Great story! I greatly look forward to the next chapter, always been a fan of the whole 'Twilight is Luna's daughter' plot twist idea, as you may guess from 'Mare of The Moon', don't know why but it's just a concept I love.
It's interesting, but the portrayal of Celestia is just so... off.
There are so many better, more convenient ways of setting up a foster family for Twilight. That Celestia would make this choice is... there isn't really good reason for her to have made this decision. Even the circumstances of the plot aren't enough to explain why the character would make such disastrous, trust-breaking actions.
6489327 I try to protray Celestia as well meaning but flawed pony. She panicked and acted quickly. And she did plan to tell them both the truth but circumstances threw that out the window. She wants the family reunited but her actions have hurt that.
Frankly Celestia is often made doing wrong things for the right reasons.
Say what you will on how celestia acted through out the whole ordeal but i actually stand by her decitions here she had no knowledge of her subject's actions and thus fought for her life because at the time luna was trying to end it. Putting twilight in a stasis pod was better than allowing her drop stars on everyone. (I think that makes her strongest alicorn by default.) sealing star away was a good decision because (based on how she acted) she wasnt to give celestia ANY leway. This allowed her a chance to get her sister and star's mother back. As for the family that one of any number of possibilities she could have done and geas garaunteed that she would be grow in a loving environment. The sealing of her alicorn magic? Because there was only two in existance at the time and ponies are like humans thus the mass majority are retarded.
Definately tragic but for lack of a better term the damage control was handled apropriatly.
WE will train our daughter, sister,” Luna declared as she approached Twilight and put a wing over the other mare. “She is our daughter, and we have many years to catch up on.
This part with Luna is justified I don't even have other words for it than 'totally deserved'.
i can see twilight having a connection with the star beasts (like the ursa's) seems were alicorn realm is at least partly the stars and they star beasts came from the stars she called
“IT WAS A LIE!” STOMP. “THE WHOLE THING WAS A LIE!” STOMP. “MY TEACHER!” STOMP. “MY LIFE!” STOMP. “MY-my family.” Tears rained down harder, and she stomped weakly with that last revelation and wept.
Not all of it was lie the experience and such wasn't.
Spike made spaghetti with hayballs for them, and both alicorns dug in eagerly. Watching the two devour the meal Spike could only comment, “Yup, they're related.” Then he went in to eat before all the food was gone.
This fic oscillates between normal and very disjointed and confusing. This chapter was fine, but every time they show strong emotions, they behave erratically and stiff.
Yay Twi and Luna are getting along so well...
I'm so happy...
Night
not bad not bad at all
Cute, Celestia has a lot to answer for
Can't wait for the next chapter
You should have said spaghetti and hayballs but still love this story
6336059 early tewenties. my bad. will fix
so what now.
6346915 they all adjust. Also Her foster family and Cadance need to know
6347160 ok, let know when next chapter going to be ready.
6347178 going to be awhile. multiple stories being worked on.
6347234 ok
6388571 Oh....*looks down ashamed* This is awkward....
Great story! I greatly look forward to the next chapter, always been a fan of the whole 'Twilight is Luna's daughter' plot twist idea, as you may guess from 'Mare of The Moon', don't know why but it's just a concept I love.
6464792 thank you. Several actually have tried this with varying success.
It's interesting, but the portrayal of Celestia is just so... off.
There are so many better, more convenient ways of setting up a foster family for Twilight. That Celestia would make this choice is... there isn't really good reason for her to have made this decision. Even the circumstances of the plot aren't enough to explain why the character would make such disastrous, trust-breaking actions.
6489327 I try to protray Celestia as well meaning but flawed pony. She panicked and acted quickly. And she did plan to tell them both the truth but circumstances threw that out the window. She wants the family reunited but her actions have hurt that.
Frankly Celestia is often made doing wrong things for the right reasons.
More please
6489346 I get a flawed Celestia, and mistakes are a common enough part of her character that I can accept them, but this just seems... overwrought.
Just my opinion.
6490769 Well this is mainly from Star/ Sparkle's POV so there is a little bias there.
Note that Celestia loves them and wants to heal the rift but is currently unsure how. Things just haven't gone as plan for her.
6490474 nice profile pick
6490782 when can we expect an update?
6813044 be a bit, other stories are ahead of it in the cycle.
6813050 but...but...but...
Fine
as long as it does happen
6813061 It will for even when I'm not writing the next chapter I'm mentally working on it.
Say what you will on how celestia acted through out the whole ordeal but i actually stand by her decitions here she had no knowledge of her subject's actions and thus fought for her life because at the time luna was trying to end it. Putting twilight in a stasis pod was better than allowing her drop stars on everyone. (I think that makes her strongest alicorn by default.) sealing star away was a good decision because (based on how she acted) she wasnt to give celestia ANY leway. This allowed her a chance to get her sister and star's mother back. As for the family that one of any number of possibilities she could have done and geas garaunteed that she would be grow in a loving environment. The sealing of her alicorn magic? Because there was only two in existance at the time and ponies are like humans thus the mass majority are retarded.
Definately tragic but for lack of a better term the damage control was handled apropriatly.
Also i want star to take charge during trixies show that would be hilarious.
*have not finished chapter yet.*
Just wanted to comment;
This part with Luna is justified I don't even have other words for it than 'totally deserved'.
Now with the chapter read; this was so hearth warming!
i can see twilight having a connection with the star beasts (like the ursa's) seems were alicorn realm is at least partly the stars and they star beasts came from the stars she called
Not all of it was lie the experience and such wasn't.
so is the deal between the two different Twilighs like a two souls one body kind of deal or more some self aware split-personality?
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more of the second then the first.
I'm guessing the more free twilight star gets, star and sparkle's personalities and memories will merge until they become one in the same
Nice!
This fic oscillates between normal and very disjointed and confusing.
This chapter was fine, but every time they show strong emotions, they behave erratically and stiff.