A dangerous bet?

Because of a debt, Scootaloo and her friends has arranged a bet with a strange guy. What exactly does he want from them and is it worth it?
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TheDanishGuy

TheDanishGuy #1 · Sep 20th, 2015 · · ·

A couple of minor spelling mistakes, (happens to the best of us) so I suggest re-reading stuff like a gajillion times before sending it out if you keep this up.

On that note, please keep it up. It was enjoyably twisted, and I see great potential here.

¨~ TDG

P. S. : Well, crap, I better dust off my Supernatural DVDs now.

Captain Whatever

Captain Whatever #2 · Sep 20th, 2015 · · ·

I'm with TheDanishGuy on the spelling and grammar errors, but overall it is one of the best stories I've ever read.

Gadgetphile

Gadgetphile #3 · Sep 21st, 2015 · · ·

6443425 I never stated I was perfect. On the contrary.

Gadgetphile

Gadgetphile #4 · Sep 21st, 2015 · · ·

6443951 Then you really need to read more stories. This is garbage.

TheDanishGuy

TheDanishGuy #5 · Sep 21st, 2015 · · ·

6446182 I don't think I said that, did I? (On another note, yeah, it's not a heavy hitter, but I'd accept the praise. It's good fun, and a lot of us don't give praise without reason.)

~ TDG

PirateCattheShipper

PirateCattheShipper #6 · Jan 20th, 2017 · · ·

So,

This is a good story, it really is

but I just wanna give out some advice, that I was a little confused on the whole "i want you naked" thing. . .because ponies don't really have clothes. . .?

And it was a bit confusing who was talking! I think all you need to add is just "sweetie Belle said" or something like that! Overall I loved it, though! Keep up the great work!