I'm glad to see you back at it! This is one of my favorite stories dealing with a "human in Equestria" situation. Oh gosh, I'd completely forgotten about the phoenix tear! Jeez, you really had me goin' there!
... What is it with you and killing Twilight? Seriously, you need a different hobby, you can only do this so many times.
In all seriousness, I was happy to see that this had updated, and you didn't disappoint. I really liked this chapter, Twi killing included, although I did realise what was happening with the phoenix tear. The letters were brilliant, and showed how hard it must have been on RD and fluttershy. I look forward to seeing what happens next with this amazing story.
3687432 Oh, I've seen him. Anyway, I put your story in the "Read later" section. It looks great, and I'll try to start it tomorrow. But I might be busy writing my own story
I've seen this so many times for some reason... I've been thinking of reading this for so long... I've never had a harder "Do or do not read?"-moment in my life!
Sorry, there's just been a lot of life issues, like my job which changed from an on-call system (where I basically worked from home and could do whatever I liked till something happened) to an hourly system where I work from the company offices. And while I'm being paid CONSIDERABLY more, it's been the difference between holding a part-time and full-time job, and my free time has been considerably cut.
That said, I'm also trying to figure out where the next chapter will end, given I'm facing the familiar issue of events that sound short in my head becoming thousands of words on the page. Pacing is delicate, and mainly I'm worried about whether it will be this chapter, or a chapter later that I release a video alongside a chapter release. And of course, the logistics of the video come into the equation too.
Rest assured though, I'm trying to ensure the written part is done before touching animation stuff, because I know from experience that it's a dangerous hole to fall into.
4347077 Well that's a shame, though of course I'd disagree, mostly.
Admittedly, I couldn't give Corey a character gimmick to be defined by, because he's meant to represent the human people as a whole, and be one of the lenses through which the ponies glimpse humanity.
At the same time though, I've never intended him to be dull or one-note, and I've tried to inject him with little nuggets of personality here and there.
I appreciate hearing someone refer to a character of my own in terms that are neither of silent acceptance or praise. As very much a beginning writer, I DO want to know where I went wrong, when I do.
Rainbow stared at her as Twilight gazed off into space. “Before we kick Mandeville back to whatever hole he crawled out of! Stop looking at your hooves like you’re waiting your turn in front of a firing squad! “We’ve got this, it’s always been easier doing this stuff than waiting for it. Me? I can’t wait.”
I can't figure out who's speaking here.
Love the G1 names
“Corey Webber,” he answered, offering an open hand as he got up. “I’m a human.” The mare stared at his hand a moment, before looking at him in the eye. “Lyra Heartstrings. I don’t care.”
Heh. I see what you did there. Haha.
I'm curious as to how the trio captured and bound Twilight without getting caught by everyone around her, but I'm sure you'll explain at some point.
Unfazed, she tied her great horn around her neck, blowing into it experimentally before a mare she’d only ever met once walked up and hugged her.
I keep rereading this over and over again and I still have no fucking clue who or what you're talking about.
“Oh use my name why don’t you?! Rather than your pithy little nicknames, how about telling us you’ve cared at all or paid any attention to who we are?! Say my name! Say it!” -Rarity
The one reason she is my least liked of the Mane 6. I wouldn't talk to someone who said that to me for weeks.
LOL the best part of this whole chapter had to be Twilight walking in on Rarity and Corey! It's not every day somepony makes a mad search for one of her friends in a fit of concern, only to find them fornicating with some alien creature, and carry on afterwards!
I'm glad to see you back at it! This is one of my favorite stories dealing with a "human in Equestria" situation.
Oh gosh, I'd completely forgotten about the phoenix tear! Jeez, you really had me goin' there!
... What is it with you and killing Twilight? Seriously, you need a different hobby, you can only do this so many times.
In all seriousness, I was happy to see that this had updated, and you didn't disappoint. I really liked this chapter, Twi killing included, although I did realise what was happening with the phoenix tear. The letters were brilliant, and showed how hard it must have been on RD and fluttershy. I look forward to seeing what happens next with this amazing story.
Who did the cover art?
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A gentleman sometimes known as Faceless Jr, but mostly known as NiggerFaggot.
No, I'm serious. Check him out.
http://facelessjr.deviantart.com/
3687432 Oh, I've seen him. Anyway, I put your story in the "Read later" section. It looks great, and I'll try to start it tomorrow. But I might be busy writing my own story
3686687 Twilight is the new Rory.
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That's it!
I can't believe that eleven thousand words went by so quickly...
I've seen this so many times for some reason...
I've been thinking of reading this for so long...
I've never had a harder "Do or do not read?"-moment in my life!
Hey! You're alive! Yay!
Also, good chapter! And I look forward to the next one!
~ Super-Brony12
...Don't mind me I've just been waiting for the next chapter here for about 6 months now. Whens the next chapter going to be out?
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I'm working hard to make that happen.
Sorry, there's just been a lot of life issues, like my job which changed from an on-call system (where I basically worked from home and could do whatever I liked till something happened) to an hourly system where I work from the company offices. And while I'm being paid CONSIDERABLY more, it's been the difference between holding a part-time and full-time job, and my free time has been considerably cut.
That said, I'm also trying to figure out where the next chapter will end, given I'm facing the familiar issue of events that sound short in my head becoming thousands of words on the page. Pacing is delicate, and mainly I'm worried about whether it will be this chapter, or a chapter later that I release a video alongside a chapter release. And of course, the logistics of the video come into the equation too.
Rest assured though, I'm trying to ensure the written part is done before touching animation stuff, because I know from experience that it's a dangerous hole to fall into.
4347077
Well that's a shame, though of course I'd disagree, mostly.
Admittedly, I couldn't give Corey a character gimmick to be defined by, because he's meant to represent the human people as a whole, and be one of the lenses through which the ponies glimpse humanity.
At the same time though, I've never intended him to be dull or one-note, and I've tried to inject him with little nuggets of personality here and there.
I appreciate hearing someone refer to a character of my own in terms that are neither of silent acceptance or praise. As very much a beginning writer, I DO want to know where I went wrong, when I do.
I can't figure out who's speaking here.
Love the G1 names
Heh. I see what you did there. Haha.
I'm curious as to how the trio captured and bound Twilight without getting caught by everyone around her, but I'm sure you'll explain at some point.
I keep rereading this over and over again and I still have no fucking clue who or what you're talking about.
“Oh use my name why don’t you?! Rather than your pithy little nicknames, how about telling us you’ve cared at all or paid any attention to who we are?! Say my name! Say it!” -Rarity
The one reason she is my least liked of the Mane 6. I wouldn't talk to someone who said that to me for weeks.
LOL the best part of this whole chapter had to be Twilight walking in on Rarity and Corey! It's not every day somepony makes a mad search for one of her friends in a fit of concern, only to find them fornicating with some alien creature, and carry on afterwards!