• Member Since 30th Apr, 2012
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Whendaylightends


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pretty damn good. Although, the sex scene confused me for a second. He was moving his hoof down below her stomach, then all of a sudden, his dick was inside her?

But, pretty good. 9.5/10. :twilightsmile:

Awesome! First!

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Crap, you beat me!

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>2012
>Still going "first"
>I seriously hope you guys don't do this

I don't know why this is drowning in downvotes.

It's nice enough, sure there's things I would edit but I'm liking it.

In sweat love? I think you mean "sweet" love.

Lol, thanks. :pinkiehappy: This is very bad. And, Thanks for the fixes on it, I kinda did this in a rush.

I don't see why it thumbs down so much, i find it quite enjoying.
I guess its those little mistakes that tick people off :rainbowdetermined2:

sorin is actually a prostitute Rd paid him with a pie unknowing of what he planed to do to her

War

You spelt "Apple Jack" wrong, it's "Applejack", anyway,this concept arouses my intrests, I will read later, but thumbs up for now.

things were too rushed but it's a good start :pinkiehappy:

BAHAHAHAHah--- Pie senses tingling DONT YOU DARE TOUCH MY PIE SOARIN :twilightangry2::flutterrage:

I don't know why but the sex scene seemed a bit..... short.:trixieshiftleft: But regardless, I liked it.:eeyup:

honestly? i dont get why so many dislikes. i loved it but then again i really love the SoarinDash pairing so yea :rainbowdetermined2:

Well i LOVED THIS :rainbowkiss: Mainly because there shipping is PERFECT :rainbowdetermined2: :heart: But erm some parts were a bit Derpy :derpytongue2:

:rainbowhuh: ya skipped ALOT... add more details plz

but over all i liked it

When are you going to update next? I love the story!

Pretty much im not gonna read even half way because ima wait for the full thing

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