once been to a dance that you weren't forced to go to. You're the only one standing still in a sea of writhing bodies.
God. Damn. It.
"Come on, Blu! Show me your moves!" Dash yells over the obnoxious music. She continues to push and pull on your arms, her smile unfading.
"Uh, Dash? I don't know how to dance!" You reply, feeling nervousness take hold of you. Dash giggles.
"Blu, I am a sports legend! I spend more time out on the field than I do in my home! Do you think I know how to dance? Do you think anyone here can dance?" She asks. It quickly becomes apparent that no one in this mass of students is actually dancing in any real shape or form. They're all just moving, having fun, going along in organized chaos. You become more relaxed as you realize how right Rainbow Dash is. You start moving your legs, trying to mirror Dash's own movements.
"There you go, you're getting it! See? Nothing to it!" She says. Her reassurance makes you totally relax, and before you know it, you're laughing and dancing to the beat like a fool. This process carries on for ten thrill-loaded minutes before the song suddenly changes.
"Ohh! I love this one!" Dash squeals.
"This one?" You echo.
"Yeah, it's called the Cha-Cha Slide!"
The Cha-Cha Slide? Oh,this is good. A new opportunity to show how out of touch you are.
"W-what's the Cha-Cha Slide?" You ask.
"It's a really fun party song, just listen to the lyrics!"
"Uh, huh.."
"It's time to get FUNKY!"
Funky? Who uses that in a song anymore? You're starting to have second thoughts about this. Dash senses your hesitation.
"Here, hold my hand, I'll show you how it's done." She says, holding out her hand to you. You take her hand, and she grips it tight.
"To the left!" Dash struts to the left, prompting you to follow suit. "Take it back now, y'all!" Rainbow Dash struts to the right, almost bumps back into you. She flashes you an amused grin. "One hop this time!" The entire gymnasium erupts with the sound of shoes against hardwood. "Right foot let's stomp!" Clomp! You're slowly getting into the swing of the music. "Left foot let's stomp!" You time this one in unison with the rest of the students. "Cha-cha, real smooth! Dash faces you with a smile and begins waving her arms around with yours.
"Having fun?" She asks.
"I'm totally out of sync, but hell yeah!" You reply, trying to slip back into the song. The song continues playing, and before long, you're moving perfectly in tune with the song. The song ends, and the dance floor erupts back into synchronized anarchy as more music fills the gym. After nearly an hour of absurd dancing on your part, you excuse yourself from the floor to get some refreshments. Dash follows close behind, not letting go of your hand.
"Jesus, it's like how schizophrenia would look if it were a pastime." You say, helping yourself to some fruit punch. Dash stands adjacent from you, surveying the crowd.
"Yeah, Pinkie's parties can get a little off the hook sometimes." She giggles. "I hope it's not too crazy for you."
"Are you kidding? It's nice to be able to cut loose like this!"
"Yeah, 'cut loose' is definitely how I'd describe that!" Rainbow Dash points to a circle of people, all gathered around a short girl with burgundy hair doing literal backflips on the gym floor.
"Heh, you go, squirt." Dash mutters, a simple grin is spread across her face.
A feeling of euphoria begins to register in your mind as you feel entirely satisfied with how the night is going. You get to go to a stupidly fun dance with a beautiful girl who likes you for your stupid quirks. This is one hell of a night.
The light-hearted feeling begins to vanish, however as a hulking student approaches Rainbow Dash. This kid, if he can even be called that, is humongous. The sheer height alone makes you question how you missed him on the way in, and the size of his arms make you think he bends barbells for a workout. His size makes you wonder if he has had Pituitary gland suppression growing up, and you're pretty sure two clones of you wouldn't outweigh one of him. Even worse, he's now talking to Rainbow Dash.
"Dash, I need someone to dance with. Come with me."
He even sounds like a giant, Christ.
"Brute, I'm here with someone else," She points to you. She does not look pleased. "Could you leave us alone?"
"You're going with this small fry?" Part of you feels as though you should do something to intervene. The other part of you is too scared to do anything. "Come on, Dash. I'll give you a real date."
"Brute, I'm not going with you." Dash says sternly. The student looks annoyed. He grabs her wrist.
Okay, time to intervene!
You jump between Rainbow Dash and the student. Your heart picks up pace as the student's angry stare locks onto you, silently processing the defiance.
"Excuse me," You say nonchalantly. "Is there a problem here?" Adrenaline courses through your veins, you can feel your hands begin to twitch as your heart slams against your rib cage.
"Move it, tiny, this doesn't have anything to do with you." He says.
"Oh, it's going to involve me very soon if you don't leave Rainbow Dash alone." You cannot believe what you are saying. Even Rainbow Dash seems shocked.
"Blu, you don't have to do this." She whispers, her wrist is still locked in the student's grasp.
The behemoth straightens his back, towering over you by at least six inches! His eyes alone look like they're forged from fucking iron!
"You wanna say that again?" He says, trying to intimidate you. The gym becomes much quieter as students start taking note of the scene before them.
"I said," Your lips are running, and you can't stop them. "It's going to involve me very soon if you don't leave her alone. Now."
The giant brings himself down to your level, he's eye-to-eye with you right now. His black eyes stare right into you, can you can make out various scars across his face. With the exception of the music from the speakers, the gym has fallen totally silent, or at least, you feel like it has.
"And what are you going to do if I don't, doctor?" He asks in a grizzly whisper.
That insult hits deep. Your heart is racing, your breathing has become shallow and erratic, you can feel almost nothing but epinephrine at this point.
"I swear to God," You say, gritting your teeth. These words are not your words. You've lost all control over what you're saying. "If you do not turn and leave right this fucking instant, I can, and I will, teach you the actual definition of 'Medical Malpractice'. Leave." You say in a low tone.
You're going to die. You are going to fucking die here. This is the end of you. The monster continues to stare right at you, unmoving, processing your hollow threat. You do not break eye contact, as if you were trying to kill him with your eyesight. Time itself seems to have frozen as you face off with Goliath reincarnate.
Suddenly, his left eye flickers. He glances around, seeing the hundreds of students around him, seemingly frozen in place. You continue to stare, unmoving, as if even blinking could shatter the fabric of time. The only movement you can sense is your heartbeat, slamming around violently in your chest. He turns his gaze back to you.
"You're a fucking loser." The barbarian finally says. He releases Rainbow Dash's wrist and staggers off, leaving you and Rainbow Dash in total shock and awe. He stumbles to the exit, and flashes one last menacing look your way before leaving into the night. Once the door closes, you collapse into a chair, your mind is reeling in an overload of chemicals. Words attempt to escape your lips, but they all become just illegitimate babble. Rainbow Dash seems just as shocked. She glances wide-eyed at you, before staring straight off into space.
"I need- I'll be right back." Rainbow Dash bolts off suddenly. You're too loaded up on epinephrine to notice. Slowly, piece-by-piece, you come down from the massive high you're on. You mentally start piecing together what just happened. You almost fought someone. You made Rainbow Dash look like a fool. You threatened someone with physical harm. Dash ran off somewhere, probably to get away from your psychotic nature. Students have probably taken note. This does not look good.
As you're still mentally rebooting, a teacher walks over to you out of concern.
"Blu? I saw you over here talking with Brute Force, it didn't look too good." Miss Cheerilee says. "Nothing... happened, did it?"
"N-no, nothing happened. We just... spoke. That's all." You reply.
"You're okay, right?" She asks, eyeing you up and down for injury.
"I'm fine, just a little tired out." You say. Miss Cheerilee cautiously walks off, flashing you one last worried look before disappearing. Out of the corner of the gym, you spot Rainbow Dash over by the Dj's table, pointing at you and talking to Vinyl Scratch.
Great. Now she's warning other people that you're a psychopath. Way to handle the situation, Blu.
Vinyl appears to smile and nod at Dash, and Dash starts briskly walking in your direction.
"Rainbow, I'm really so-" You're cut off as she forcefully grabs your hand and drags you out of your chair, presumably to take your sociopathic ass home.
Nice. First date, and you've completely blown it. Top-tier work there, Blu. However, to your surprise, she stops in the middle of the dance floor, she pulls herself close to you and hugs you close. You're caught off guard as a slow song begins to play through the speakers.
"Blu, why did you do that?" Rainbow Dash asks.
Guilt begins to wash over you, making you regret everything that happened in the last five minutes.
"Ugh, Dash I'm sorry, he just-"
"Why are you apologizing? I'm not mad! You did nothing wrong!"
"Wait, what?"
"I've never had someone stick up for me like that, especially not to Brute Force!" She says, hugging you closer. "I'm just wondering why you'd do something like that for me? That guy is a monster, and yet you stood up to him!"
You're unsure of how to respond.
"Dash, I had to do something. I couldn't just stand by and watch." You say. Rainbow Dash rolls her eyes and smiles sweetly at you.
"So instead of running off like anyone else would do, you tell him off so bad, he leaves the dance?" Dash giggles. "First you carry me home when I couldn't walk, then you give me a great week, next you take me to a dance." She says, drawing closer to you.
"Hey, you paid for the dance, I just went along!" You say.
"And then you stand up to the biggest, meanest kid in the school, all for my sake. Where have you been all my life?" Before you can reply, Dash closes the distance between the two of you and presses her lips to yours. You're initially caught completely off guard, but you let yourself be taken away.
This really was a great night.
Nice going Blu! Way to stand up to Brute there.
short girl with burgundy hair doing literal backflips on the gym floor."
Dont need the extra quotation marks
Also, it lives!
11/10 Manly for you Blu you have earned it.
Glad to see this back up and running again, but it was definitely worth the wait .
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Seriously fun chapter. So glad to see this update.
Aaand now "Careless whisper" is stuck in my head. God love ya.
Yaaaaay, a new update. Finally
Huh, you know with all the crazy adventure, apocalyptic or quest heavy stories you see on this or any fanfiction site, simple romance stories like this are a welcomed change of pace.
I think what I like about this story is that the relationship between Rainbow and Blu seems fairly realistic and is well handled. They start out as acquaintances, but because Blu leaves a pretty big impression on Rainbow with his selfless attitude, she becomes interested enough to get to know him better. Thus their relationship can build into friendship,which again is pretty realistic as Rainbow despite being arrogant is a nice individual overall and given how she is so heavily connected to loyalty, would click well with a person so willing to put others needs ahead of his own.
Blu also isn't a bad character either, he's interesting in that he has something of a personality, being interested in being a Paramedic, while also not being a Gary Stu, in that he's a bit of a whimp, he's shy and a bit awkward. So I can definitely feel this relationship works and I'm happy to be reading it.
Granted I'm fairly curious to see how this story ends, which I imagine will be in the Sunday chapter. It'll probably end with the pair officially becoming a couple after the dance, though I'm sort of hoping it doesn't go into M rated territory, mostly because I don't think it's needed. However, given how this story has been going so far I think you'd probbly handle it well.
So overall solid entry so far and I look forward to the ending.
Good job blu, don't back down, and don't show fear. Though you failed the third step, always have a backup plan.
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I sincerely appreciate the feedback, it really helps me keep up with updates.
As it stands, I'm barely 40% of the way done with this, I keep coming up with new things to throw in, and some of it writes itself.
And to answer your question, I will not be going into 'M' territory at any point in this story.
I only have to say this.
Brilliant!
Reads rest of chapter
F*****G FINALLY!
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No problem, feel free to check my stories out if you get the chance and leave a little feedback as well. Any comments are appreciated.
Nice very realistic scene with Blu and Dash and Blu and Brute Force. Nicely done.
IT LIVES!!!
Hey, I'm a paranoid schizophrenic and I... Actually am not offended by that in the slightest.
All I can say is... This thing is fucking awesome!
Holy fuing tshit in a biscut! It's finally been updated!
Definitely worth the wait.
Everything I wish to say has been said already.
The most intriguing part for me was during the cha-cha slide. On "Take it back now Y'all." I know you're supposed to just go back to neutral position, but usually everybody just takes a step backwards.
So this fanfiction's heart didn't completely stop, it just needed a defibrillator.
I don't want to complain to you, but it seems to be one of those moments, where a chapter/story isn't that good anymore, as it would have been if the chapter would have appeared a bit sooner.
It is still good, but it wasn't that fresh in my mind anymore and everything.
While I remember that I probably had something against his reactions in a few chapters, this is still a nice story.
I just had a talk with another one where we thought it is mostly the guy that has to be the one that always get's manipulated by girls like Rarity, or that the guys are aways reacting a bit to shy and everything.
I just feel like it could be more in balance, that was why I didn't exactly liked it when he was letting himself talk into the relationship by Applejack, or that it is him that looks a little bit unsure about everything and ......that's everything I think I remember for now in detail.
I know sometimes it looks like I'm overreacting, but I like to think it is because I really like a story, and because I already have seen it working better in a different way and actually looking better like it too.
If I take this chapter alone I can't really complain
The last thing i want to do is dye my hair blue, change my name to Blu, and confront a reincarnate of Goliath.
Great story however.
7210605 A bum knee is another way of saying bad knee
Well this was a pleasant surprise
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Well then, if the story ended here, I'd be OK with it.
A great night, followed by an undoubtably shit sunday as Brute tracks him down and beats the crap out of him away from school.
7211330 And now its beating strong.
You don't fuck with a medical student!
Cha-Cha Slide
I hate this song so much.
I love this fic! Just re-read it, and it's still awesome. Also, all the people talking about what Sunday's gonna be like, it says 'Saturday Part 1'
7296733 well not my grade we are going to be seniors and i bet you if that song plays at our prom then everyone in my grade will stop and literally dance to that song
7401260 they did that at my prom. I was the only one that didn't do it.
7401443 well that is very funny actually gonna be honest here i'm know as the hateful one in my grade since every one thinks i haate just about every thing so it would be surprising if i do that dance at prom
7401749 No kidding?! I was known as the Devil's Advocate in highschool because everyone thought I hated everything.
7402058 funny thing is everyone in grade more or less just leaves me alone i don't talk to anyone besides my friends obviously and when i need to talk to others for a group which i hate group things i always feel i can get things done better by myself
7402705 same here
7403302 well if you can understand what my profile my picture you'll probably guess i'm can also get violent. and oh my gosh someone who also shares some of my same ideas
I get violent when I need to.
When are you going to make the next chapter?
when is saturday part 2 gonna come out
I need Saturday pt 2, please
When is the next chapter coming out! *whines on the floor*
I would like to have a new chapter please.
Please don't let this story die!!!
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'offline for 18w, 5d'
Wew, that doesn't look good to me.
Pity this wasn't finished. Actually really dug the story.
So uh........ More?
Is it safe to say this story's dead?