107 - Tying up Loose Ends
With permission secured, Silver worked with Night and Fast to construct what would become the new academy. Tumble was often close by, watching over them, and sometimes lending a hoof. Silver threw a leg over his withers one day. "Looking forward to getting some real training?"
Tumble went rigid. "What? I mean... Me?"
Night tilted her head from up on an unfinished wall. "Of course you. You're a guard, and you're the closest. Why wouldn't I train you?"
Silver squeezed Tumble before letting him go. "Maybe next time, you'll be at my side. This time, you'll prepare yourself."
Tumble nodded quickly, and his work become quite focused.
Rainbow returned from her trip to the griffon lands, none the wiser for her doppelganger's appearance. She told Silver about Griffonstone, boasting of her adventure and how she defeated a wild horde of terrible monsters, only to be foiled at the last moment from getting the treasure. She seemed awfully chipper for failure, but Silver enjoyed listening to her spin her tale eagerly. When she was done, she moved to depart, but Silver put a hoof in the way. "What about what we left unsettled?"
Rainbow shrugged. "I'll let you know if I feel like it. For now, I think Applejack just needs to adopt and stop screwing with the both of us, since she went and got rid of the way we could do it right." She leaned in suddenly, pressing nose-to-nose. "You'll just have to wish you had me." And she was off, leaving him behind. Silver wondered for a moment if he didn't like the changeling's attitude better, but shook his head. The real Rainbow Dash was fine just the way she was.
Silver visited the warlocks in Canterlot, and they were quite excited to see what he'd grown into, but that only drove them to work him harder. He didn't escape for a week, being forced to reach higher and channel harder. They were enthusiastic about his findings concerning internal channeling, but it wasn't anything new to them, just not something the average pony had any need to bother with.
The last week before he was to go, he spent it back in Ponyville, gathering his wives close and lavishing them with praise and affection. He cooked every day that week, and did his best to leave them as happy as he could, but that didn't stop anypony from looking sad when the final day arrived. He kissed each on the cheek. Tumble was close by and looking like he was trying not to look. Silver gave him a quick peck too, then turned and trotted out the door, taking flight to Canterlot.
Celestia met him in the garden. She was dressed to impress, in fine glowing silks that seemed to flow in the same non-breeze that carried her mane and tail. "Are you ready?"
Silver gave a short stiff nod. "Let's go there, get this done, and get back, in your words."
Celestia gave a shadow of a smile that hinted she didn't think it would be that easy. With a golden flash, they were transported to the rail station. "We'll be catching a boat out of Manehattan. Rest up."
Their adventure had scarcely begun.
DIVERSION. Proceed to Silver's trip here: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/268420/beneath-a-silver-sky Come on back when you're done.
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Nooooooooooo
Need more stories of Silver
Yes we need more adventures of Silver Stars.
6021402 I concurr. We need more Silver in our lives.
Honestly, I'd say stop Silver's story here. At least take the focus off of him for a bit. With a small time skip, you could easily start a slice of life series with his children since they're likely to get into all sorts of craziness.
Tumble was often "close by."
The "it" in the first part of the first sentence is usually taken to refer to the most recent incident, but the incident mentioned most recently in the preceding sentence is "her doppelganger's appearance." As such, I'd change the beginning to "She told Silver about Griffinstone."
Change "jerking" to "screwing." Alternately, change "jerking with the both of us" to "jerking us both around."
Just the way she "was."
Lavishing them "with praise" and affection.
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^ Like them, do want.
If you can handle it and such, i wanna say 'continue it'. If it's not too much of a bother. I am very curious what will happen with Celestia and Silver.
6021489 Tweaked for happy(?) endings.
I am happy and sad to see Silver Stars come to a end,
Silver has touched my life in a vary good way I have cried with Silver and laughed with Silver it is just a superb story.
am I shocked to see this work of art coming to a end, to tell the truth no I kind of saw the end coming.
I will not beg for a sequel it is just not my way. the hell it isn't I kind of agree with Rain Nero a time jump with Silver in the back ground fockest more on the 3 children we no of at this point.
ok time for me to jump off.
I absolutely loved this story I just can't say enough good about it.
I think that's a typo. You must have meant to say "Yes."
All joking aside, I'm sad to see this end. As usual with your stories, I'm glad to have gone on the journey. Thank You.
6021506 Well, that was abrupt.
I usually give my thoughts on the events of a chapter in the order that they were presented in that chapter, but in this case I'm going to skip to the end first. Specifically, that author's note, which I found very chilling. The use of the phrase "calling it quits" along with the "maybe" answer of whether or not a sequel would be written - when taken together - form a very pessimistic picture with regards to this fic's future. To put it another way, it sounds like this story has become burdensome, either in the form of no longer being worth the time and effort invested in it or simply because it's no longer fun, and so you've decided to let it go in favor of other stories that you're working on. That worries me, because when something is "quit" like that, it's usually not taken up again.
That's a shame because I really want to see where the rest of this is going. While the story didn't end on a cliffhanger per se, it did stop at the cusp of a new adventure, one that promised quite the sea change in terms of the locale and supporting cast. Unlike some other commenters, I don't want to see a time-skip; having a new generation in place would serve mostly to retire the current cast of characters, and I get a great deal of enjoyment watching them interact.
In terms of how well this functioned as an ending, the best term I can come up with is that it was adequate. It was certainly a step in the right direction compared to previous attempts to wrap things up, but I'm not sure that it truly wrapped up loose ends. To be fair, it did focus on most of the major plot threads that were currently in play - with the sole exception of the Lightning Wheel turning in their prior leader - but I'm not sure that it truly resolved them.
The big offender, in this regard, was the issue of studding Rainbow Dash and/or Applejack. We're left wondering what the real story was with regards to Applejack's sudden decision not to let Silver stud her - which had been teased as a legitimate mystery - with a quick reversal by Rainbow Dash saying "nah, we're gonna adopt." I can understand wanting to put this particular plot-thread to rest; it's been going on for what honestly feels like too long now...but this was a little too off-handed. It would have been far better for there to have been a sit-down with Rainbow, AJ, and Silver where AJ came clean about whatever her real reason was, followed by them all agreeing that there had been too much drama about this - which would have been a rather appropriate object lesson for all three of them - and that the mares would just adopt instead, especially since they're all young enough to change their minds later on if they feel so inclined.
That said, the rest of what was here worked rather well. The construction of a new school for the guards was a nice set-piece, in that it wrapped up not only Night's subplot, but worked in a necessary reference to Tumble there as well. Moreover, this was nicely underscored by the fact that Silver gave Tumble a kiss on the cheek, which was an excellent way of showcasing that the relationship between them, while still uncertain, still has potential. Ditto for the reference with Silver visiting the warlocks and them being impressed at his "internal channeling" but already knowing about it themselves. For all of these, it did feel like the loose ends legitimately were wrapped up.
For now, I can only hope that you decide to (change your mind (?) and) keep writing about Silver's adventures in Anugypt.
I would like to see a sequel.
You left loooots of loose ends there...
Almost making it seem to myself as a reader that Silver left his herd , some pregnant mind you. Well technically left both his herds to run away with Celestia to a far away land. Just suddenly to end at that note...weirdness man.
I suppose you left Night Watch in good hooves with Fast Change, Twilight and the rest of the mane six. I know they would help with the birthing and all but again weird sudden stop here too.
Not to mention Silver Stars is the sole Male Alicorn...and stud randomly to suddenly as I said seemingly running away with Sunbutt...very odd...
Way too many loose ends for me as a reader to like this ending...hiatus maybe to work on ypu other stories I'd understand that. But this story and Everglow to me are your main stories and I enjoy them greatly.
6021672 I'm confused. The fact that Silver was leaving to go to Anugypt with Celestia was a long time coming. How is this a loose thread, rather than, you know, the start of a sequel if there is one? They even brought up the pregnancy before? I'm just confused.
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Wow I just re-read that and ummm I haven't gone to bed yet I know silly me. I blame my cold medicine for not making sense lolol
Umm cute pony...*looks about sheepishly*
Seems like a decent place to end this installment. Really hope for a sequel, you just set it up too well.
I think we the readers should all give David Silver a huge thank you for this truly remarkable story.
am I happy with the ending? I will say yes I am and to that point rather then see a super good story go down hill this is the right thing for Silver.
will we the readers have more Silver only time will tell.
my feeling are this I think Silver needs to rest for a time and recover after all he has ben a rather busy pony, I am sure he is more then ready to step back and just allow his wives to get use to there new lives.
IF and when Silver comes back to us he will be more and better at telling his story.
Harts Fire
I figured out my weird ramblings as a reader I suddenly felt this is the end of the whole story and yeah...probably jumped the gun. Sorry about that...
Love all de storysssss all of dem. all of them in this whole silvers life in equestria.
Dumbass man says I'm a dumbass proba–
dumbass
that's it I'm leaving, dumbass.
But if you leave who will call me a dumbass.
everybody. Duh
6025749 All the thingies?
6025841you trying to correct me or ask what I mean?
What I mean is all the B I U
ST those that change the text of the comment.Da text will be shrunk like. Nooooooooooooooo
6034686 Yep.
Do A Sequel!!!!!
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He hasn't earned anything. Most of the bad is the result of him being evil or stupid. From the start of the first story in this set, he has been changing any rule he doesn't like, and a lawless person cannot expect to have an ordered life.
6048179 Then he's getting his just desserts, seeing as nothing in his life is orderly.
6048186 No offense, right? Silver Stars is just not a good role model.
6048202 Well, role model for what? He's the poster child for forgiveness, and a object lesson in how not to do a lot of other things.
6048207 He's pretty inconsistent on forgiveness, letting some off with a warning and killing others
6048215 Who did he mercilessly murder? I remember a bunch of shadow things?
6048246 In chapter 88 he kills diamond dogs and ponies. (I admit I did not read every chapter)
6048255 Wait wait wait. Your example of not being forgiving is reacting with lethal force to a situation that's already devolved into immediate violence and possibility of direct harm by a shadowy cabal of unknowns? As Rainbow pointed out after the fact, her welfare hinged on his/her acting quickly. That feels a tad unfair, especially since he/she did save one of them from the actions of one of their peers, and ultimately did make amends with the organization later.
6048284 You're right; that's not a fair example.
6066564 oh yess it's animated now!
And that's that! We made it to the finish!
6102040 Indeed! Now get started reading the sequel.
6102774 on it! I'm at chapter 12 already!
6165921 Oh I'm not denying the horror of a swarm of bees, that's terrifying. I'm just saying if instead of a swarm of bees, a swarm of Cazadors, which, funnily enough, happens more often than their real-life, non-irradiated counterpart, the Tarantula Wasp.
And please tell me if what I said can be understood, because I swear it doesn't look right to me.
6165980 Damn the bees! pollinate the flowers and leave me be.
6218296 They make great party favors?
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Ah. The disintegration of the foal, which I thought was perma-dead but I now know to be alive and well.
Greetings from your 250th follower! :D
6219544 You win! I'm not sure what you won, but it's yours! Yay!
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6241435 This story is a sequel to XXX
But it doesn't say what comes next.
6241476 Look to the right of the story view.
6257413 I just realized something. Earlier Night was upset that Silver let Twilight cum inside, implying that that was how ponies normally get pregnant. But later you add the whole love explanation, which invalidates the relevance of semen. What's going on here?
6260238 You keep trying to simplify it. It isn't. You also seem stuck on the idea that there's only one way to get something done, and there isn't.
6260313 I admit I get hung up on the technical details, but it just seems so odd to introduce something like that, have it effect the plot in such a major way, but then never really clarify.
6261017 Considering you haven't caught up, you can't say it's 'never addressed'.