It continues, and at an impressive pace, no less! I loved this from the start when it looked to just be a one-night stand between these two...and though it seems silly to say, these updates have vindicated (at least in my mind!) my tendency to click both favorite AND follow on any fics that catch my eye, whether marked complete or not. (Was this one marked complete? I cannot remember. )
Because one never knows when a story will continue, and when it's such an inspired train wreck as we're seeing here in great and terrible slow motion?
ing. Yeeeeesss.
My attention was grabbed ages ago with the first chapter. None whatsoever has been lost.
Reaction time! Chapter 1 was amazingly clever and subtle so that the twist at the end would roundhouse kick you even though you were expecting a kick of some type. Nice touch leaving the Flim & Flam icons out of the description. It helped keep the mystery. My general reaction: Holy crapincrud!
1.5 was also good for comedy, but I feel it could have been merged with chapter 2. General thought: well this just got interesting. Chapter 2 really helped set up the core problem that Applejack is still stubborn with pride, even pushing back her own brother. It makes me wonder if Flam is having any similar conflicts with himself. (I believe the brothers are actually decent fellows.) I also found the questions extremely amusing. General thought: I want to say 'oh sh**' but I'm too busy laughing. Chapter 3 is a bit confusing too me. Flim acts a bit jerkish and goes into borderline RAPE with Applejack. However, he also seems like he's trying to tease her, maybe in a similar maner as he did the night before. Also, when Applejack was in the shower, it came across to me that he was trying to apologize, only getting angry when he gets a bloody nose. His question about AJ being in season can help explain his 'eagerness,' but this chapter is really confusing on where Flim's standing on the incident is. (I'm hoping he's feeling some conflict) The cliffhanger, however, was golden. General thought: how is HE feeling about this? Cliffhanger: oooooooh dear.
EDIT: check that for chapter 3. I didnt realize there was a Flashback in the flashback. This makes Flim's standing much less confusing.
Wow, thanks! You're right that 1.5 should have been merged, but I posted it earlier than chapter two 'cause I felt bad about how long I had taken! This was originally going to be entirely from AJ's perspective, so during 95% of the writing I was only thinking of her side; I've been mulling over how both Flim and Flam would react. I'd like to think Flim's not entirely a jerk, and he's teasing AJ because he's smart enough to pick up on the fact that it riles her up... in more ways than one. You've given me some food for thought, so thanks again. :)
3325333 Thank you. I really hope you portray the brothers as you see fit. I have a personal head canon that they are NOT con men, like many people think, and have struggled to make a good name for themselves in business because everyone expects them to be con men BECAUSE of their names.
"I'b a hemophiliac!" "A what?" "A hemophiliac!" A shudder of disgust went up her spine. "You... you mean... yer into little fillies?!"
So funny, yet so dark at that same time. I bet AJ was wondering if that little peck on the forehead he gave Applebloom meant more than met the eye. My friend has a similar condition, except his begins with a W, if he gets hurt his cuts don't clot because his blood doesn't have enough platelets (I sure hope I spelt that right). What made that scene twice as amusing for me is that my friend is probably just as smug as Flim is and I found out about his condition in a similar fashion. Never play water polo with no set rules; if you have the ball people will bite and scratch, hard, to get to it. and never underestimate the power behind little kids biting power. yeah... it took awhile for the bleeding to stop I really can't figure out why I liked that you made Flim a hemophiliac. Is it that he now has a dash of vulnerability and it makes him more likable, is it because I'm a sadistic fuck who found it funny in context, was it the way I imagined how his voice would sound while having a bloody nose, or was it just that little awkward moment he and Applejack had after he managed to stop the bleeding? I have no idea, but I love that concept and I hope it's utilized in later chapters. I'm gonna be honest I'm surprised he didn't roll around on the floor in pain, door to the face is painful, and considering his "stringbean" status I wouldn't put it past him, but hey what we got was fucking awesome! Great Chapter!
Moar MUST HAVE MOAR!!!!!
If that is ok with you of course
first. and i ill be damned but im beginning to fell the beginning of a ship that i though impossible liked and faved.GIVE HIM MUSTACHES HAHAHAHAHAH
Ohhhh noooooo...
That's not going to end well at all...
Screw it. START UP THE RUMOR MILLLLLLLLLL!
~Skeeter The Lurker
Everything is gonna be JUST fine...
MURPHY'S LAW IN 3...2...1...
I wounder what Flim will do if AJ is pregned. I hope he don't run. Becuse Mac gonna tear him a new one if he do.
It continues, and at an impressive pace, no less! I loved this from the start when it looked to just be a one-night stand between these two...and though it seems silly to say, these updates have vindicated (at least in my mind!) my tendency to click both favorite AND follow on any fics that catch my eye, whether marked complete or not. (Was this one marked complete? I cannot remember. )
Because one never knows when a story will continue, and when it's such an inspired train wreck as we're seeing here in great and terrible slow motion?
ing. Yeeeeesss.
My attention was grabbed ages ago with the first chapter. None whatsoever has been lost.
Why the fuck didn't I have this faved months ago
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"An inspired train wreck"... that's the best compliment I've received in quite awhile! Thank you
Haha! I really really really REALLY want to see full-blown AJ\Flim romance. Because... reasons. Yes.
I read the first chapter a long time ago, and found it to be funny.
I'm glad I came back. This is a lot of fun. Hope more is to come!
SHIT.
This story is fucking brilliant, man. Update as soon as you can.
Reaction time!
Chapter 1 was amazingly clever and subtle so that the twist at the end would roundhouse kick you even though you were expecting a kick of some type. Nice touch leaving the Flim & Flam icons out of the description. It helped keep the mystery.
My general reaction: Holy crapincrud!
1.5 was also good for comedy, but I feel it could have been merged with chapter 2.
General thought: well this just got interesting.
Chapter 2 really helped set up the core problem that Applejack is still stubborn with pride, even pushing back her own brother. It makes me wonder if Flam is having any similar conflicts with himself. (I believe the brothers are actually decent fellows.) I also found the questions extremely amusing.
General thought: I want to say 'oh sh**' but I'm too busy laughing.
Chapter 3 is a bit confusing too me. Flim acts a bit jerkish and goes into borderline RAPE with Applejack. However, he also seems like he's trying to tease her, maybe in a similar maner as he did the night before. Also, when Applejack was in the shower, it came across to me that he was trying to apologize, only getting angry when he gets a bloody nose. His question about AJ being in season can help explain his 'eagerness,' but this chapter is really confusing on where Flim's standing on the incident is. (I'm hoping he's feeling some conflict)
The cliffhanger, however, was golden.
General thought: how is HE feeling about this? Cliffhanger: oooooooh dear.
EDIT: check that for chapter 3. I didnt realize there was a Flashback in the flashback. This makes Flim's standing much less confusing.
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Wow, thanks!
You're right that 1.5 should have been merged, but I posted it earlier than chapter two 'cause I felt bad about how long I had taken!
This was originally going to be entirely from AJ's perspective, so during 95% of the writing I was only thinking of her side; I've been mulling over how both Flim and Flam would react. I'd like to think Flim's not entirely a jerk, and he's teasing AJ because he's smart enough to pick up on the fact that it riles her up... in more ways than one.
You've given me some food for thought, so thanks again. :)
3325333 Thank you. I really hope you portray the brothers as you see fit. I have a personal head canon that they are NOT con men, like many people think, and have struggled to make a good name for themselves in business because everyone expects them to be con men BECAUSE of their names.
3325333 Clever making Flim a hemophiliac. It adds some much-needed vulnerablity to his smugness
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Thanks! I actually have a chronic disability myself, so I had some fun imagining this scenario.
So funny, yet so dark at that same time. I bet AJ was wondering if that little peck on the forehead he gave Applebloom meant more than met the eye. My friend has a similar condition, except his begins with a W, if he gets hurt his cuts don't clot because his blood doesn't have enough platelets (I sure hope I spelt that right). What made that scene twice as amusing for me is that my friend is probably just as smug as Flim is and I found out about his condition in a similar fashion. Never play water polo with no set rules; if you have the ball people will bite and scratch, hard, to get to it. and never underestimate the power behind little kids biting power. yeah... it took awhile for the bleeding to stop
I really can't figure out why I liked that you made Flim a hemophiliac. Is it that he now has a dash of vulnerability and it makes him more likable, is it because I'm a sadistic fuck who found it funny in context, was it the way I imagined how his voice would sound while having a bloody nose, or was it just that little awkward moment he and Applejack had after he managed to stop the bleeding? I have no idea, but I love that concept and I hope it's utilized in later chapters. I'm gonna be honest I'm surprised he didn't roll around on the floor in pain, door to the face is painful, and considering his "stringbean" status I wouldn't put it past him, but hey what we got was fucking awesome!
Great Chapter!
I suddenly became much more aware of how few, if any, Cheerilee clopfics I've seen on this site.
Applejack --->
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I loved it all and can't wait to see what happens next.
Its well written but gods above, what a mess. Is AJ gonna have any bright spots in this? It just gets worse.
I love how Flim flirts with her in this chapter and acts so sweet towards her. Adorable!