I've been looking at this fic for a while, and it's not that bad. I have to admit, it was hard for me to get into it at first, but it kind of grew on me. I do like the entire concept and the fact that Spike is nailing ALL the mares. Though I have to say some of the clop scenes feel a little empty and dry to say the least. A little more substance is nice. My other complaint is that really, while not against watersports, some of them just feel tacked on. Some of them just feel way out of left field. I understand that you like the fetish, but if you want my opinion, don't put a watersport scene in every chapter involving sex, it kind of makes it wear out its welcome fast. Try putting one watersport scene in every other chapter or two and do other kinky stuff like bondage or what I read here. I do hope that you don't take offense to that criticism since it seems you have run into this issue before, but I am just trying to give you a helping hoof. I do like where the story is going, but the watersport scenes need to be kind of cut down to every other one or two chapters. Not every chapter.
I would do it, but because the stars are gone now, I'm giving this fic 4/5 stars.
I had one problem. Urine does not come out of the vagina. It comes out of a hole (urethra) between the vagina and clitoris. I'm a girl, and I think I would know what's going on down there
240555 I'll just link this again: Urolagnia Exactly how common it is, I couldn't say, but as far as fetishes go, it seems to be a reasonably common one judging by the vast availability of porn in the genre. (not much pony unfortunately, though)
240883 She's getting quite a lot of action now though, having been featured to varying degrees in 3 chapters so far (not including her minor non-sexual appearance in chapter 10), and most likely again in the next chapter.
241297 Come to think of it, I haven't seen any before either. It probably exists though.
243281 When you said that she was pushing to get the pee out while he was inside of her. I don't think a girl would have that problem. @sapphireshine- The vagina is connected to the uterus. In all animals. It is in no way connected to the bladder. That's what all mammals have in common.
255348 The story isn't really intended to be "sensual".
255397 >but is "Peehole" and "Wee" really what you'd use? Yes. Any pee-related words are good. Pee, piss, wee, peehole (urethra sounds a bit too medical though), urine, golden nectar, etc. So far I have (I think) avoided "whiz" (sounds a bit too "bart simpson"-esque) and "leak". Leak isn't too bad though. I might use that in a future chapter. Not really very sexy though.
255440 I think I prefer my version. The second one might be better in a steamy romantic novel - but this fic isn't one of those, nor does it try to be.
255882 There will be more stuff like this in the next chapter...
255930 Taken a turn? I'm pretty sure the humor was there right from the start. The "comedy" tag was a hint.
256138 There is a chance, yes. I'm not exactly sure when, though.
The Gala?!?!?!
I cannot wait for the next chapter!!!
Spike is going to have a BLAST with the Mane 6.
Oh boy, here we go... I just KNEW you would start fucking up Canterlot (yes, pun intended). And I am looking forward to it.
This will be goooood...
:>
JAM! You good sir, I love it! God, this keeps better and better!
It's just a guess, but I think in the next chapter Cellestia will find out about Spikes "special talent."
Somepony has a fetish for pissing during sex. 's ok though it turns me on :P enjoying this immensly
I might try this
as much as i don't like piss flicks
it's actually a good clopfic
*caught throwing rocks at 227528 *
And then s3.amazonaws.com/data.tumblr.com/tumblr_lx47aqAJkh1r3xauuo1_1280.jpg
Spike took the picture :3
I've been looking at this fic for a while, and it's not that bad. I have to admit, it was hard for me to get into it at first, but it kind of grew on me. I do like the entire concept and the fact that Spike is nailing ALL the mares. Though I have to say some of the clop scenes feel a little empty and dry to say the least. A little more substance is nice. My other complaint is that really, while not against watersports, some of them just feel tacked on. Some of them just feel way out of left field. I understand that you like the fetish, but if you want my opinion, don't put a watersport scene in every chapter involving sex, it kind of makes it wear out its welcome fast. Try putting one watersport scene in every other chapter or two and do other kinky stuff like bondage or what I read here. I do hope that you don't take offense to that criticism since it seems you have run into this issue before, but I am just trying to give you a helping hoof. I do like where the story is going, but the watersport scenes need to be kind of cut down to every other one or two chapters. Not every chapter.
I would do it, but because the stars are gone now, I'm giving this fic 4/5 stars.
At the Gala, In the Gardens, We're going to have an Orgy :P
I had one problem. Urine does not come out of the vagina. It comes out of a hole (urethra) between the vagina and clitoris. I'm a girl, and I think I would know what's going on down there
>> oOSlowMotionOo yeah but a horses anatomy is totally different then a humans i would know because i worked on a ranch for a year.
Hmmm...
+++++++=PROFIT
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At what point did I ever say it did?
240555
I'll just link this again: Urolagnia
Exactly how common it is, I couldn't say, but as far as fetishes go, it seems to be a reasonably common one judging by the vast availability of porn in the genre. (not much pony unfortunately, though)
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240883
She's getting quite a lot of action now though, having been featured to varying degrees in 3 chapters so far (not including her minor non-sexual appearance in chapter 10), and most likely again in the next chapter.
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Come to think of it, I haven't seen any before either.
It probably exists though.
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243281 When you said that she was pushing to get the pee out while he was inside of her. I don't think a girl would have that problem.
@sapphireshine- The vagina is connected to the uterus. In all animals. It is in no way connected to the bladder. That's what all mammals have in common.
Say, are there any chances of more Rarity in this one?
255348
The story isn't really intended to be "sensual".
255397
>but is "Peehole" and "Wee" really what you'd use?
Yes. Any pee-related words are good. Pee, piss, wee, peehole (urethra sounds a bit too medical though), urine, golden nectar, etc.
So far I have (I think) avoided "whiz" (sounds a bit too "bart simpson"-esque) and "leak". Leak isn't too bad though. I might use that in a future chapter. Not really very sexy though.
255440
I think I prefer my version.
The second one might be better in a steamy romantic novel - but this fic isn't one of those, nor does it try to be.
255882
There will be more stuff like this in the next chapter...
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Taken a turn? I'm pretty sure the humor was there right from the start.
The "comedy" tag was a hint.
256138
There is a chance, yes.
I'm not exactly sure when, though.
Let me guess, Spike gets to do the Celestia's royal plot.
Wait, Gala? Does this means that the girls are going to fight each other over Spike as a date?
Oh dear, the Grand Galloping Gala!?
Knowing Spike, it's gonna become the Grand Galloping Gangbang.
With luck, Spike will have the distinction of being the only being to ever whizz on the Princess and live to telp the tale.
The gala?
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Please keep making more, there is a huge gap between your current last chapter and the next one and I would like them now, please.
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Yes, sorry about the delay.
Hopefully I'll get another chapter out this week.
"I hope this year’s even will be as much fun as the last one." - Did you mean event?
ha ha trollestia and this story is messed up lol
I...wh....huh?
That has to be the single biggest plot twist in history.