It told me to put my bio in this box. But I don't know what a bio is.
Onyx Stiel, Princess Luna's best student, an expert in the field of Dark Magic and somepony with a certain 'undesirable trait'.
As he returns to Ponyville to continue his studies of Dark Magic with the help of his assistant Ash Crucible, he discovers a great number of things have changed since his last visit.
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Come back when you can write a thousand word chapter.
I'm just gonna say this outright straight:
this is crapyou shouldn't have written this. At least do 1000 words chapters!C'mon, you almost had 1,000 words in the first chapter!
Just describe things In more detail and you'll get to 1,000 in no time
Double space the paragraphs and indent new ones. It makes massive blocks of text go away.
Yeah I'm sorry, but this is baaaaaad. You have decent story telling skills, I'll give you that. But the rest? You need to practice writing and read some books before you post another chapter. A lot of detail goes a long way here on this site.
Allow me to give you your first like. I'm not saying it's perfect but it's not bad. It just needs a good edit to make it better. I would be glad to be a proof reader for you should you want my assistance. Until then, keep writing and perhaps read over each chapter before posting it (advice that I should probably listen to myself).