The Darkness.
Oh how I missed you my lonesome friend.
Oh how I missed your cold, bleak, embrace.
How I miss your dark and terrible power.
But you didn't miss me, did you.
You knew where I was this entire time, just like he knows where I am and I him.
To be frozen in time, him sitting smugly on his black crystal throne and me, under the castle stuck in a massive black gemstone behind magically reinforced metal bars.
He thinks he can keep me down here forever, taking the knowledge of the people I was born to and the race that I have transformed into, and using it how he sees fit.
But I won't let it happen.
The dark unicorn king thinks he is safe up there, thinking that he has bested me in the dark arts although I only taught him how to manipulate the mind to break it and mold it as one sees fit, but he doesn't know everything.
Sombra thinks that I am broken, that my failure to stop him all those years ago has made me weak and pathetic, but he didn't know about that my plan has been in motion ever since we met for the first time.
I can still remember that day to, such a fond moment in my life...
It all started when my friends and I went to a convention, typical, really.
We went together as a group and rolled the dice to see what we would go as, and the unanimous victory went to Destiny, and I went against the grain and went as a villain instead of being the hero. I wanted to be different from the rest of my friends and two of them decided to join me as well, another being a villain as well and the other as the mysterious merchant of strange coins.
I was liking it, a costume that took a few days to construct, reading the wiki on who the character is, played the game to understand them further and in the end I think it was worth it, other nerds at the convention commented on my costume and thought it was nice.
Now if only this would get me laid and then I would be a happy man.
With my friends dressed up as their Guardians being the heroes, my other two friends as Omnigul and the other as Xür. Me on the other hand, I went as Skolas, the Wolf Kell, leader of the House of Wolves, and I was enjoying every second of it. Only problem was that I was a short one, the real one was easily at least eight or nine feet tall which means I was easily three, almost four feet too short but at least I was enjoying myself.
That was all that mattered to me, to just enjoy everything and to go with the flow of things.
But what made me change my thought process was when I bought something from strange looking old timer that was running a stall and well...lets just say that some bullshit happened and magic became real for me.
When I bought that little trinket and put it on to cover my old massive cloak clasp, I immediately started to get a painful headache and blurry vision before it transforming into me passing out in the middle of the convention and waking up that wasn't here at home or at the hospital.
I instead woke up in the middle of a strange town, its inhabitants are quadrupeds that instead of the natural colors that horses have, these are shades of all colors of grey, silver, white and other lightly colored crystals.
They looked at me, I looked at them, and they started to scream while I passed the fuck out like a little bitch cause honestly, I was not expecting to go from a convention in southern California to the middle of some foreign land. I sure hope it is not in Russia cause if it is then I am fucked six ways to sunday without any lube. And naturally when I woke up I found myself no longer in the middle of a town of horses but instead I was chained to the wall by my wrists.
Normally I would be freaking the fuck out right now but seeing how this is all just a dream and that I was asleep at the hotel I just thought that I can just wait it out, wake up and be told that I passed out like fucking loser and all will be good with the world.
Only...it didn't happen like that, I was instead woken by a bucket of ice cold water to the face and when I woke up I found that I was no longer standing at five foot six inches. No I was now standing at nine feet tall and several hundred pounds of muscle and armor and I was loving it, for about five seconds before I realized that I was no longer human.
Before I had a chance to start freaking out, they came...three beings that was unique and different from the horses that I have seen when I first woke up and first seen in the city. The first one was an alabaster white winged unicorn, her features were soft, womanly, a light pink mane and tail with magenta eyes, she had a gentle aura around her but she was inexperienced when it came to interrogations. The second one was a dark opposite of the winged unicorn with a light cyan mane and tail with turquoise eyes, she was rough, brash, very forward and she led the interrogation by tightening the chains on my wrists. And lastly there was the black unicorn with an equally black mane and tail, this guy...something felt off about him the moment he walked into my cell, something evil...that or it was the breakfast burritos I had this morning.
When those three entered my cell I waited patiently for them, I wanted to hear what they had to say although I doubt I would understand a word that was being said because they are horses, not humans with English or Spanish, or even German.
I was hoping I wouldn't understand a word they were saying but sadly that wasn't the case...
"What manner of creature are you? We have never seen anything like you around here nor in other parts of the world." The black unicorn said as he trotted up to me, inspecting my body closely as he talked, his red eyes gazing at mine for the briefest of moments before going back to my body or more importantly my armor.
The black unicorn stallion stood at my legs for a few more moments before retreating back to the two black and white winged unicorns and murmuring something to them both, hoping that I couldn't hear anything but I caught every single word that was being uttered.
"This is unlike any other beast I have seen during my short time here Princess Celestia...this thing is easily taller than the minotaur chieftain I have seen and it doesn't seem like anything that should be up here on the surface. Maybe this beast is from Tartarus and has escaped?" The black unicorn whispered as his eyes quickly looked at me before flinching away and looking back at the two winged unicorns, and just now I realized that the pair was wearing crowns matching their colors, they were also wearing what looks like togas, matching hoof slipper thingies, a gold necklace for the white one and a dark silver for the black one.
"Neigh Councilor Sombra, We hath seen the abominations that runs rampant in thine cursed lands and never hath We gazed upon such a powerful beast before Us." Before the white winged unicorn could speak the younger winged unicorn spoke up, pointing a slipper covered hoof at me before placing it back down, I guess pointing for these horses isn't an easy thing to do when you have to rely on that same leg to stay standing.
"Then where did this thing come from Princess Luna. If not from Tartarus nor the surrounding lands than where?" The black unicorn, now named 'Sombra' if this 'Princess Luna' is correct, was wearing what looks like a gold colored headband and a toga, but his toga was slightly darker in color, has what looks like a pocketbook at the base of his neck. My guess if what was said by the dark horned winged horse, he must either be someone that acts as a guidance teacher or some other office of importance?
"Perhaps our awakened guest will indulge Us all on its origins." The white one 'Princess Celestia' said, her magenta eyes gazing at my four pale blue eyes (yeah, I figured that out when I tried to normally blink and felt four eyelids closing simultaneously) the two of us were silently gauging the other, trying to see into the mind of the other but to no avail for either of us.
Clearing her throat the white winged unicorn trotted up to me before sitting down on her haunches and with a warm smile before speaking directly to me.
"Greetings, I am Princess Celestia and this is my sister Princess Luna-" Princess 'Celestia' said as her sister nodded at her name being called "-and the one beside her is Lord Sombra, a Councilor of the Assembly-" the dark unicorn nodded with a grin, apparently he likes being called by that title of his...an inflated ego or a common trait among the unicorns perhaps.
"-and We would like to welcome you to the Crystal Empire."
From where I am standing this doesn't feel very welcome nor nice.
"Although you say you welcome me to your kingdom, you have me chained and bound to this wall." I said with some snark thrown in, because come on, who wouldn't throw in a little bit in this situation?
What I said immediately threw the white one through a loop, the dark winged unicorn seemed a bit peeved that I spoke to her like that and the dark unicorn seemed to be grinning even more, and I don't like it.
"I am sorry but We had to take precautions, seeing how nopony knows who or what you are and at the time We did not know if you are friend or foe." Princess Celestia said, still maintaining her smile all the while her sister was frowning at me, Sombra still kept that creepy smile of his.
"Smart move, not every day one encounters something unknown and expect it to be friendly when it could have hostile intentions. Nice to know that naivety isn't a trait of yours." I said as I tested the chains a bit, pulling at them to see how far I can move them only to find that I could easily move my arms a few inches forward in any direction.
Celestia smiled more, a faint red hue forming on her cheeks before a wing comes around and covered her muzzle, a giggle escaping her lips as her sister eyed me suspiciously, Sombra's smile on the other hand waned and even outright dropped.
Apparently those two thought I was flirting with Celestia. I wasn't cause there is no way in hell that I would even think of an animal in a situation like that.
"I dare say, are you flirting with me Mr...?" Celestia started, rolling her right hoof around, the same way a normal person would when they are trying to get you to say something or to just spit it out and get it over with.
"Skolas, my name is Skolas." I said, rolling my eyes although no one saw it because my eyes don't have any clear iris or pupils.
"Mr. Skolas, are you trying to flirt with me?" Wow, me? Really? Nope!
"No, just take it as a compliment." I said with a flat stare, flirting won't get me no where, and it sure as hell ain't gonna help me here.
"Good, flattery would have not served you any good here and I am sure it would not have even worked on my sister here." At least she is being honest about flattery not working, cause honestly only a fool would graciously accept flattery without taking it with a grain of salt.
"I know, it was an attempt on my part to get out of these chains through flattery. Now I guess I get to see how strong these chains are the old fashioned way." I said before giving a good tug on the chains, hoping that they would budge or at the very least bend a bit but so far nothing.
Seeing me test the chains bound to my wrist and keeping me connected to the ceiling, Princess Luna could only grin at my struggling only for it to turn into a gasp as I tugged harder and the chains shattered in the middle of the long link.
"Impossible! Those were crafted by the greatest smith of the Black Iron Clan and are strong enough to hold down an Ursa Major!" Princess Luna shouted, her wings flaring out and her horn pointed at me as it started to glow a color that I can tell that means that I am about to have a really bad time. Or in other words she looks pissed and defensive and she feels threatened that I joke broke those chains with ease.
Looking down at the chains I held them up to my face before crushing them into my hands, forming a ball of ruined metal with distinct chain loop shapes all over it before revealing my lower set of arms, yanking the chains that was still bound to my wrists off.
The look of shock was clearly evident on their faces, all of them looking at my other set of arms as I gathered up the wasted metal and crushed it all into a single sphere of crumpled scrap before dropping it on the floor.
"This doesn't look like it was made by the greatest smith ever, it looks more like a poorly crafted pile of scrap metal than anything else. So called strong enough to hold an Ursa Major, ha!" I shouted as I loomed over the three, Sombra was just standing there, now scared and shivering where he stood as I looked down at him. Princess Luna had her horn glowing brightly as a large magical sword materialized before her and was pointing it at me, Celestia on the other hand could only shake her head as her own horn glowed a golden color and levitated the ball of ruined chains from the floor and looked it over before placing it beside her left hoof.
"So it would seem...Luna do lower your sword, I think that will only serve to anger our new friend and I doubt that it would leave a dent on his body or his armor...uh you are a he...right?"
"Yes, I am a guy, male, whatever you call the opposite gender from female." I said as they looked at me as if I started to speak gibberish.
Giving a flat stare, something I think they can't tell cause it is hard for my eyebrows to even move, I just resided and be very blunt and vulgar.
"It means that I have a dick." That got the attention of everyone, even the four guards that were standing outside of the prison cell. I just noticed that they were there because I saw four spears randomly moving about behind the three and that they all look the same. Either they are clones or they are just using generalized equipment.
"I see...well than, Luna lower your weapon and Mr. Skolas, do try to not react violently." I am the essence of calm, I am the picture perfect of peace, I am the fat man on a lazy boy on a hot summer day.
"Don't worry, I wont. So long as she doesn't try anything reckless or does something to anger me." That and I doubt killing royalty will give me any brownie points.
"Hehe, you are almost like my sister." Bullshit I am like her! I am not a horse nor do I pull a gun...sword out on someone for moving!
"Celestia! I am nothing like this beast!" Yeah! I am like, way better than her!
"Please Luna, you almost kill your squire for dropping your practice sword on the floor the other day." Ouch, man I feel sorry for that poor bastard.
"That peasant should have known better to not drop them right in front of Us! Does he not know how long it takes for them to be repaired at the end of each session!" They are just practice swords! I bet they are just pieces of blunted metal!
Wow, Luna is such a cunt, thank god I am nothing like her.
"She also sounds like she has anger issues."
"That she does."
"Hey! We do not hath issues of anger!"
The two of us ignored her as we continued to talk, clearly making her upset with us, mostly me though.
"So..." I started as I looked around the cramp cell I was in, my helmet scrapping the ceiling forcing me to hunch down a bit to stop scratching the paint off.
"Yes you are free to go, but would you like to have some tea before we part ways?"
"Sister! Thou can't hath tea with him! He is a brute!"
"Sure, and not like I have anywhere else to go so I just might stay a while." I said as I smiled faintly underneath my rebreathing mask, slowly making my way out of the cell as the two princesses and councilor make space for me to leave, the four guards leading me out of the prison that is underneath what is a palace made entirely out of crystals. I do not know how they managed to construct such a place but they definitely deserve props for doing so. Hell it must be impenetrable by normal means seeing how crystals are normally hard to break, unless it is made out of diamonds than that requires either a laser beam or another but much sharper diamond.
And so that was my first day in this foreign world, I passed out, woke up in the middle of some horse town, passed out a second time for me to only wake up in a prison cell, met two princesses of importance and a unicorn of mild importance, knowingly flirted with one or two of them just to see if I could get away with it (I did), was released from prison and lastly had tea with them.
Le sigh
What a day that was, oh if only I could turn back the clock and hold them one more time, but sadly because of what happened on that fateful day several decades later I now just want to strangle the lot of em.
But before I could reminisce on my past, I felt a disturbance.
A powerful disturbance.
The world around me was shaking, forcing itself back into the waking world along with everyone that was trapped within the radius all of those centuries ago.
The stasis spell was ending.
Sighing to myself I closed my eyes and focused on the darkness that has surrounded me for the past one thousand two hundred and one years before absorbing it all, the black void that was once my prison doing nothing more than revitalizing me, recharging every single cell in my body before the black crystal shattered into millions of tiny pieces.
Now this would have been my crowning moment of awesome for breaking out of a prison of solid black crystal but there was a problem, it was lying on its side, and I was facing straight down at the floor, and my reaction time was about as fast as a dead cat.
So I landed face first on the floor that was soon followed by my body and the rest of the tiny shards that went upward instead of any other random direction.
Now I was face first on the cold prison floor, covered in crystal shards, and I really, really need to take a shit.
I swear I am getting to old to deal with this crap right now...
"I see you are clearly enjoying yourself, friend." a masculine voice said as I clearly remembered who that voice belonged to.
Oh crap...
"Come now, don't be shy, I know you recall who I am, buddy."
With a bit of effort I lifted my head off the cold floor to look at the one talking to me, giving the pony in question a pissed-off glare the entire time.
"I hate you so much Sombra." I growled out before the mad unicorn king started to cackle madly, throwing his head back as purple wisps of smoke left his closed eyes before his horn started to glow a deep blood red color.
And in that exact moment I felt the tiny fragments that I landed in lift off the ground before latching onto my head to pull it up and immediately slamming it back down, knocking me out cold.
Oh I am so sick of this horseshit...
Gasp! Guys! It's back! The story is actually back!
Sidenote: I like what you did with the Revamp
Welcome back, wonder when the next Displaced hate will show up.
oh geez the story was nuked and now rewrited. What a shame loved it already, wonder how thing turn out now.
i am excited this is back even though i enjoyed the previous version as it was before, hopefully this one will be of the same or better quality
Oh for fucks sake are you kidding me!! Authors always do this crap. First they make a story that's perfectly fine and then they commit homicide on it and then rewrite it. I mean don't get me wrong some story's get better when rewritten some don't. But what I'm saying is I'm not hating on you for rewriting it I'm just saying I hate when writers do that if it makes any sense. But anyways good luck with rewriting it and can't wait for it to be updated again.
Yay this is going to be interesting with having the one Hive leader that accomplishes things, mysterious trader with rare items, three revived heroes, and four-armed leader.
Glad to see this story is still kicking.
7066615 Well I had to rewrite it cause apparently Dropbear said that it was a Displaced carbon-copy of his story and cause of that it was taken down so I had to change a lot of it just so it could pass inspection. And trust me, I didn't want to rewrite this, I had another chapter at the time to put up but cause of the incident I had to put it on hold till everything is back where it belongs.
Well...let's hope things go a bit more better. Sure I'm glad this story is back...but I'm hoping that things have been upgraded.
IT LIVES!!!!! ALL HAIL SKOLAS!!!!
7066384 I see it pinkie. Also, don't worry, I already have the army ready. We await your orders lord skolas.
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I'm not sure how to feel about this just yet. On one hand, the old story had a lot of spelling errors, Skolas was kinda condescending and the empire was a self-sustaining eco-system. On the other hand, Skolas was kind of an asshole who just sorta walked over everybody with ease. While I enjoy Dropbear's stories for the most part, that shouldn't stop you telling your own slightly similar story.
Since you're going for a fresh start, I'll make a few suggestions for the story...
1. Trophy collecting. It reminded me a lot of an Ork Warboss from WH40K, adding trophies/skulls etc to his collection and boss pole. And kinda reflects my own trophy hunting habits in games. if you can keep that as part of his character, that would be awesome. Maybe he picks up a manticore skin rug or a dragon skull during one outing for instance? A little variety to the collection.
2. I dunno if you're still making our protagonist the eventual new ruler of the Crystal Empire. But I did enjoy watching the Militarization of the Empire. So if he becomes the ruler, you should keep that in there.
3. I kinda felt in the original draft and in Dropbear's own fic, that the protagonist was never really at risk of defeat. Skolas should still be a tough character, but not some un-killable machine of death. Don't hesitate to show he can be vulnerable.
4. Giant ponies, I dunno. I just liked their inclusion, even if I felt they needed to be elaborated on a bit more. Perhaps you can do that in the rewrite?
5. Seems Sombra and our protagonist have some history in this setting, good choice. I'd like to see how it pans out.
Awe, I loved the original :-( Did you scrap the whole thing or did you move it to another site? I've seen a lot of my favorite authors leaving FIMfiction and now this is making me scared to submit my stories here.
Yes! It's back! I can't wait to see where it goes this time.
YEEES ITS BACK! Oh i do hope updates come soon and slightly quick.
When I saw this was back
I'm rather disappointed that Dropbear would have the nerve to claim copyrights.
I may enjoy his stories, but making weak and selfish accusations like that is rather disheartening to see in a good writer. Especially when it ends up ruining an enjoyable story for you and the fans who took pleasure in your writing.
Sure his idea of "making a badass king of the Crystal Empire" was an idea that he proably started first. But you never stole his characters nor his story line. You just made up your own path and went with it. Just like a good writer should.
. . . But I guess there's no point in talking about it anymore. Him and the mods have already made their mistake and now we can see where this new story line takes us.
I hope to see the next chapter soon.
Not sure why you're rewriting this... I did like the original beginning to be honest.
Well this is nice. Finally the wolves jaws snap and howl once more.
If something happens to this because someone is a selfish moron who doesn't know when something is different from his own thing, i will be quite sngry at that person for ruining something good.
Why are you rewriting this? I absolutely loved it before. The start was better too.
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Thats bullshit
Maybe you could continue the story on fanfiction (if you still have the old chapters if not I stil have a html of it)
Fuck y3a it's back my hahaha
i seriously dont like dropbear for that and who cares if your fic is a little similar he should get over it and let other people have fun with your amazing fic and to be honets his crytal empire fics suck in some way because all that space stuff in his fics ruins the story
I was reading it and going "Wait, what? What is this?"
Then I looked down at the chapter and word count and realized it was the first chapter and it was, in fact - Being rewritten.
Personally, I think I like the way this rewrite is turning out.
It lives again! I can't wait for more!
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Yeah I knew you had a good reason. Also sorry for the long ass spite I was just not very happy about the rewrite and I needed to get that out so sorry
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Yo he had to rewrite it because it was a carbon copy of Dropbears story so yeah
What happened? Where all the awesome go?
7066678 who the hell is Dropbear and why is he so stupid? Copyright can no be used on any fan fiction on cross over as no fan fiction writer has copyright to any of the material the story is based on by law only bungee or Hasbro could claim copyright. Dropbear is dumb as fucking brick for thinking he can and the mods screwed up for supporting him. You can't copyright fan fiction.
What going on? Where did all the other chapters go? I'm so lost now?
Wow it's back. But what happened to the original story before this one.
7067485 no it wasn't I went and read the other guys work. They're different yes similarities are their but it's in the same location how many ways can you describe the white house or Pentagon? Cause that's what caused this bull.
7067540 mods had case of stupidity and mad him rewrite one f the best stories on site defiantly the best displaced story cause a another story had similar description of the Crystal palace.
6879298 I went and read the other story your take Dow was a mistake.
7067597 Well that sucks.
7066678 I don't think that he can do that. I haven't seen any stories like that from him.
7066868 No I didn't scrap the chapters, they are still here, just not published and they are in my google docs.
7066678 Read This Everyone to find out why for the rewrite.
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1. Well I was already going to have him collect trophies but now you all get to see him collect his trophies from the past and the present!
2. That is staying the way it is in this story.
3. Oh he has vulnerabilities, one of them is related to his past. And as for being an unkillable machine, he will have a few close death encounters that reinforces his idea of wearing his battle armor at all times.
4. Don't worry, they will have a proper introduction in this one instead of spontaneously appearing.
5.Oh they got some history alright, and it runs deep.
7066678 rubbish, yours is not a carbon copy at all. yours is completely different, it might share similarities but hey who cares, it was a good story. besides even if it was the same it doesn't matter anywho, this is not a product being sold and someone else copying and selling the product, its fanfiction, non profit, copyright doesn't matter to it so why should your story be taken down for something being similar to something else.
I'm glad it's back but mad about dropbear, that was a dick move. Yeah the concept was kind of similar but there are a lot of fim fiction that are similar. Some people like his version others like your version. Besides this had been featured before so why did he wait tell now to pull that stunt? For the most part I hope it's staying the same but niceway to start the story back up.
YOU'RE BACK!!
AAAAAAH MOTHER FUCKER WHERE DID EVERYTHING GO D:
i loved this story
Will he still be rhe ruler of the crystal empire and be on odds with cell because that was problem oun of my favorite parts also will forge x solar still be a thing
6062957 How ironic this is considering what happened.
Why did you change it??
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I think someone complained that it was similar to another story here, and he had to take it down but he rewrote it instead.
7067516 Apparently some of the descriptions of the crystal palace were copy pasted from one of Dropbear's stories. Also, he didn't claim "copyrights" the mods saw the copied portions and notified him and since one of the rules on this site is no plagiarism the story was taken down.
7069576 i haven't read anything similar
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If you look in the comments by Roran Dreamon, you'll find a comment that says ">> Roran Dreamon Read This Everyone to find out why for the rewrite."
7069589 except the Crystal palace is set by show you can only describe a land mark the so many ways. And the other guy posted both in quote and the two where similar but different if the mods violating for that they would fail every student that writes a report about the white house.
More this is so good
YES! FINALLY! I get to be here right from the start... again!