There's a small error during the oral scene, "virgin cock" ought to be "virgin throat."

I likenthat this is portrayed in horrible terms, so tere's no mistaking this for a work designed to arouse, but still, I find that it gets a bit overmuch when so much focus is put on how putrid someone smells when they also are having sex.

At least he was properly Hannibal Lecter-ish with his common rape-apologist tropes like "arousal equals consent/curiosity" and "I can be a di k because someone was a dick to me." Even nameless he's striking. I hate him already.

4754951 First, thank you for the spelling correction, much appreciated. Two, thank you for comparing him to hannibal Lector. my favorite villains/antagonists are ones who revel in what they do but can also make their victims question themselves and Hannibal is one of the best at that.

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This guy seems to fall somewhere between Hannibal Lecter and and Emperor Palpatine given his magic powers and ability to say things that try to convince others that they are following his plans.

home come only positive comment and thumb downs?....

4757295 Well you see, people judge the fic based on what its about and thumb it down. Furthermore, I have more favorites then I do thumbs down, meaning that there is a higher favorable response but people are forgetting to also give it a thumbs up. Thats why I base my success not on thumbs up and down or views, but on favorites.

4758208 i can't see your favorites though :l ....

4759656 Then this is one of those dangerous ties in life when you must read the fic yourself in order to know if it is good or not because it has yet to be added to the group that would get it to an at least 50/50 ratio.

4759656 or you can click on statistics down on the same bar as the where the mane characters are listed and thatll tell you

4759674 ah i see of course....

4759688 and then one would realize I was wrong about having ore favorites and dislikes and might realize that I write most of this stuff for fun and practice and only really care for the constructive criticism I have received in the comments, not if what I write is beloved by the public. Not that it doesn't make me smile when people do enjoy it.