Lyra has developed strong feelings for the new human in town, but can't seem to muster up the courage to tell him. That ends today. Today will be the day she finally confesses everything, and he will feel the same way about her... Right?
'Cuz if you don't, I'm gonna need to come up with a way to rate something better than a 10/10. And this was the first clopfic you've ever written? Jesus buck, that was bucking amazing!
You've got great talent. And I suppose if you're gonna ignore my advice and keep writing, I would have to request that we see more of this wonderful sexytimes. And cuddles must ensue, as well. And lots and lots of love.
Let me teach you one thing, dear author: No self-respecting reader should ever hate a writer for making long chapters. Ever. The more long chapters, the better. Now, if some have to be short for whatever reason, that's fine too. But unless the pacing gets bad or too many details are dragged out, never be afraid to write more.
Whoa whoa whoa, hold up, Lyra wants Bon Bon to join them!? Okay this Chris is one lucky bastard. I thought there was romantic undertones to Bon Bon and Lyra's earlier conversation, this is awesome! This part gave me a laugh,
She watched with wide eyes praying to Celestia, Luna, and Twilight...
She prayed to every Princess EXCEPT the Princess of Love!
I always thought it would be funny if one of these human-on-pony clops began with the human catching an accidental hoof upside the head and waking up a few days later. That's a good way to test the strength of a budding relationship.
Wasn't Bon talking to Lyra in another chapter with some magic radio thing at the front door? Did she hear everything? Is she crying or laughing herself to sleep? or both?
really great job with the story and clop! i can only dread the inevitable end of this story but lets make it as long as possible
mfw
Lyra smiled, nuzzling closer to him, sighing in content. ‘I can’t wait to tell Bonny what happened,’ she thought to herself. ‘She’s going to be so happy… And then maybe once she gets to know Chris more… we can become a family.’
‘I can’t wait to tell Bonny what happened,’ she thought to herself. ‘She’s going to be so happy… And then maybe once she gets to know Chris more… we can become a family.’
5523147 5523240 Yeah I agree. I hate it when fic's would build up a relationship and when they get to the actual love making act, it's short and dry. So I'm glad I could achieve the opposite of that.
5523791 5522556 5522759 I have read fic's were people started complaining that the chapter was way to long and wordy. So I was hoping that didn't happen here.
5523233 You know, I have seen your icon on a lot on stories I have liked. I think before you had an icon of Patric Star? But when ever I read a new story on this site I look for your name in the comments, because then I know it's going to be a good read.
With that said, I am honored that you like my story so much. It means a lot to me, and there are sequel plans. So this story might be ending soon, but a new one is around the corner.
5524035 wow im surprised you remember my last avatar. Im flattered that you look for my comments and think so highly of me lol
Usually I mainly read HiE stories so that is probably where I post the most. Anyways you deserve all the praise and likes for story. You are a phenomenal writer and artist. Thanks for confirming the sequel
Hope to keep seeing more stories from you and thanks for taking time out of your day to write glorious mint plot
After a while Chris started to use his index finger, drawing little letters into her stomach seeing if she would realize what he was writing. S-E-X-Y-P-O-N-Y
And later in the evening, she uses her hooves to spell out S-I-L-L-Y-H-U-M-A-N on his stomach.
Oh man you got it so wrong about "the hard ridges on the roof of her mouth". The roof of a horse's mouth has lots of ridges, but its really rather soft, unlike humans. Anyone that has had to shove a syringe of meds way back into a horse's mouth knows this.
She has love. She needs LUST tonight. I'm pretty sure the unobtainable Solar Goddess, the thousand-year exile Moon Regent, and the Forever Virgin Bookworm are all kinds of pent-up. So you pray to those when you need lust on your side.
MFW this chapter
Kinda sad Chris didn't decide to use his mouth as a part of his explorations, other than licking her horn.
Oh relax, you did just fine. Well done, good sir.
well done, i hope chris is present when lyra talks about what happened, nothing more entertaining then an embarrassing situation!
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I was thinking the same thing. If he's gonna explore, use all the "tools" he got.
Maybe he was a bit too nervous to do so. Or wanted to keep some surprises for later.
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I was actually going to do that but this thing was already 11k words
Plus I can't blow all my guns on my first clop.
10/10
I have no words, they should have sent a poet.
I want you to cancel this story. Right now.
'Cuz if you don't, I'm gonna need to come up with a way to rate something better than a 10/10. And this was the first clopfic you've ever written? Jesus buck, that was bucking amazing!
You've got great talent. And I suppose if you're gonna ignore my advice and keep writing, I would have to request that we see more of this wonderful sexytimes. And cuddles must ensue, as well. And lots and lots of love.
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And you helped. You beautiful son of a Luna
Let me teach you one thing, dear author: No self-respecting reader should ever hate a writer for making long chapters. Ever. The more long chapters, the better. Now, if some have to be short for whatever reason, that's fine too. But unless the pacing gets bad or too many details are dragged out, never be afraid to write more.
Whoa whoa whoa, hold up, Lyra wants Bon Bon to join them!? Okay this Chris is one lucky bastard. I thought there was romantic undertones to Bon Bon and Lyra's earlier conversation, this is awesome!
This part gave me a laugh,
She prayed to every Princess EXCEPT the Princess of Love!
I would have never guessed that this was your first time writing clop if you hadn't said anything. Very well done.
This chapter actually reminded me of Xenophilia while maintaining a unique quality at the same time.
Can't wait to see how Bon Bon reacts when Lyra tells her how it went.
As the turrets in portal would say "I don't hate you" (just not with the part where I start shooting lasers at you)
Other then that awesome chapter, loved it ^^
Hate you? How could I do anything but like and respect what you've done? Great job sir.
I always thought it would be funny if one of these human-on-pony clops began with the human catching an accidental hoof upside the head and waking up a few days later. That's a good way to test the strength of a budding relationship.
Wasn't Bon talking to Lyra in another chapter with some magic radio thing at the front door?
Did she hear everything?
Is she crying or laughing herself to sleep?
or both?
I must know.
11,000 words of pure, unadulterated and all-around glorious clop.
MOAR, I SAY.
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Don't let any mare hear about this, about you...stamina mode.
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hhmmmm I thought I saw a "complete" tag on there somewhere...oh well!
I'll throw a like and a fav on there and wait for more.
10/10
Would fap again
Oh god. Oh god. IHAVETOSAVETHISCHAPTERFOREVERFORFUTUREREADINGAGAIN.
wow this chapter was so deliciously long. fucking thank you for that here i was scared of a chapter with only 2k words.
the moment i saw an update for this and the lenght of the chapter my immediate reaction was this
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really great job with the story and clop! i can only dread the inevitable end of this story
but lets make it as long as possible
mfw
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really great work on the story so far! im holding onto my butt eagerly.
I highly appreciate the detail you've put into this. Many (too many..) manage to squeeze love and passion into a few relatively loveless lines.
I predict a threesome
and I await it
Wonderful.
But "I’ll just have to make due" → "I’ll just have to make do"
Nice, hope he has the stamina to keep going.
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And Bon Bon is in the running very nice.
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Wait, people hate long chapters
5522806 I'm pretty sure Lyra was just talking to herself
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You should rate it 10/10 + 1 confused and shocked Bon Bon.
And I do have plans to keep this going!
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Please don't shoot me with lazorz! and thank you!
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Nope. That might have been a different fic. But that idea sounds like it would be fun.
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Yeah I agree. I hate it when fic's would build up a relationship and when they get to the actual love making act, it's short and dry. So I'm glad I could achieve the opposite of that.
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I have read fic's were people started complaining that the chapter was way to long and wordy. So I was hoping that didn't happen here.
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Yay!
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You know, I have seen your icon on a lot on stories I have liked. I think before you had an icon of Patric Star? But when ever I read a new story on this site I look for your name in the comments, because then I know it's going to be a good read.
With that said, I am honored that you like my story so much. It means a lot to me, and there are sequel plans. So this story might be ending soon, but a new one is around the corner.
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Hehe thanks man. I'm glad your still enjoying the story! It's an honor.
And I think we all know that Bon Bon needs some more loving in this fandom lol.
5524035 wow im surprised you remember my last avatar. Im flattered that you look for my comments and think so highly of me lol
Usually I mainly read HiE stories so that is probably where I post the most. Anyways you deserve all the praise and likes for story. You are a phenomenal writer and artist. Thanks for confirming the sequel
Hope to keep seeing more stories from you and thanks for taking time out of your day to write glorious mint plot
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And later in the evening, she uses her hooves to spell out S-I-L-L-Y-H-U-M-A-N on his stomach.
Also:
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Bwahahahaha!
Oh wow thank you for that. 10/10
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Yeah man. I used your name as like a quality control hehe. You have good test so it's good to see that my HiE fic caught your eye.
And I hope to bring more mint plot along with some nice creamy banana plot.
That's a good word for Bon Bon's coat right? Creamy banana?
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5524936 creamy bananas....creamy...banana....banana......banana.............
but holy shit are you looking to turn into one of my god tier plot authors with all these background pony plots?!
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Hahaha I love that Celestia.
And someone has to give these background ponies some loving.
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Was there a specific part of my comment that made you bust a gut, or was the whole thing LOL-worthy?
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> TFW someone beats you to the joke...
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Mmmm... yessssss.... "Loving..."
Ooh, sorry. Naughty thoughts.
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Let me know what you think of the clop.
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It was all good lol.
And yeah someones got to
sexlove these ponies up.5523416
Thank you! It's fixed now.
loved every bit of this chapter I know it was long and all but it was all worth it
oh and also
over 11 thousand words Holy Crap!
Oh man you got it so wrong about "the hard ridges on the roof of her mouth". The roof of a horse's mouth has lots of ridges, but its really rather soft, unlike humans. Anyone that has had to shove a syringe of meds way back into a horse's mouth knows this.
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She has love. She needs LUST tonight. I'm pretty sure the unobtainable Solar Goddess, the thousand-year exile Moon Regent, and the Forever Virgin Bookworm are all kinds of pent-up. So you pray to those when you need lust on your side.
5526534 Maybe, I just thought it was ironic is all. And what do you mean Forever Virgin? Twilight could get any pony she wanted to, if she wanted to.
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I can't say I have done this... But I fixed it for ya.
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This gets all of my yes's. 10/10