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Fields-of-forever


If things appear to be going well, you have overlooked something.

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Every pony down in Ponyvile liked winter a lot, but Rainbow Dash who lived just above Ponyville, did NOT.

The story of how Rainbow stole Winter, done in the style of how the Grinch stole Christmas.


This is just something I did for some fun after seeing a cool bit of art
by MattsyKun
Which is the pitcher that I'm using as the cover for this fic,
so thank you to MattsyKun for letting me use it!
Here is a link to her Deviantart page http://mattsykun.deviantart.com/ go look at her stuff!, you know you want too :raritywink:

Here is a fic reading done by Agent Fluffy go give them some love if you enjoyed this.

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Comments ( 17 )

Oooh, well done. This was perfectly Dr. Seuss-y.

I well favor this. Ha! Save thee and thy story, clever tongu'd whoreson.

Very amusing! Have a fav!

5941045 Thanks, I'm glad you like it.

This is just plain awful! Terrible! Dreadful! Utterly despicable!

You aren't even on the "Top 10" list yet?! THAT is the most unacceptable thing to be overlooked for this awesome story! :flutterrage:


On a somewhat unrelated note, don't you think this image should be added as an emoticon for FimFiction? Because if so, I would've used it as well as "FlutterRage"!
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Great story, I read it just tonight. but one thing bugs me... It the rhymes aren't quite right.
Rhyming takes practice and patience, this is all true. But if you're going to make it the mane part of a story, this can be an issue.
I'd advise anyone who wants to write: to stay away from rhyming, unless they can do it right.
Avoid trying to force a rhyme, for you see, the best rhymes are the ones that come naturally.
It should be easy to read and say, the words should all flow in a certain way.
I have practised rhyme for several years, and still, I don't claim to be the best, probably never will.
I'm not trying to offend you or make you mad. I'm just trying to help, I hope it doesn't sound bad.
And now is the time that I will say adieu. I hope this comment helps you.
:raritywink:

6009419 Thanks :twilightblush: I know the rhyming is not the best, but its the first (and most likley last) time I will wright in rhyme, I'm dyslexic so it's hard enough to right normally let alone wright in rhyme lol. P.S Thank you for being nice about it and not just saying it sucked, this way I can work on the problem and hopefully get better at wrighting :twilightsmile:

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You're welcome. I thought I'd write the comment before in rhyme just for a bit of fun. I hope you liked that little touch.

6009969 yes I did and it was well done too.

Hey there! I did a reading of your story! I hope you enjoy it! Youtube Reading It's premiering December 11th at 1:00 AM EST!

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Oh Awesome! I didn't think anyone even read this anymore:twilightblush: I look forward to checking it out on the 11th.

I read the narration in Discord's voice.

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Yeah, I may go over this at some point since it's so messy :pinkiesick:, it's pretty embarrassing how bad it is tbh but I'm working on the new fic and that has an older and wiser mind behind it lol.

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