>male
eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeh

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it is surprisingly not bad though

there's a boat load of mind control fics on MLP, there's a boatload of clopfics. Only the combination with maledom get complained about

Actually really charmingly written! I like the playful style you've got going on quite a bit.

i think is ok, way better than that diaper crap or some other weird fetishes one seem to find around

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>not liking sex slavery
>not giving like
>not wanting to be raped and abused in sexual ways
I'm sorry op, but your diagnosis is faggot cancer.

5268051 You're on a site where sex are always featured. The majority of them contain rape, female domination, and foalcon...
If you don't like these type ps stories please leave every story you find the "sex" and "mature" tag together and never comment here again.

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Actually, I've seen quite a lot of clop fics featuring an original male character fucking the Mane 6, and most of them had a better like-dislike ratio than this.

Either you wrote something controversial (most likely), or your story just sucks.

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this is a mind control story

Oh man I want to downvote this so bad but how can I ruin the perfect symmetry of 96 likes to 69 dislikes? Impossible.

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After reading way more of this story than I ever planned to, I believe I know why this fic has received so many downvotes.

Number One:

He was sitting on Rarity's miniature stage, surrounded by three full-height mirrors as he, idly ranunning his fingers through his hair, gazingas he looked at his reflection with no small measure of self-satisfaction. HBut he stopped aswhen Fluttershy came in, rising slowly and confidently to his feet. Her eyes fell across his, muscles as they rolled in powerfuling in waves that made her heart thump in her chest.

*running
*gazing as
*But
*as when
*powerful
Get rid of the "as he" in the first sentence and the "in" after powerful
This is just one example paragraph. The whole Third Chapter is like this, with one paragraph even duplicated!
The fic is rough and unpolished and at times incomprehensible.

Number Two:
It's pure smut. It is doubtlessly erotic, but it lacks character development, imagery, conflict. The characters are singlemindedly focused on sex. The imagery is sex. The conflict is sex. The emotions are sex.
Not that you can't write a fic like that, but this fic has very little non-sexual value.

Number Three:
The Controversy. This fic is sexist and objectifies women to an extreme I've not seen in any other clopfic. That turns a lot of people off and makes some dislike on principle.

So there you have it.

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Oh, I put the unedited version up by mistake... Give me a moment and I'll fix it.

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you can downvote the story as long as I can upvote zangief

5273536

Nooooo, your perfect ratio D:

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>wanting to downvote a story because it is not your fetish

how ignorant can u get

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And you are basing your upvote entirely on whether it fulfills your fetish regardless of the quality of the writing. I see no particular reason not to downvote this, which I still haven't done, in any case.

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you're wrong tho

my secret is that i never upvote or downvote anything

5273536
You, my friend are a fuckin' genius! My only concern is that the story's title "Slavery is Magic" may have been misconstrued by some would-be readers, and contributed to the surprisingly large number of downvotes that this story has, but definitely doesn't deserve.

This story embodies everything that is great and terrible in hentai. I guess that's why I liked it :D

I LOVE THIS! Cam't wait to see Twilight get DOMINATED!!

Worth a follow and a favorite! I can see a lot of work went into this story.

5297224 more like pent up than just slutty

When do we get to see the next part?

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no fuck you, if you false advertise you DO deserve a bad rep,

Don't mind me, just waiting for an update.

Hey... this is on hentai-foundry as well isn't it!

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5644604

Actually, Chapter 6 is written! I make my stuff available to Patreon subscribers a month before I upload it, it's going up on the 17th of March. So get hype for that I guess~

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It is! And also available on my personal website. I wasn't going to upload any of my writing on Fimfiction, but a friend insisted I put it all up, so it just kinda happened.

He cried out again and again, his abused, worn-out cock seemingly finally ready to go limp after his fourteenth ejaculation over the last few hours!

You sure Dusk isn't some kind of male alien/succubus? That's a lot of orgasms, even for an earth pony...