Once again I bring a new chapter! This one is half the size as it normally would be, but this chapter was mostly just about him standing up to an abuser.

I apologize that there is no new chapter this week, I'm working on the big finale. It will take a few weeks.

You should probably mention the M/M content somewhere in the story description. Surprises are not appreciated when it comes to pornography.

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this is n interesting story so far, I hope to see more of this soon

Right, I've been watching this fic for a while and am kind of sad there hasn't been an update lately. Now, I know what it's like to be a procrastinating author (I've been there more than once!), but I really do like the plot of this story.

My only problem with this story is that while the core idea is a solid, the descriptions of their acts are...lacking. This story really needs more detail instead of basically '...and then they had sex and she got preggers.' How does it feel for both, in detail? What are the mare's thought of being bred by a random stallion being basically forced to do it? What are the stallion's thoughts? How, in detail, does the sex feel for the mare, being pumped full? How does being squeezed inside while a mare orgasms feel? DETAILS!

Also, some of the wording is kind of awkward. example:

"Greetings ma'am, come to receive the seed for the plant that is the foal to nurture and grow correct?" Comforting smile, well as comforting as a bound and blinded stallion can be.

What he said is really, REALLY wordy, and could be put another way, or perhaps be divided into two separate sentences. Also, 'comforting smile', should possibly be 'he gave her a comforting smile', or 'I gave her a comforting smile.'

Overall though, I love the core concept, as said earlier. With some work, this could be even better.

Um hi I see this story has potential... is it to late to ask has it died?

This thing is dead, I don’t have any intentions on continuing it, I was going to just push out the final chapter with just the escape, but I don’t feel like I can drag myself through this half baked piece of crap I came up with, it was a fit of inspiration I didn’t really care about making it good or anything, I’m happy you all enjoyed the concept for what it is, and if you’d like to pick the story up for your own you can, but I personally won’t be making any more chapters for this, I’ve gotten better at writing over the years and am slowly preparing myself for my magnum opus of a story, stay tuned for when and if I do that though.