Well shit! This is a first of reading filly Rainbow and Fluttershy having sex. Well done of coming something original for the FlutterDash universe.

However, there were slight problems. But I'm not going to type a whole fucking paragraph about those problems, so I'll just write them down. One, some grammar mistake, not a lot just noticeable. Two, you could have added more to this story. It felt like you were rushing it a little bit for you could begin your next fic. But hey, maybe I'm wrong and this is exactly how you wanted this fic to go down so congratulation.

6507008 To be quite honest, I tried not to rush it, though on some parts I defiantly did, but most of it I tried to spend substantial time on. Trying to work on slowing down my story writing xD

And yes, I never checked back for grammar mistakes. I try to edit on the spot, but I do miss things sometimes, which I also will work on.

Thank you for your criticism. I always enjoy getting tips on how to be a better writer :)

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Interesting. I don't think I've read that story, but it's cool that they're similar.