1 - Learn to Love the Moon
Luna sat like a sphinx, watching Night and Silver. They were wrestling, with Night clearly the superior combatant. Silver was thrown over her shoulder suddenly, and she landed on his belly, forcing the breath from him before she pecked him on the nose with a soft kiss.
Luna shook her head, "You're not guarding yourself, and you're holding back. You know better, Silver."
Silver rolled to his hooves, wobbling, "She's my wife, and pregnant... I don't want to hurt her."
Luna rose to her full height, "And will you fear for my health?" She spread her wings wide as she prowled at him, "We are warriors. At your best, you may leave a bruise, but don't be so cocky." She suddenly lashed a hoof, knocking him to the ground before she tackled him, pinning him to the ground, "Broken stallion, you're not allowed to hide behind timidity any longer. You will take charge, even if I have to shove you forward to get you going."
Silver squirmed about beneath Luna as Night Watch approached, adjusting her new glasses along the way. Night leaned in, looking at him upside down from his pinned place, "I think she's serious, Silver. You should listen more and complain less."
With a soft sigh, Silver bobbed his head, "Alright, I'll fight."
Luna softly brushed a wing over his nose, and he sneezed. "You are such a day pony. I can hear the hesitation in your voice. I am going to bite you." And she did, lashing at him like a snake. Pinned under her, he could do little to avoid the blow. Her teeth pierced deep into his neck and he shuddered. It felt like when he had been seized by Nightwing, but something was... happening.
His body felt cold, but tingly. Luna was somehow poisoning him, injecting something into his veins. He writhed under her as the coolness turned to warmth. Luna pulled back abruptly, stepping off of him, but keeping one hoof on his barrel, "Night Watch, it is your turn."
Night took her place, pinning him down under her warm form before she struck, somehow biting the same place on the other side of his neck. Luna spoke as Night worked, "We will divest you of this softness. The essence in you pulls you to the night. The touch of your wife will bind you more surely. You two will be of my brood." She narrowed her eyes at Silver, "Before you object, I know they are false protests. Embrace Night, hug her as you feel."
Silver reached up with trembling hooves and pulled Night down. Acting on a sudden overwhelming urge, he bit her, sinking suddenly long teeth into her just as she did into him. "Good," spoke Luna, "Draw on the strength of the night. Shred the frailty. When you want something, you will reach for it. When something threatens what is yours, you will face it with determination." She wrapped her wings over the two as they consummated their relationship in a strange exchange of blood. "Never again be tempted to surrender."
Silver suddenly threw off Night, staggering to his hooves. Everything felt wrong, and yet so right. The dim lighting of Luna's room felt brighter, and yet his vision had contracted slightly. He felt new power pulsing in him, feelings running unfettered. He bared his new fangs, licking them clean of the blood before he looked between the two females that still desired him, despite his many mistakes. He felt less human, but he felt more... He wasn't sure. More something...
Night had bounced back from being shoved back quickly, and she met him in a fierce kiss. Normally he would have been pushed back, belly up, and surrendered to such passion, but this time he met it. His heavy endowment dropped and pulsed in almost angry twitches as he met her as an equal. They bit and nibbles across cheeks and shoulders, but soon he was beyond reach of her mouth as he circled around her. He wanted her, and nothing would get in the way of it. "Night, perfect Night Watch. My love, my wife, mother of my foals." He hopped up on top of her, biting at the back of her neck, "I claim you, even if you own me. You are mine, as I am yours."
Their coupling was fierce but brief, and this seemed right with both. Gone was Silver's gentle touch and unsure motions. The sounds that came from Night told him his confidence was appreciated, but he had little time to enjoy it. As he settled with her, Luna was beside them. "You are not done. The circle is incomplete." She went for Night's untaken side of the neck, making her go rigid beneath and around Silver. He grunted and held her still, assuring her as they shared their moment, though he wondered why a lunar pegasus would need such blessing from Luna.
Luna drew back, licking her teeth clean, "And now, to me, my children, my herd, and my ponies." Silver and Night separated and nuzzled against Luna, working up along her barrel until they both arrived at her neck. Working on some kind of suggestion, or perhaps instinct, they seized her, sinking fangs into the supple flesh of their moon goddess. Silver's ears began to itch terribly, twitching in spasms as new sounds began to reach it. A fresh wave of essence filled his mouth with the taste of copper, and he wanted more. His entire body felt expanding waves of piercing tingles as he softly chewed at Luna. Her flesh seemed unharmed, only yielding more of the strong-tasting blood. He opened a slitted eye, looking to Night enjoying her own taste. His uncertainties felt so far away. So what if he was an outsider? So what if anyone had a problem with him? Luna loved him. Night Watch loved him. He would protect them both. Nothing else mattered.
An unspoken command had them both draw away, panting for breath they didn't realize they were holding. Luna raised a hoof to either shoulder, "I was not entirely truthful, but there shall be no secrets between us now. I am not the mother of the lunar pegasi, not truly. A pair of pegasi came to me."
Silver perked a tufted ear, curious at Luna's words. A glance revealed Night's attention was also held fast.
"I shared a portion of the night with them, as well," spoke Luna. "They were fruitful, and begat the lunar pegasi. While my blood flows through them, it is not truly mine."
Night looked perplexed, but it made perfect sense to Silver. Her magical essence created them, but her genetics were not involved. They weren't 'related', and yet, related. Silver licked his lips, learning to navigate his new fangs, "Do you mean to repeat that?"
Luna nodded, "You will be the father of my second tribe. From your loins come the lunar unicorns. I had considered this before, but Fast seemed ill-suited to being a mother to a species." She nudged Night gently, "I mean her no disrespect, but she is no longer part of your herd, and I will take advantage of it. Night will be the mother, as she has already consented."
Night flushed with a mixture of emotions, "How can I make an entire tribe? I'm only one mare! How many foals do you plan for me to make?"
Luna raised a hoof, "Have little fear. I expect you to make as many as feels natural, no more, no less." She looked to Silver, "You will visit more than one."
Silver took his turn to flush. The idea of studding a tribe was at once appealing and terrifying, but the terror felt far removed. He could handle this. "Provided they are strong, but kind of spirit. I will not lay with any mare I cannot speak with kindly." He rose to his hooves, "I haven't forgotten my ambitions. Are you going to stop me from studying magic? Am I being put out to stud?"
Luna huffed, "If I thought you would enjoy that, but then, if I thought that, you may not be worth it. No, you will continue your studies. You will live." She spread her wings wide, "I did not spare your life for it to be squandered! You will live."
Silver leaned in, nuzzling Night along her barrel until he reached her belly, "What of the foals inside her."
Luna waved a hoof, "That is why she drank. She already has a shard of the night by birthright. Any unicorn within her now holds it as well. She may yet birth the new tribe this time."
Night reached for her glasses where they had fallen and slipped them into place, "What about earth ponies?"
Luna shook her head, "Had I not acted foolishly those many years ago, unicorns and earth ponies would already be part of my night tribes. Each will have their chance, in due time." She raised a brow, "Perhaps you will find a worthy earth pony." She snorted softly and suddenly nipped Night, "Will you return to me?"
Night blinked in confusion, "I'm right here."
Luna shook her head, "No, to my guard. It would be an honor to have you at my side, to have your keen eyes watching over me." She leaned in, nuzzling gently, "Will you think less of me if I said you made me feel safe?"
Night turned as red as her fur allowed, "I had no idea... Won't this get in the way of our... thing?"
Silver shook his head, "Our thing is private. If you're officially watching her again, it excuses you being near her more often. I think it's a good idea."
Night nodded, "Yes, that is sound logic. I was getting bored with my job anyway. I want a real challenge, with real stakes."
Luna nodded softly, "Then consider it done. While the public will know you as one of my subordinates, my heart will know my herd-sister is always at my side." She pointed at Silver, "As for you. You will be released. The public will know you have stepped down from your position. You have served admirably. You brokered peace on behalf of a bitter enemy, saved countless lives, twice, and survived an attack on a changeling hive. All accomplishments few ponies have. Your life remains mine, but I will not hold you here. You must learn to move with confidence. You are... no longer the human I once knew."
Night frowned, "Silver Lining doesn't seem to fit anymore." She tilted her head at Silver, "What about Silver Stars?"
Silver smiled, "I like the sound of that." He shook himself out before looking over his lunar form, "What will my actual position be? I don't want to be a layabout. I feel ready, for anything."
Luna nodded slowly, "Good, because you're serving with Night Watch. You shall be my vanguards. We have a mission shortly." She directed her ears forward, "Be prepared. This is no training exercise. I will want your wit and your eyes. We sail east, to Anugypt, to negotiate terms of a trade agreement. They have been... reluctant, and we fear treachery. Are you up for it?"
Silver nodded firmly, "Nothing will harm you."
Luna prodded Silver in the chest, "Good, and protect yourself. All three of us must return, or we have all failed."
Silver wondered what Anugypt held in store for him. His curiosity felt much stronger than any fear. He could handle what came, with his herd beside him.
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ok wow just is not fitting here this story just really took a turn.
I can see this story is going to be based on more mystery as now Silver Stars has a hole new life as a unicorn(not really sure on the race) as thestral does not fit the new race.
David Silver we need a name froe the new race. ??
I am happy that one think cared over for night but I promised to not talk about it so I will stop there..
Harts Fire
5786337 If the Pegasi are separated out into solar and lunar variations, would not he be a lunar unicorn? Welcome to the new story!
an other permanent transformation for silver, that makes three, four now?
He is now the primogenitor of a new pony sub-species. So the story is finally going more toward adventure type, I am looking forward to that.
5786373 Luna is writing this story, and she's fairly tired of that wishy-washy stuff. Let's get things done.
5786350 this sounds right to me.
here is a real chaligon we need art work of Silver Stars now.
5786443 On the way!
I see 'mature' as a qualifier. If you put blatant sex scenes in this afterwards...
I accepted the previous because they were only implied, not shown. I even liked the previous stories because you let me perceive a different Equestria than the ones I never bothered to create or think about, but I don't want it ruined.
5786774 Oh fine, downgraded to teen+sex instead of mature.
"Relation" should be "relationship" here.
As a stylistic choice, shouldn't that be "moon goddess"?
Shouldn't that end with a question mark?
Insofar as the repetition goes, having the first subject (Luna) be its own sentence, and the second one (Night Watch) be part of the statement made with regards to both of them seems a bit awkward. I'd change that to "Luna loved him. Night Watch loved him. He would protect them both."
Okay...but she's a changeling queen now, and will be administering to her entire swarm, not to mention laying eggs en masse, so that really seems like you're splitting hairs, Luna.
The "she" in the second sentence seems to be a different pony than the "she" in the first sentence, and it's making it confusing, all the more so for "the mother" sounds rather awkward. I'd change that second sentence to "Night Watch will be the mother of the new lunar tribe, as she has already consented."
How many "foals" does she plan for her to make, rather.
He will "visit" more than one? What does that mean? More than one what? This sounds like Luna's saying he'll have multiple wives, which we were sort of taking for granted, but the phrasing is very odd here.
I think he means, "what of the foals" inside her. This should also end with a question mark.
Also, this question is ambiguous. I'm pretty sure Silver is bringing up that Night's current foal(s) were conceived before Luna's "blessing," and so he's not sure if they'll be lunar ponies. However, if that's the case, that's not coming through.
5786923 Fixed!
The new story starts out with a bang, but in doing so its reach exceeds its grasp. (This review is written before I read chapter two.)
The events of this chapter set out to rectify the low point that the previous story ended on. That's an understandable goal, and a laudable one, but it's one that's far and away more than can be adequately dealt with in a single chapter. The operative word here being "adequately." Silver's fall from grace, and literal fall from the parapets, was brought on by three stories' worth of stress, pain, and loss. To have him bounce back from all of that in the course of one chapter, with a literal deus ex machina courtesy of Luna, does his character a disservice.
I've quoted Thomas Paine here before, but it seems apropos to do it again: "That which we obtain too easily, we esteem too lightly." Simply put, Silver has instantly gotten his groove back, and it doesn't feel at all like he earned it. He hasn't had to actually deal with any of his issues, confront any of his demons, or undergo any sort of personal growth. Instead, he gets a dose of Luna-venom and bam! he's a new-and-improved Silver (new name and all), ready to go out and take on the world, or at least Anugypt. This entire sequence should have been what happened at the end of this new story, being the culmination of a journey of self-discovery and hard-won personal improvement, rather than the kick-off.
That's really a shame too, because I want to like this new transformation. It's exciting and mysterious and even rather sexy for how it opens the door to Silver essentially studding an entire new race into being. I'm not sure how Luna's enchanting a unicorn and an (already-)lunar pegasus is going to bring forth lunar unicorns specifically - she even said that she brought forth the lunar pegasi by using this ritual on a pegasus couple, rather than a mixed-tribe couple - but I can overlook that. Magic and pony biology are both unknown enough that we can say "Luna's enchantment is that any children born from Silver or Night Watch - regardless of whom the other parent is - will be a lunar pony" and have that be good enough. (But how funny would it be then if Silver got it on with a griffon, and ended up fathering a race of lunar hippogriffs?)
I'm also going to show my indulgence for politics in that I do hope we get to hear more about this trade agreement that Luna wants to cement, and how the machinations behind it will affect the economic and political dispositions of both their nations. Be prepared for some epic nerd-pedantry from me on that front!
Those aspects of the story aside, I'm not at all certain if future chapters should try and walk back the issue with Silver's sudden, unearned personality change, or just roll with it. Trying to walk it back gives the story a chance to go back and "get it right," but it also runs the risk of dredging up familiar issues and having them become an anchor around its metaphorical neck if we don't see real character growth from Silver. On the other hoof, ignoring those issues feels disingenuous, but lets us get right to an adventure story without the relative burdens of trying to present Silver "right."
It'll be interesting to see which way things develop.
5786798 Then again, I'm not sure what vampire/cannibal sex counts as. To put it another way, where the heck did that come from?
5787334 My mind is a dark and terrible place that you have only peered into the entry lobby, to scurry away at unwholesome sounds and disturbing smells.
Or are you asking thematically?
5787541 um...both. Seriously though, Luna getting turned on by being eaten? That's a bit of a departure from...everything. I don't even understand what is supposed to be going on.
Random encounter: David Silver's mind.
Party response: Send all replaceable npcs and summons in a full frontal attack and use the distraction to run for the hills.
5786798 WHAT? Did I just missed clop? Stupid sleep, why do we even need you...
Other than that I was quite weirder out by the ending of the previous story. Not by the suicide attempt, but by "I own you now. Again." part. Does Luna ever learn? I understand her frustration with Silver's action, but ffs mare, you were in his head. You're supposed to be the one who understands him the most!
Or maybe she do and she does what will actually get stuff done and what Silver himself will never dare to even think consciously. Still intrigued/hyped.
5788138 drinking partner's blood is one of my fetishes.
5788138 Well, not really eaten, seeing as blood is a liquid. Sorry if I creeped anypony out with this depraved act, but blood magic is typically powerful magic, capable of great and terrible things, and the communal sharing of it is an old tradition of binding.
5788708 The chapter is not edited. You missed nothing except a few typos.
5793365 Wouldn't this better fit a chapter or two ago, in the last story?
Uhhh...hold on. Let me turn on the lights first.
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About time he stopped being an almost doormat.
5917722 Welcome! You only pass the true test if you get past chapter 12 or so.
So... vampony?
I really like the way this is set up, but as a writing recommendation, might I suggest you include links to the sequel stories as well as the prequel ones in the description so that readers can jump right to where they want to go?
6241383 FimFic itself already shows prequel/sequel?
erg. through intervention of an outside party which technically owns him he is converted to a different personality. i mean... ugh i would be more okay with it if they told him beforehand what was going on but they did not and forcibly altered his form and his mind. before he just wanted to study magic and solve peoples problems. some people are peaceful by nature nothing wrong with that but they wanted him to be assertive. they changed him. the romance went from hilarious and sweet to "Really?" levels of stupid. never be with someone who wants to change you it is a bad idea. so far fast change was the best out of his herd or possibly celine or tumble.
Wow... this reads so much differently now. This series has some serious re-reading value!
6841078 You're the first to report on it so far!
6841135 So how long is this after Wizard Hat? How old is Silver physically anyway?
7079674 He's a young adult. 16-19 in human years.
7079783 Weird, your replies are so stealthy! So many alerts failing to go out.
Edit:WHY THERE NO FAQ TO THIS SITE!?!?!? Oh sure there's the what not to do and whatnot, but no indication if there is a benefit to tracking and favoriting a story, that comments show up under the story in chronological order, but under the chapter in which they occured....
So...wtf? Can I get an explanation? This is almost like a dream.
7099468 You may be the first pony to mention such so quickly.
7099468 hahah hint hint
Typo?
7460832 http://www.dictionary.com/browse/begat
So, reading this chapter, I see a change. I must confirm in the other story if i should be reading this now or later.