The life of a test pilot can become boring after a while, so for a person like Mike the chance to test a hydrogen powered F-35 seems like a godsend. A chance to get away from it all if you know what I mean. When he discovers a strange phenomenon, can he really say he will be the same after one week?
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Might read this when I get more time to do so. Looks pretty interesting.
6219402 Thanks!
Well to put it shortly and in the nicest way I can. The story is pretty good so far. But plenty of grammatical errors here and there. The story itself is pretty good but I would elaborate on some parts a bit more add some more information, ect, ect. Like for example the f35h series doesn't use a throttle in Vtol mode, it also has a lot more switches and proceedures before take off, such as requesting clearance from tower and so on, it also uses the joystick for precision hover instead of a throttle; unlike the AV8B Harriers that had the uncanny knack of accidentally throwing the nozzles while hovering. But anyways, this is only an example. If you do elaborate on things you sir got a story I all around love. :p
Good job, and keep going!
6233419 Thanks a lot! I've been keeping your review in mind as I write the next chapter. Looking at a proofreader, I think that will help. Thanks for being specific on the criticism as well, I really appreciate it! Have a good one.