I love My Little Pony and Littlest Pet Shop. My favorite ponies are Rarity and Rainbow Dash. I love to write fanfiction, but I need to learn to pace better.
When Krystal Vaportrail misses the train back to Ponyville, Octavia invites her to stay in a hotel. Krystal falls in love with Octavia and wants to tell her, but she can't bring herself to confess her feelings.
Written for Krystal Williams.
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You fleshed out Krystal well but Octavia comes off a little flat. I'm not sure if its the words she speaks or the lack of descriptions as to her tone.