Awww Yeah I bucking LOVED this chapter I waited weeks for the spike domination scene and the jokes were great too. Moustache spikes for you sir: BTW pleeeease do a fluttershy or rarity chapter soon
68856 Nope, I fond it online. Once I seen it, I knew exactly where I needed to post it. Also it was suppose to read " MisstressShy is pleased, here is your reward" didn't seen the gramical error until now.
All I could think after I read the letter was "Oh, this is gonna get bad..." but after I finished I was all "Everything went better than expected" There were also some other jokes I was going to make, but I forgot them...
P.S. I am surprised no one has yet to put up some picture of Bear Grills or the Sniper from TF2 relating to all the piss...
As usual you've given me some rather questionable arousal, and midway through the spanking scene, I found my hand in my trousers.... There was no lotion.... I chafed. Keep it up my fellow perv
69476 If you were looking for gore, you came to the wrong place I'm afraid. Nothing but piss and bananas here. Well, except maybe a little blood, because it arouses Fluttershy.
I'm really disappointed in this clop fic here. I mean the set up is nice and everything and there is potential to it, but I think it was way off the mark. I don't mind some of the things like foodplay and a little bondage, but the problem is that a lot of these sex scenes kind of feel like there's no real detail to it and that some of them feel rushed. Also why is everypony constantly obsessed with pee? Look I'm not really against it, but geez this is insane. Almost every chapter involves urine in some way, I almost expect for everypony to worship pee for some reason. Would it be too much trouble to cut down on the urine stuff and also give Spike a chance to be dominant and on top, not play around like some sex toy only? The worst part of this fic here is that it could've been something really great, but this.....this is just a disaster. If you want my advice then try one of the two things, either post one last chapter and end the series, or reboot the story with a little more detail to the sex scenes and really cut down on the urinating stuff, okay? I'm giving you an A for the idea sounding good, but a F for the presentation.
70736 Yes, I'm well aware that there is room for improvement, but I've seen far less detailed clopfics around. Some chapters probably could have been done better, but I don't want to take forever writing them - it's already taking up most of my spare time as it is. As for the peeing, if you're not into watersports, why are you even reading this?
There will be some Spike dominance in future chapters, but as I already said I never really saw Spike as a very dominant character.
Look here's an idea, try doing this. Every other chapter you can have some peeing. Like the next chapter, have some kinkiness, but leave out the watersports, and then the chapter after that, you can have watersports, and then next chapter none, and then the one oafter that you can have watersports. Another issue with these watersports is that some of them feel tacked on and like last minute ones like when Rarity had sex with Spike. At the end of the sex, it's like the watersporting felt really tacked on and rushed really. Take my advice and just really start cutting down on watersports. I can see now why this story has a 2.7 rating.
This chapter was WEIRD. Like, what? But the second to last paragraph about the crude image in the stars made me lol. So, yeah. The only pony left is... CELESTIA. And God knows how THAT will turn out.
Honestly, this chapter didn't generate quite the response I had expected. (I had expected more "what is this i don't even") Have people just gotten so used to the weirdness of this fic that nothing will surprise them anymore?
74616 What? You've never played Super Metroid? One of the best games of all time? (well, actually every Metroid game has missile tanks...)
74754 I don't currently have any chapters planned involving them, but if I ever come up with something, it's not impossible. Either way, it won't happen until after the Spike x Twilight situation is resolved, which is at least another 2 chapters. Chances are even the chainsaw dildo chapter will happen before any background ponies are involved.
74981 There will most likely be at least one more Rarity chapter, though I don't know when. I only have a very vague idea for it worked out yet, and there are other things that need to be settled in the story first.
79103 It was just something someone came up with in the #fimfiction IRC channel. Basically, it would be a chainsaw, but with the belt replaced with one that has rounded knobs and a silicone coating. Or possibly rubber/silicone knobs.
I'm still not sure when, or even if I will include it in a chapter though.
Everything was going great with this chapter until he though of fucking Big Mac, I mean bro, I got your back on anything you write but ahhhhhh.....no, I'm not for male/male whatsoever. I'm suprised that Luna is not bleeding more, that must hurt, great chapter though. FlutterSHY!!!!!!
Dear my most faithful student Twilight Sparkle’s number one dragon assistant Spike,
damn thats a long ass title
this never ceases to give me laugh. Keep it up
"he sensed a disturbance in the force" lol
Big Mac's sweaty asshole huh?
. . .
Nice skyrim refrence
Awww Yeah
I bucking LOVED this chapter
I waited weeks for the spike domination scene and the jokes were great too.
Moustache spikes for you sir:
BTW pleeeease do a fluttershy or rarity chapter soon
Skyrim ftw, another excellent chapter, and honestly I didn't know that was possible, and considering what I've done, that's a shock keep it up!
67311
I doubt it would be possibly for most women (at least without years of practice), but it has been done by a porn actress known as Amazing Ty.
The only negative think I can't think about this fic is the excess of pee-related fetishes.
Too many watersports
PS: fimfiction, y u no let me edit my posts to correct grammar?
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MistressShy is pleased, her is your reward.
yeah no you basically took off all the fun in shouting at dragons now-
oh well atleast i can imagine it's you
on the other hand, 5/5 for being an inmensely sick mohterfucker and having somewht nice writting
spelling errors here and there but that's ok
67489
That's kinda the point.
68228
Nice! Did you draw that?
68350
You never cease to confuse me.
68727
What?
68856
Nope, I fond it online. Once I seen it, I knew exactly where I needed to post it. Also it was suppose to read " MisstressShy is pleased, here is your reward" didn't seen the gramical error until now.
All I could think after I read the letter was "Oh, this is gonna get bad..." but after I finished I was all "Everything went better than expected" There were also some other jokes I was going to make, but I forgot them...
P.S. I am surprised no one has yet to put up some picture of Bear Grills or the Sniper from TF2 relating to all the piss...
this was me
69238
What do Bear Grylls or the Sniper from TF2 have do with piss? (well, except that BG likes to drink his own)
69276
Excellent!
As usual you've given me some rather questionable arousal, and midway through the spanking scene, I found my hand in my trousers.... There was no lotion.... I chafed. Keep it up my fellow perv
Luna is going to get a nasty bladder infection.......
Celestia now? :o
69357
69388
Speculation is magic.
69476
If you were looking for gore, you came to the wrong place I'm afraid.
Nothing but piss and bananas here.
Well, except maybe a little blood, because it arouses Fluttershy.
69292 Sniper use a bottle of piss as a weapon in the game.
I'm really disappointed in this clop fic here. I mean the set up is nice and everything and there is potential to it, but I think it was way off the mark. I don't mind some of the things like foodplay and a little bondage, but the problem is that a lot of these sex scenes kind of feel like there's no real detail to it and that some of them feel rushed. Also why is everypony constantly obsessed with pee? Look I'm not really against it, but geez this is insane. Almost every chapter involves urine in some way, I almost expect for everypony to worship pee for some reason. Would it be too much trouble to cut down on the urine stuff and also give Spike a chance to be dominant and on top, not play around like some sex toy only? The worst part of this fic here is that it could've been something really great, but this.....this is just a disaster. If you want my advice then try one of the two things, either post one last chapter and end the series, or reboot the story with a little more detail to the sex scenes and really cut down on the urinating stuff, okay? I'm giving you an A for the idea sounding good, but a F for the presentation.
70736
Yes, I'm well aware that there is room for improvement, but I've seen far less detailed clopfics around.
Some chapters probably could have been done better, but I don't want to take forever writing them - it's already taking up most of my spare time as it is.
As for the peeing, if you're not into watersports, why are you even reading this?
There will be some Spike dominance in future chapters, but as I already said I never really saw Spike as a very dominant character.
70785
Look here's an idea, try doing this. Every other chapter you can have some peeing. Like the next chapter, have some kinkiness, but leave out the watersports, and then the chapter after that, you can have watersports, and then next chapter none, and then the one oafter that you can have watersports. Another issue with these watersports is that some of them feel tacked on and like last minute ones like when Rarity had sex with Spike. At the end of the sex, it's like the watersporting felt really tacked on and rushed really. Take my advice and just really start cutting down on watersports. I can see now why this story has a 2.7 rating.
Best story ever made
I have the weirdest wingboner.
Excellent work! You really need to make a Celestia chapter Other than that, great work!
(It would be more amazing if there were pictures)
This chapter was WEIRD.
Like, what?
But the second to last paragraph about the crude image in the stars made me lol.
So, yeah. The only pony left is...
CELESTIA.
And God knows how THAT will turn out.
69292 The Sniper throws his own piss, Jarate
Uhhhhhh...... What about Trixie? Or Photo Finish?
Honestly, this chapter didn't generate quite the response I had expected. (I had expected more "what is this i don't even")
Have people just gotten so used to the weirdness of this fic that nothing will surprise them anymore?
71818
Glad you liked it.
74616
What? You've never played Super Metroid? One of the best games of all time? (well, actually every Metroid game has missile tanks...)
74754
I don't currently have any chapters planned involving them, but if I ever come up with something, it's not impossible.
Either way, it won't happen until after the Spike x Twilight situation is resolved, which is at least another 2 chapters.
Chances are even the chainsaw dildo chapter will happen before any background ponies are involved.
When do you think you will add more rarity chapters
And also When do you think you wiladd some fluttershy chapters 74969
74981
There will most likely be at least one more Rarity chapter, though I don't know when.
I only have a very vague idea for it worked out yet, and there are other things that need to be settled in the story first.
74989
Next chapter will be a Fluttershy chapter.
Hope next chapter us just around the corner
Oh my, Fluttershy is next?
Why do I have a feeling that the next chapter will be kinkier than that a ball of string?
Keep up the good work!
Why no rainbowdash yet?
74969
did you say chainsaw dildo? Is that just saying that it will never happen, or...
honestly, I'm scared.
79103
It was just something someone came up with in the #fimfiction IRC channel.
Basically, it would be a chainsaw, but with the belt replaced with one that has rounded knobs and a silicone coating.
Or possibly rubber/silicone knobs.
I'm still not sure when, or even if I will include it in a chapter though.
so... why all the piss?
79214
Because, piss!
I really need to study anatomy more, because I am really creeped out about not knowing how that works or what it looks like up close. o.o
Now i'm going to go look at the sky.... where the hell did she put it.....
DAH fuck Luna?
I died at the FUS RO DAHing!
"sensed a disturbance in the force"
Why was this the ONLY thing
that has angered me through
out this story?
"The feeling of punding her tight wet peehole was so intense that Spike knew he wouldn’t last long." - Punding?
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LOL @ FUS RO DAH and a disturbance in the force!
hah i like the skyrim reference
Everything was going great with this chapter until he though of fucking Big Mac, I mean bro, I got your back on anything you write but ahhhhhh.....no, I'm not for male/male whatsoever. I'm suprised that Luna is not bleeding more, that must hurt, great chapter though. FlutterSHY!!!!!!